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All good things must come to an end. So too for all bad things. Whether my time on this site qualified as good or bad, I'm not sure. It is over, though. That is something I am sure of. Farewell.

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Isn't it strange how all what was nothing one minute can be all that matters to you the next? Vinyl Scratch goes to the Celebration of Equestrian Music, where music is all that matters. But while she's there, she spots something she didn't expect to see, and now all that matters is making sure her eyes do not leave the sight.
Thank you for reading this and enjoying it (or not), and please tell me what you think of it in the comments. Pull no punches, I want to know how it is.
Cloudy Skies, Yayflutters, and Mysteriousstranger are all great writers who I would like to thank for inspiration. Thetwentiest would normally be on this list, but since he writes so rarely I literally thought he had died, his position has been sold to both ShotgunNeko and Appledashfan132 until further notice.
If you enjoyed this and want to read more, take a look at "The Days to Remember" by Appledashfan132, as it was co-written by me.

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Mentions of situations of the actual show, I like that! :pinkiehappy:

I want to say something funny,
But i have no idea who Octavia or Vinyl Scratch are,
So instead heres a muffin.
*Hands you a muffin shaped like a thumbs up*

3403388
Ehem
1.Octavia is cute
2.Vinyl looks like a jerk
3.I have never seen the show.

3403409 Might I ask what you are doing on an MLP fanfiction site then?

3403535
Heh,
Well the answer is simple,
While the show is for children,
and its just silly nonsence,
The stories on here are anything but.
While some are less then mature,
Many carry great intellectual and emotion weight,
I often find myself breaking out in tears,
or contemplating deep moral quandries.

3403741 ...I never thought of that. I am impressed.

I think this is my favourite fic that uve written so far! Octascratch is my new otp....and this was a really sweet fic! To garner more attention I would suggest u add it to the shipping group under vinyl and Octavia as well as some of the more popular octascratch groups....seriously this is good stuff!

3403933 Thanks. I consider this to be my greatest work as well.

I gotta say, this one caught me by surprise. I found it in the new stories list, and when I read the description I decided to put it into my read-later list, thinking there were going to be more than one chapter. I looked at my list and noticed it was a one-shot and immediately read it. I hope this story gets a bit more recognition, because you did very well for portraying these characters in so few words. It's always refreshing to see a different take on these two, and that's pretty awesome you managed to do so this well.

3405722 Different take? I don't know, they seem to fit their general fanon pretty well if you ask me. And I wrote it.

3406402 What I meant is that the usual Vinyl is a very brash, messy, and loudmouthed Manehatten pony. Octavia on the other hand is a quiet, stuck up, somewhat prejudiced, and very traditional Canterlonian. I've read a lot of Tavi/scratch, and those are pretty general cookie-cutter versions of them. I enjoy your take on them because they differ from that, being a little more normal.

Octavia on the other hand is a quiet, stuck up, somewhat prejudiced, and very traditional Canterlonian.

Read this and you may change your mind.

3734079 Well? Any criticisims?

Umm... try as I might, I can't find anything wrong with it. It's amazingly well written, I couldn't even find a spelling error. The storyline is nice, even though I'm not a big fan of 'fillyfoolers', and was still engaging despite the fact that kind of story usually turns me away. :derpytongue2:

I really don't have anything else to say, but if you ask me a specific question, I can give you a more specific answer. Sorry, that's just me...

Anywho, great job! :twilightsmile:

3734133 God damn it. No matter who I ask to look at any of my stories, they seldom find anything wrong with them, meaning improvement is insanely difficult. Are you really sure there was absolutely nothing whatsoever that could possibly be improved in even the slightest way?

3734133 Wait... you are not a fan of fillyfoolers? Is this only in the online ponyxpony sense, or in real life as well?

Okay, well, I guess the part about her getting beaten up her dream could have been a bit dramatic, but then again she was having a nightmare, so it actually makes sense. So that's out.

Uh... oh! Octavia is generally a little more reserved and well mannered, so I don't think she would be all that willing to associate with Vinyl, whom she would view as lower-class. Plus, I never really thought she would get drunk. Of course, that might just be my opinion.

Let's see... I think that might be it. You know what they say. You can't mess with perfection. At some point, your stories will be 'finished' and in no more need of help from reviews.

You could probably find someone to do an incredibly detailed analysis on your story to break it down and find anything that could be wrong with it. Might be hard to find someone like though.

So, yeah. Great story, not really anything to improve it seems. :twilightsmile:

3734216 Well, it's less to improve this story and more to know how to write subsequent stories better. I do need to restate a question from earlier; is your dislike of 'fillyfoolers' only in the pony x pony sense here on this site, or is it in real life as well?

Well, both. BUT, I will not treat others harshly because of it . I'll still be friends and be nice, I just don't approve of what they do.

Also, I just convinced myself to break down your story and write a detailed analysis of everything I can. I've been wanting do something like that, and it just clicked this is a perfect opportunity to see if I'm any good at it. :raritywink:

What's up with haters eh?

Me I have no problem with same-sex relations, fictional or otherwise, each to his own and all that right?

Personally I thought this fic is great and I liked Vinyl's personality. Really classy work there!

3818218 Thanks! And regardless, I've managed to set up a barrier between me and the homophobe that should work until Knighty finishes up that block user feature.

The only flaw I can find is one teensy tiny little consistency error and it's only in capitalization.

I decided then not to mention that I was the one who had written The Exodus.

In this "the" is capitalized in The Exodus but later,

"Buck. Not that song, anything but that one. Not the Exodus."

Now "the" is not capitalized. So pick one and stick with it, eh?
Other than that it's basically perfect and I hope to see future work from you down the road. :twilightsmile:

3852235 Please for the love of god find something else wrong with it.

Is this what you were thinking of for 'Deity in Flames?'

6145993 I am laughing so hard right now. You're right, but the contest never went anywhere and the associated story no longer exsits. Sorry 'bout that.

I'm right, this song is awesome, and you are awesome for knowing it. That's all that that matters in my book, friend.

6146261 *slow clap*

I honestly cannot tell if that was intentional or not. The thing is, if I had written this story now, I probably would have had the song be "Morning of Triumph", and The Exodus (AKA The Genesis) would be The Hydra lies Dying or some such.

6146292 The dragon lies bleeding?

Hell yes, Hammerfall is amazing. Do you think if a bunch of bat-ponies gathered up as a band, they would have called themselves 'Hydrapower' and made 'Symphony of Luna'?

6146346 Absolutely.

Huh, maybe I should write a sequel.

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