[Second Person Perspective]
Struggling to keep your apartment, you had taken an offer of a loan from somepony who, in exchange, asked for some help in a little 'family business' as they described it. If only you knew what this business actually was. This is how you became the whippingcolt for one of the most nefarious groups in Manehattan.
You are scum. You are less than scum. That is what you are reminded of each and every day.
One day, you get left for dead in the woods. You wake up in a little cottage full of animals with your wound cleaned, your vest patched, and a light yellow mare called Fluttershy taking care of you. The first pony who had ever shown you kindness. Without any hesitation, she's willing to provide you with food, warmth, and shelter. It seems too good to be true.
All too soon, your miserable life quickly catches back up to you and threatens to drag Fluttershy down as well. What would you do and how far would you go for the timid pegasus who found you?
Art by Azenge.
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This sounds interesting. Lets see where this goes
On one hand, I really want to read this because you seem to always put out your best effort into great stories, but on the other hand its a sad romance... I might not be able to handle the feels.
i would give up everything for the ones i love even if it meant giving up something i love the most. why doe everything we love get dragged down by our past. one last thing keep up the great work
Your description hooked me in. I'm definitely going to have to give this a read.
Don't know if I'll be able to handle the inevitable feels in this story, but that description is very effective at pulling me in.
When I saw the title, I first thought it was going to be a MLP take on The Merchant of Venice, but after reading the description... Damn, this sounds cool.
I personally vote you write more of this. It has a lot of potential, if you ask me.
Came here thinking it was a Sherlock Holmes parody but this still sparks my interest.
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...I still want the MLP Merchant of Venice...
congrats on the Feature. nice going so far.
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Was this in the Featured Box? I kind of have a bet riding on whether or not it makes it.
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yeah it hit the Featured box a few minutes before I posted that comment. you won the bet, congratulations.
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Fixed. Thank you.
Shylock was a great character from Merchant of Venice. Going to throw that out there.
I loved it! Keep going!
Um, just a question: did you ask Azenge for permission to use his picture?
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Yep!
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Ah. Just checking. The fic it was made for never quite came to fruition.
AWESOME!
MOAR
Is the main character mute or something?
Fav + like, looking forward for more.
Sound very promising
will read tomorrow
more please?
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What they said
2222541 Meh read My Little Dashie and a bunch of sad stories and movies like Titanic. Then watch a bunch of gangster movies and you'll be fine.
But am I the only one who imagined the guy who cut "me" with the merchants voice from RE4? (I believe)
It's...
It's...
ALIVE! TIME FOR ME TO READ FIRST CHAPTER THEN SECOND!
finally the gods have destroyed the unholyness that stopped you from writing this
3212492 I second that exact statement, down to the capitalization.
Finaly an update! Sweet!
Wow. This is one of those stories that you can read with like half year break between chapters, and somehow you still know what is this all about. I'm really liking the concept and the implementation. Very, very well done, I'd be more than happy to see next chapters.
YAY! UPDATE!
Two escape attempts thwarted XD
This was actually one of the first stories I favorited, and always assumed would never get an update. I'm really glad it did — this chapter was great, and it gave me a good excuse to re-read the first again.
I love the way you write, plain and simple. It's to the point, it's clear, and it's just flowery enough without being indulgent. I'm assuming Fluttershy's your favorite, because she pops up so often in your work, but again, you do a great job with her character. She's not just vulnerable, which is where a lot of other writers seem to stop.
For this chapter specifically, you went on a biiit longer at the hospital than I would've liked. I think you could've cut out the X-Ray scene entirely, and moved on, and it would've read better. In fact, I'm not entirely sure why we needed to spend a chapter at the hospital at all, if he was just going to return to Fluttershy's.
Still, I enjoyed the writing, and I enjoyed reading this. I'm hoping Fluttershy might end up pulled into this vague crime drama, in some way, but really, at this point in the story, it could go any way. I'm pretty sure I'll enjoy it, no matter where you take these characters.
Finally can't wait to read this
AHHHHHHHH WHIRRRINGGG
PLEASE KEEP THIS UP I CAN'T HANDLE WAITING MORE
But anyway, well done with that chapter and all!
Writing news here as a little mini-update that I felt did not warrant a whole blog post:
The update for Shylock will be pushed back a few days due to my crummy internet connection. I work mainly in google docs, so when my connection fails, I cannot see my outlines or compare what I write in a normal text document to what I have written. By the time my internet is stable again, I spend the time going through and changing any repeating words or similar phrases.
Sorry about this.
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Just popped in to say that when I read the title, I was thinking this was a Merchant of Venice crossover. That would've been kinda awesome.
pretty pretty good.
will this continue? it's gooooooooood
This Dead?
are we EVER going to actually say anything?