Twilight writes a letter to Celestia about how she ended up getting together with Rarity. I don't exactly know what to call this story, nor do I know why I wanted to write it in first person, but I tried to aim for a general all around story. I tried to do something like this because of a comment on my first story. Hope you all like it.
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Neither the chapter name, nor story title is correct. I refuse to read this.
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well fuck you then.
2212932 Because it's my fault the author can't even take the time to proof his own story's front page? If a story about Twilight, the most learned pony outside of the princesses, can't even have a grammatically correct title, then what does that say about the rest of the story?
I'm 99% certain that that is not what the story is about, either. Please, take your childish remarks somewhere else. Maybe they'll matter when the author starts to care about his/her own stuff.
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Shhh no tears...
Only dreams now
Unrustle your jimmies
2213092 Nice attempt at trolling, and nice assumption that my jimmies are rustled. I am, of course, lying. I was laughing with my editors at your childish attempts of comeback-ery and this poor excuse of fiction.
2213080 I understand that you may not like the story, but please don't use the comment section as a place to argue. I'm sorry that you didn't like it and yes I probably will have to look it over one more time. I wrote this in little time and I didn't really like it at first, but one of my friends told me that the story was okay so I posted it. I guess I misjudged the quality of my story, but please do not imply that I don't care about my writing. Like I say in all of my stories constructive criticism is always appreciated, however if you don't like the story then don't make a scene about it. Thanks for pointing out my mistake and I shall try to work on that.
'Till next time
Jo
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Yes see, I attacked you and then you attacked the author in some kind of egotistical bitchfit. That's grossly immature dude, I didn't write the story, so why'd you start being such a cunt about it. Jesus fuck calm down and unrustle yourself kid.
Another thing, you should try giving out constructive criticism next time instead of using childish insults, you are the reason the trainwreck explorers started moderating themselves, and probably why they got banned.
It was OK, not outright terrible. I think it's just me but I dislike first person stories in general (which is strange because I'm writing one), try showing the reader whats going on more instead of telling them, which is admittedly very hard to do in first person stories. I'd ask someone who actually knows what they're talking about.
Oh, and refusing to read something because a word is missing in the description is not acceptable business conduct.
2213313 Because I'm the one that made a scene. I pointed out that not even the Story name or chapter name were correct. The other guy started shit. I then pointed out that the description was also probably wrong and you just admitted that you didn't really care about it yourself. You only posted it because a friend thought you should. You implied it yourself. As I said. I'm not even going to open a single chapter of a story that the author can't even make the front page of worthwhile.
Spelling isn't even something that hard to do since browsers, gdocs, word, and most other word processing software has a spell-checker to fix stuff like that. You didn't even put effort into it, so there isn't anything constructive I could say to you about it. No effort on the author's part = No effort from the audience.
2213428 I didn't read it because the Story and chapter names were spelled incorrectly, in two different ways, something that could have been fixed with just a cursory glance. The rest was noticed after finally reading the description.
Implying that I was a part of the TWE. Seriously. If the author cared, then this stuff would have been caught right off. I would also like to point out that none of it is fixed yet, either.
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Do you have some form of autism? Why do you care about grammer so much.
Again, I must ask that unrustle yourself good sir.
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Ignore him, he's always been a trouble-maker.
2213531 Without proper grammar, you can't have structure, and without a proper structure, anything would fall apart. Case and point.
2213577 I know, I've seen plenty of his other stuff across other stories. It's fun, though.
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>circlejerking
Well, I'll just leave you to lovers alone then.
My advice:
- Fix the spelling errors on your title and chapter name (just cut and paste onto a word document/google docs and run a spell checker, but I'll tell you what the problem is anyway: recollection has two Ls.)
- Delete all unhelpful comments that popped up after you first posted this.
- Take some pride in your work, then ask Peppy Greyskull if he/she would revisit your story and make some actual critique (and me, as well.) I'd change that description, too. Tell us what the story is about, not about why you wrote it. Leave that for the author's note (which FIMfiction has an awesome version of that removes the need for such comments in the description.)
- You probably need a proofreader. There's no shame in that, by the way. Proofreaders help you to become a better writer by pointing out errors and giving advice on how to write better. Also see this. To be clear, I have been writing for many years, and I have both read that document on how to write fanfiction well, and I have a proofreader. Always be looking to improve your writing, it'll give you an awesome sense of satisfaction. And I also know that friends are perhaps not the best critics ever.