After the Ray Sphere blast in Empire City, Cole MacGrath thought that no one but him would use their powers for good.
He was wrong.
During his war on the Reapers and Sasha, he meets a group of conduits that have formed a little crime fighting team to clean up the streets of the Neon District.
And as they begin to unravel the mystery of the blast and beyond, they realize that they need each other now more than ever if they are to survive.
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Chapters (8)
I like it so far. However you rely need to slow down and make each chapter more substantial.
I want to try and get through inFAMOUS 1 as fast as possible so that inFAMOUS 2 will take up more of the story. But I do see what you mean.
Hmm, I'm intreged, this will be interesting. 10 bits that Raity is the one with earth bending powers.
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just imagine that after you said that she can only choke them with fabric. XD
A few comments: don't add in the foot notes, remove the numbers from the text and just quote the surrounding words/ sentence in the AN. Also, I thought phreaking the phone lines went out of style twenty-five years ago?
A lot of the talking in the games is on the phone, so...yeah
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Sorry if the chapters seem a bit Short, but I started writing a couple of months ago.
3438881You know what they say,
"Greatness from small beginnings."
Eeyup
To short
Try to make it at less 2000 words pls
Working on making longer chapters. It takes time, but I will try making longer chapters.
the mystery girl is luna
4078310 I said that she used the names of one of her relatives because she didn't trust John.
but you are close.
Hint: Its an OC
please don't comment your answer for spoilers sake.
If you want to guess who the mystery girl is, please keep it to yourself.
I'm not being rude, but I want the comments to be as spoiler-free as possible.
The only problem I have with this chapter is that you used the wrong music for the fight. My advise, look for the song "Dinner With Sasha," that way the scene can match up to the game.
4627933 I listened to it, but I didn't like it.
Though I see where you are coming from.
Sidenote: How do you like the fight scenes?
4628045 Nicely done, with a side of awesomeness.
4628062 thank you
I like, could be a little longer, and some grammar mistakes, but i like.
4634929 Feel free to point out any grammar mistakes I made.
The less there are, the better.
And I am working on longer chapters.
Hope you enjoy the story more in the future!
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Are you mad?
What? Just no What? Ugh
4643778 Let me guess, your mad about the character and the "emotional" scene at the end that I fucked up on.
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Go read my latest blog, it explains everything.
4643887 you didn't mess up why did you get past sins up in here.
P.S. No I'am not piss off
4645462 it's just the character.
She will have an effect on the story, just in the later chapters.
i feel "nightmare moon" is luna
4740502 Some people already know who she is, but I took that chapter down for a (slow) rewrite.
4740525 srry i thought you didn't rewrite the chapter
4742317 chapter 7 was put out to fast, and thus I am rewriting it
4742647 ah hey is it alright if i ask something?
4742670 sure
I encourage questions.
4742673 is it possible to have my OC in the story. yes or no is fine
4742683 PM me your OC.
4742690 hey i have an idea. when they fight aldin have him defeat coal and the mane six and have draco save them with a fire granade
4744800 I already have the fight planned out. your OC will (sadly) not be in this story.
But there is possibility with a sequel.
4745838 im fine with that. in the sequel will he still be friends with the mane six
4746040 you'll find out in the (possible) sequel.
4746694 so when is the next chapter
4746694 sup