No longer able to handle the stress of being a Wonderbolt, Soarin goes on a break and heads to Ponyville. While he's there, he comes across Rainbow Dash at a party and the two start to become more fascinated with each other. ANTHRO.
Hello again. Keeping it up with good fics. This one seems promising good first chapter and great job on Soarin's characterization so far faving so I don't miss anything
So far so good, I sense I shall really enjoy this story.
And now, some grammar fix suggestions!
...When I used to feel free in the air, I know feel caged.” Soaring continued.
This part doesn't really seem to make much sense, at a glance. I suggest changing 'When' to 'While' or just remove it entirely. The 'know' should be 'now', and you spelled Soarin with a g. An easy fix, but I thought I should point it out.
Promising, i'll have to keep an eye on this
2357695 Thanks! I'll try to write more as soon as possible.
so far so great xD
2358045 Thank you! Hope you enjoy what's left to come!
Hello again. Keeping it up with good fics. This one seems promising good first chapter and great job on Soarin's characterization so far faving so I don't miss anything
Me like the beginning of this...
So far so good, I sense I shall really enjoy this story.
And now, some grammar fix suggestions!
This part doesn't really seem to make much sense, at a glance. I suggest changing 'When' to 'While' or just remove it entirely. The 'know' should be 'now', and you spelled Soarin with a g. An easy fix, but I thought I should point it out.
you had my curiosity, now you have my attention