>Author's note: This is a collab between me and my three friends, the same ones within this story.<
Me and my three friends Sarah, Miles, and Bridget all end up in the colorful world of Equestria. We, as any other bronies, dream of coming across this land and becoming ponies ourselves. We may not actually be prepared for what may be coming over the horizon as we go through life here. We hope our identities are never discovered and we can live the life we have always wanted to live.
P.s: I apologize majorly for no pic, I will try to get one there eventually.
Chapters (7)
An easy way to determine if one should use the subject I or the object me is to remove extraneous words. For example, of the two sentences below, which one is correct?
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1. That does sound better, I will correct that shortly
2. Did I make that mistake somewhere or was it just an example of what you were talking about?
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It's not just a question of sounding better; it's a matter of writing properly, in accordance with the rules of the English language.
That was just an example, but you'd do well to review your fic for similar mistakes.
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I make those sorts of mistakes all the time, I try to fix them as I go but I always miss at least one. Thanks for giving me a heads up and advice though!
Nice job!
So far... Heheheheh...
Lol.
I'm enjoying this. I do wish you has longer chapters however. Chapter 1 & 2 could be combined. Keep it up!
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Chapter 1 and 2 are meant to convey two separate things, they is why they were not combined. Also, I always have the tendency to always make a little over 1k word chapters. I type up a chapter, then I look at the word count and it is always 1k. I may be able to make longer chapters when I have more then one day to come up with them and have true contact with the other collaborators.
>>Masterofworlds22
Thanks! I came up with that one myself! (Yes, I am one of the collaborators. Sneaks can tell you.)
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Yes you are.
Hey guys! You guys are about to get a chapter that is entirely the POV of one of the characters!
mt name is Bridget
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Cool! I think you meant "my" instead of "mt" though. Also, you may be able to relate to my friend then!
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depends on if she is a tomboy or a girly girl
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She is definitely not a girly girl. She would be considered a tomboy.
>> Pen Brush
Well, she's not as tomboyish as me (I bet you can figure out who I am) but yeah...
SNEAKS! Quit changing what my cutie mark is. It. Is. Ouboros. And besides, you didn't change it in the first chapter so they know me for having my curule mark as Ouboros. Change it.
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I may change it in the future. They portray THE EXACT SAME THING so there is no real reason why a dragon eye wouldn't be better.
TwiDash and AppleDash are AWESOME!
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I've no idea what that has to do with this story but I agree