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please note, this a total re-write form almost scratch, not just a clean up job on my first version of this

Immortals, men and women who live for hundreds, even thousands of years. They have lived among us since the birth of mankind, hiding in the shadows. Some of them cut a path of destruction through the centuries to satisfy their own selfish greed, seeing mortals as mere play things, but others act as heroes and use their gift to protect mankind. There is one thing that binds all immortals, both good and evil, there is a creed that holds for all of them:

There can be only one.

When one immortal challenges another, they fight to the death. The winner takes the losers head, and their strength and knowledge with it. There is one rule immortals must follow, inside or outside of these duels, they cannot kill on holy ground.

One of these heroes is Duncan MacLeod, a warrior born over 400 years ago in the Scottish Highlands. For centuries he has stood a silent protector, facing evil immortals and protecting the human race. He has fought with freedom fighters to over-throw dictators, and led oppressed peoples to freedom. He even fought in the American Civil War, and helped lead freed slaves to safety.

Now, an evil from another world sets her sights on him.

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Comments ( 24 )

Not gonna lie, I've been hoping for this sort of story. Now, to see what you've done with it....

2386028 And is good. :moustache:

But I never took Duncan for a moron....

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"Honor before reason" and "Death Before Dishonor" remember Chivalry and how many times he's offered his head to save someone?

2387192 But he's doing the exact opposite of that, though. He's doing something quite dumb for no particular reason.

He's found her way home and the one she followed in, but instead of bringing her to it, he's going DERP BUG PONI MUST FOLLOW INTO GLOWY LIGHT.

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Plot convince is a ass, maybe I can hand-wave it by having her say she used a bit of that hypnotic gaze, I did bring her eyes up as his point of attention a lot and she is pretty much a succubus after all.

2387275 Hmm, that would make it a lot more convincing.

Another thought, one that might work, I don't know, is maybe have her take the filly with her, so Duncan heads through after her. Yes, she's in her own world, but at the same time, she's with someone he's 99.99% sure means her harm, so he's gonna kick down the door to her hive regardless.

Tbh, I'm not enamoured with an Immortal being able to fall victim to the glowy eyes hypnosis deal, simply because he's seen so, so much and there's that level of jaded that comes part and parcel with being an Immortal, but it's 100% your story. However you choose to do it, I look forward to it.

You've got some grammatical and sentence skill, and you can carry across your ideas quite well. This is definitely going places.

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Let me do that, I know a way to make the change quick.

2387497 Awesome!

I'm glad I could help make this even better.

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Thanks, take a look at the end now.

Perfect. Could use a bit of a grammatical tweak, but otherwise, perfect. And the knocking on the door even explains how she snuck her out from under the noses of the others.

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Actually, she knocked Richie out and beat on the door to get Duncan's attention.

Highlander/My Little Pony? Now this will be good.

Leave it to Pinkie to make a immortal to feel really wierded out. :pinkiehappy:

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Leave it her to be able to sneak up on one in the first place XD.

To quote The SpoonyOne, "There can only be one YOU IMMORTAL BUCK!" I may have only seen bits of the cartoon, bits of all the movies, except Endgame, which was the firs t film I watched in full, I likel the series. Keep it up.

Fuck me with a flaming badger it's alive

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Yeah, my proof-reader took a little month off due to being overworked, so this chapter sat finished for quite a while on the editing room floor.

Kind of wish it was Conner Mcleod instead of Duncan, but I'm not complaining.

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Sorry for the late reply, but I was never told about this comment XD.

Have you seen Endgame?

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Yes, I have seen Endgame, its a decent film.(Though I personally only cared for the original Highlander, the TV series and the Search For Vengeance animated film.)

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Then you know using Connor might have been a bit hard XD. I already used my one revival credit.

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