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The Accruing Phial

This is the story of two colts in search of an ancient and mysterious power. Little do they know, a being of ancient evil seeks it too...

Chapters (6)

Chapter 1 · 30th Jan 2012 · 1,222 words
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Chapter 2 · 30th Jan 2012 · 1,714 words
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Chapter 3 · 11th Feb 2012 · 1,596 words
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Chapter 4 · 11th Feb 2012 · 1,516 words
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Chapter 5 · 1st Mar 2012 · 1,434 words
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Chapter 6 · 1st Mar 2012 · 1,267 words
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PwnySwag290

PwnySwag290 #1 · Jan 29th, 2012 · · · Chapter 1 ·

This is the first part of my story. I hope you people like it!
Feel free to rate!

LightingBolt

LightingBolt #2 · Jan 31st, 2012 · · · Chapter 1 ·

The story is good but the layout needs a little work. The paragraphs seem too short and random for a general story. A little patching up should fix it though

abrony-mouse

abrony-mouse #3 · Mar 30th, 2012 · · · Chapter 2 ·

Oooh a fic! 5 chaps! Ok I skimmed 2 chaps- was gonna just be one, but you write well :) I'll def return to this.

Things I love:

Dat description:

"vibrant turquoise tinted coat flecked with crimson patches."

"Odd looking horns protruded from his head and through his emerald mane."

Waaaagh these are lovely.

Dat pace:

"One- a Pegasus painted with a vibrant turquoise tinted coat flecked with crimson patches. His wings flapped gracefully at his sides."

So easy on the mind's eye :) I love the way it draws me into the story.

and I like the way you reveal the plot through the chars

“I am the faithful student of Princess Luna, and I have come here seeking information on the dark phial…” He trailed off, and was soon interrupted by Twilight.