Good ol' Spike.

Go spikey!
btw damn you i thought it was a oneshot

damn you know how to hook a reader

2204548 So I've been told. I'm glad you think so.
2204539>>2204493 Yeah, I figured Spike was the best one to give Pound advice on this. Although, when the available guys for him to talk to are Spike, Big Macintosh, and Shining Armor...
...yeah, top of the short list. Still best option, though.
And 2204539 , yeah, that's what happens a lot in my writing.

A story about Pound Cake's lust for his sister should not be giving me feels like this! Damn you!

Also, close twins, aren't they? Regular Dipper and Mabel, they are.

Spelling error for "chuckled". Again, well written, and I like how Spike, one of the few guys in ponyville, is the one who talks to Pound, and even gets caught off guard when Pound confesses. I kinda want to see how this ties in with the rest of the story. Speaking of the story, I like how it's not a hardcore clopfic, just little bits and pieces here and there, it makes it let weird to read.

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"A story about Pound Cake's lust for his sister should not be giving me feels like this!"

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Good to hear about the twin language, I figured you would use it sparingly, but thought I'd cover the bases anyway.

Well, I do hope they get together, it's sorta my fetish , but the advice was meant to be a broader way to approach any mature scene. Short ones without much in the way of description and feeling tend to give a rushed effect to the scene and bring down the quality of the story. If you're going to have them, you should respect your story enough to ensure they're the best they can be.

Now to read the new chapter.

EDIT: Alright, well done chapter. Interesting back story with Spike & Rarity, and I feel glad that Pound got some solid advice from probably the only source that might actually have an inkling of what he's going through. The chapter is rather dialogue heavy, slowing down the narrative, but Pound is well positioned now to take some action and hopefully we'll see them working toward resolution again next chapter.

Anyone else think there is a good story idea in spike saying "i nearly learned that lesson too late" ?

Great chapter, love the portrayal of spike, keep it up.

2207221 Uh, if I may. I think there was an episode about that. You know the one where he gets all huge on his birthday and wreaks havoc.

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Just to let you know, the next couple of chapters are likely to be dialogue heavy. To give you an idea, the next chapter is titled "Girl Talk".

2207543 I think Kill Joy was referring specifically to how it applies to his relationship with Rarity once it got intimate.

2207221 And yeah, it does seem that way, doesn't it? GLad you like how I portrayed Spike.

Interesting story concept, but grammar, spelling and formatting fuckups make it near unreadable to my eyes. 'Choked' not 'chocked,' space goes after ellipses... like so, and there's a fair bit of comma splicing you need to remove. Downvote until problems are fixed.

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I'll admit I'm still relatively new to writing, and the program I have available to work with lacks spelling/grammer check. Pointing out the specific places I made these mistakes would be appreciated.

2207543that was greed, i feel that dragons may be particularly suceptable to all the vices... In this case... Well lust. (wich is in a way similalar to greed, might be interesting to pursure... Since he turned out ok, i feel the mental process of copeing with dragon lustwould be a potent subject, dont you?

Favorited! great work keep it up!!

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i am not going to get to read this tonight
too much stuff going on. but, based on what you guys are saying, it sure will be a doozy

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Dialogue heavy chapters are not bad in and of themselves, just keep in mind that you need to keep the narrative flowing. Don't get bogged down in talking about a situation when your characters should instead be doing something about it.

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Well, next chapter, "Girl Talk", will be almost the same sort of thing as this chapter, but on the other side.
After that, it will be a delicate mix of action and talk, plus some - hopefully - badflank moments.

Just to give you an idea, here's the chapter titles planned.

4. Girl Talk
5. Change
6. Temptation
7. Reconcile

After that, I'll need to make some decisions about where I go with the story.

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Not to start a shitstorm.......but even as a black guy who says N***a a lot, that was a bit much...

2204790 Hey, now. You're forgetting Snips and Snails....
Pfffffffff ahaha who am I kidding.

I know I'm late on this, but I felt this needed to be said...

"...A lot of people - ponies and otherwise - have certain ideas about how love can be 'right' or 'wrong', and that only the 'right' kind of love should exist. That's a load of horse apples. When a bond like that is found, when you know there's only one being with whom you want to be there with forever, it doesn't matter what anyone else thinks. The only opinions that should matter are your own and that of your special someone."

Is Spike really saying this to a hormone filled 16 year old? Is he really preaching that as long as you truly love anything, that it can constitute as being 'right'? Is he really saying that pedophilia, Incest, or pygmalionism is okay as long as it constitutes that persons definition of 'love'?
Does Spike not realize that there are people that exist that 'love' stealing?
Does Spike not realize that there are people that exist that 'love' rape?
Does Spike not realize that there are people that exist that 'love' pedophilia?

Is short what I'm trying to get at is, YES, there does exist a 'right' and 'wrong' kind of 'love'.

P.S. I know this does not constitute the authors views, just thought I'd like to shed some light on the subject from a it from a different perspective.

So Spike isn't useless... I'm calling OOC! Wait. I'll let it silde this time...

Damn, I am loving your writing style!

2471999I think in the context of this story spike is making a distinction between love and lust. Pedophilia is just lust of young, if you truly love the child you would protect them from your own lust until such time when sharing love with that person is not moral or ethicaly wrong. Love of a family member can be tainted by lust and leads to incest but family love can be just as strong or potent as romantic love.

I'm loving this so far! Unfortunately, I'm not feeling myself to make crude jokes or other things of that nature. But I'm loving this shit!

2471999 I agree. There is a right kind of love, but not all will seek out what that means in today's culture. As for incest, if it's love of the taboo and not of the individual, then, like with pedophilia, the answer to whether it's "good" love should be obvious. I see incest generally as nothing that should stop love as long as the couple is strong enough to endure the stigma or at least clever enough to avoid it.

About this chapter, I thought Spike's story about his and Rarity's love trials was touching and effort well spent! I also like how Pound takes the situation seriously. Wonderful chapter!

Go, Spike. Wise of wisdom!
Back to the story!

Ahhh Spikey wikey, speaker of great wisdom and awesome.
Guess it comes with age

An awesome chapter, loving the explination and everything, and how Pound is taking this.
Think with your heart, not your dick, bro
~Dustchu 2015