Twilight Sparkle uncovers archives showing some of Celestia's secrets, and discovers other special ponies.
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I like the resolution in the end. No drama, but joy about the possibilities.
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I might pick this up again, but it's at a decent ending right now and I have no plans.
I really liked this
Good story. I was getting slightly afraid near the end that it wouldn't have a happy ending (I really don't get MLP fanfic with sad endings...), but it recovered, and with just the right amount of conflict and tension too.
I also haven't read many alicorn-Twilight stories, since I feel like there's not enough base material for that in the show yet, but that wasn't a problem with this one.
Celestia Is such a manipulative bitch!
The only problem is your slight implication that Granny Smith is around 400 years old.
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In Winter Wrapup, Twilight Sparkle says, "No Spike, Ponyville was started by Earth ponies, so for hundreds of years they've never used magic to clean up winter. It's traditional."
So she's at least, say, 175, bare minimum. At that point we know that ponies live way longer or the years are way shorter or some combination of the two. So I roughly doubled it to 340 and went with that.
Now, if you think she meant 'earth ponies' and not 'Ponyville', there are other reasons to think the years don't last as long as ours:
- Their yearly cycle clearly doesn't work like ours at all.
- Reunions happen 'every hundred moons' (for us, 8 1/3 years or so) and we've already seen 2 of them. Though the one in the opening episode could have been off-schedule and just for the Summer Sun Celebration, no one mentioned this being awfully soon after the last one, which suggests it wasn't all THAT much sooner than normal.
- It would explain the apparent age-stasis of the foals: if they've aged the scaled equivalent of half a year instead of 2 years, we wouldn't expect to see much of a difference.
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She was doing what she had to do to make sure that Equestria had a capable defense against a deity-level threat. A bit of snooping is justified.
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If you put it in that persepctive, a millenium shouldn't be long at all.
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Proportionally speaking, it'd still be longer than the USA has existed to date. A fair hunk of time has elapsed.
I like that it was the manipulation of someone OTHER than her that caused Twilight angst.
Because, yes, the devotion between the Batmare (hint: NOT Luna) and her playing pieces is very much real. So why should the recently promoted pawn (although she was more like a knight or even rook even to begin with) flinch from the touch of the chessmaster?
I enjoyed this story.
It takes the idea that Celestia actually had more than a vague plan to send Twilight to Ponyville and hope she made friends and found the elements of harmony and shows the level of preparation and planning involved. I do like the idea that the Rainbow Dash statement, that she may not be the best 'Loyalty' she would, more importantly, be a good friend. That the harmony between the elements was more important than how well each fit the role.
There is no need for a follow-up story to this. It's well-written, very well thought-out and certainly pulls the reader in. Twilight is surprised at the level of manipulation needed to pull this sort of thing off, and in the end accepts the results. However I have to confess it might be an interesting tale in itself if the remaining members of the 'B Team' were to meet.
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I obviously didn't include this in the story, but as I was imagining this, they met shortly after. Why go to such trouble to arrange ponies to be able to be epically good friends and then allow them to pass in the night?
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I just realized I mucked up basic arithmetic. The 400 years is now 300 years. Not that it changes your point.
This was a joy to read and I believe the premise of Celestia farming candidates for the bearers ahead of time and the idea of a B-team is a fandom-classic, top-notch idea, and I feel you rightfully and brilliantly laced the timeline matching in there, but I think Twilight would have a much stronger, conflicted reaction to all of this. Would the same Twilight who went up everyone during her brothers wedding be so fearful in speaking her mind to Celestia about the possibility of her friends being artificial and possible friends being "relieved of their service"? And at the same time, the whole series of events allowed her to become an alicorn, so she has never been more grateful to Celestia. I definitely think this premise should be expanded into a sort of drama where the new Princess Twilight Sparkle learns about the sacrifices and necessities of ruling or something. Anyway, this is amazing as is and keep up the awesome work!
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The TS who went up to everyone about Cadence was trying to avert catastrophe. Here, it would be completely unnecessary. I'm not sure where she was afraid of approaching Celestia about the nature of her friendship, though.
Oh, you will be back. Again. :)
Can't leave those dangling plots:
PS.
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More serious was your attempting to threaten him, however obliquely, without checking with Fluttershy.
-your attempt
Applejack looked to Twilight and whispered. "She knows a whole lot 'bout us. Why is that?
-He knows
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You didn't know about me when you first met, did you?
-we first met
I have a royal decree from princess Celestia.
-Princess
Yes, Totally, Cadence.
-totally
Gah! How did that first section on the chariots get in there? I meant to cut it... SNIP
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> Oh, you will be back. Again. :)
> Can't leave those dangling plots:
Nope. Actually, this was 90% written before I pushed part 1. I just figured out how to make the scene gel properly.
As for the secrets, I was leaving room for the canon show to include one or two. And on RD, well, it would just be some ancient speedster.
Attempt vs attempting: either works. They are both nouns, one being the noun for the thing, the other being the gerund of the verb. The second appeals to me more as it is more active.
Thanks on the others.