i'm a wolf with a crazy imagination.
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First off you should have an oc tag. Secondly you need a editor. For instances in the description when you say decade I assume you mean to say decays. Decade is ten years. Decay is when the body slowly rots away, being used as food for worms and scavengers. I could take a shot at editing this chapter but I'm the middle of writing two or three stories of my own
Here, see how this differs.
this here is what you have for the first paragraph
Now this is it with a little bit better flow without really changing whats going on. Just put together quickly in the last few minutes of study hall
I agree with 2296958 you need an editor. I mean, I guess the premise isn't bad but the execution is what I find lacking
GAH MAN. but question is who will be my editor. i'm mostly do my own editing
2297824
Well I can take a shot at edittig your first chapter today if you want. I'm home alone and most certainly not skipping school tomorrow. Nope, not at all. I have some free time for once though
2297888 sure if you can and if it's no trouble at all. but please send it back ok. this is my first story that i'm making with lots of gore and blood and mostly torture in it.
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