Flaris the Pegasus

by DPheonix

chapter 3

Flaris couldn't sleep. His brain was riddled with thoughts and would not shut off. The day had gone so fast. He had been kissed by his new favorite mare. He had been to hell and back. Not to mention he still wasn't in Canterlot yet. He got off the couch and walked to the kitchen.
"So anyway she tells me to get out of the house for the rest of the day. I bet she was spending the whole day snuggled up to him. You can tell she's got a crush."
Flaris had remembered the voice from before. He peered around the corner to see a bright pink pony and a purple baby dragon. Both were eating cupcakes.
"So Twilight's got a new ColtFreind? I can't believe I haven't met him yet!" The pink pony looked like she was having a fit. She was breathing heavily.
"Calm down Pinkie. I don't think he's left the house yet."
The purple dragon was trying to calm down the pony Flaris now knew as Pinkie. He was watching the scene in silence. Trying to not make a noise in case he wasn't meant to hear any of that. Flaris' stomach growled loudly and his eyes widened. "Well that plan ended quickly" the Pinkie's head snapped around to face him. "oh no." Flaris Took a step backwards as Pinkie stared at him. His head hit the ground as she jumped on top of him.
"I haven't met you before. Whats your name?" Pinkie's smile going from ear to ear.
"Uhh my name's Flaris." His head was a bit fuzzy from the impact of getting tackled.
"Oh you must be the pony Spike was talking about. I can't belive I haven't seen you before." Pinkie was clearly an energetic pony but also seemed very insane.
"Uhh no I don't think so. Didnt you guys say she had a crush on the mestery pony?"
"Oh thats right. Well I've got a welcome party to organize. Seeya." Pinkie left the room leaving Flaris on the ground and confused.
"What just happened?"
"Pinkie Pie." The baby dragon replied.

...

"So what are we doing again?" Flaris yawned sleepily.
"Were going to Fluttershy's for lunch." Twilight spoke moodily.
"Are you still upset because I put you back in your bed and slept on your couch?" Flaris stretched his neck out and cracked it moving his head from side to side.
"I'm upset because you need to spend the night in a comfortable bed not out on the couch. Why couldn't you have stayed there and left me on the couch?"
"Because the bed is to big for me. It feels like there needs to be somepony else in there," Flaris looked at Twilight. She still looked as cute as ever. Even though she was moody.
"What is that supposed to mean Flaris?" She looked at him as he tried to redeem himself from thee question.
"I uh ummm. The couch was very comfortable and you looked cold." Flaris scratched the back of his head laughing nervously. Luckily Twilight was satisfied with the answer. Flaris looked around the area they were in once again. Absorbing the happy nature of the place. The birds singing in their trees. All kinds of furry creatures playing in the grass and flowers. The warm sun shining down to the path. Twilight started giggling as Flaris closed his eyes. "I wonder what she's laughing about. Probably a couple of animals playing." Flaris opened his eyes as he ran into the tree. He'd wavered off path distracted by the warmth, the sounds and the smell of the area.
"You have a thing with running into trees." Twilight giggled. "Come on. We're here."

...

Fluttershy was adorable. Flaris still thought Twilight was cuter. But Fluttershy was defiantly adorable. With her sweet voice and elegant frame. She was shy and meek at first. Blushing a lot whenever Flaris spoke to her. But as they talked she got a little more confident and relaxed around his. Flaris sipped at his warm cup of coffee. It was his favorite blend made perfectly and he planned to savior it. He was glad that Fluttershy had some coco powder to spare as well. He was finding his eyesight drawn to the strangest lamp he had ever seen. It was curious and it looked like random bits of animals were just stuck together randomly. He had to admit he'd buy it if he saw it in a store.
"So how long have you been dating?" That was the downside to the lunch. Rainbow dash. Flaris found her arrogant and loud. He knew of course that he himself could be the same at times. So he was willing to be patient.
"We're not dating. We're just friends." Twilight rolled her eyes at Rainbow
"Sure your not." Rainbow chuckled as Flaris and Twilight both let out a moan of exasperation.
"Rainbow stop hassling them. It's not nice."
"Okay Fluttershy. You ruin all the fun." Flaris was about to say something about Rainbow being controlled by her MareFriend but then thought better of it. I don't know that. And I don't want to hurt Fluttershy's feelings. Even Rainbow was kind of right I suppose. I wish I was Twilight's ColtFriend Flaris shook his head he'd zoned out in the middle of the conversation. He took another sip of his coffee. It was cold. He'd have to warm it up if he wanted to drink it at it's full potential.
"Thank you for coming. I hope you enjoyed your meals." the sweet voice of Fluttershy brought Flaris out of his trance
"Thank you the meal was wonderful." Twilight replied. Flaris realised it was time to go nodding in approval before downing the rest of his coffee
"it was one of the best meals I've had in a long time." Flaris smiled at Fluttershy who was beaming back at them.
"Hey what about breakfast? Remember I made your favorite dandelion sandwiches."
"I uh. Hmm I." A small bunny started ushering them out the door and Flaris was thankful for the interruption. Fluttershy was about to say something but the rabbit slammed the door closed before she could. "Come on let's go back home." Flaris started to walk back to the library before he realized what he said.
"No way." Twilight giggled "We have to go talk to Applejack." she started trotting off.
"Home huh." Flaris smiled to himself before trotting after her.

Author's Note:

thought i should do another update. ya know. hopefully soon ill be doing a collab with someone. yes it may be insane. but until then ill just keep posting this. also i made it to chapter 11 yay. but im not sure if ill do anymore after that. i probably will but it wil be slow going. not so yay. but if people could send me ideas that would be good. alsoi need a new pre reader my current one cant help me again till november. sad face. but shes up to her nostrils in work. good for her though and she may still be helping me with my biology in the fic. yes i am bad at biology. and im stupid we cant forget stupid. anyway i cant think of anything to write so see ya.

Comments

[Commissar Rarity]

>deleting comments

And Pica_Pie's to boot. I haven't seen that kid say anything rude which makes this suspect. Time to read the fic and see why these comments got erased.

Flaris heard a gulp "Hope he doesn't mind strangers." said the lavender mare as she leaned in and kissed him. Flaris eyes opened to look at the mare before he fainted with a wide grin on his face.

ahahahahaha
Now i see why. People were complaining about OCxMane 6. Especially when it's sloppy like this.

You should fire PuddingNPie, as there's a bunch of grammatical errors he failed to pick up on.

[DPheonix]

2339600 i personally found his a bit rude actually changing the way MY OC talks. i mean come on. also I'm so tired of seeing comments about gramma errors rather then reading the story.

[Commissar Rarity]

2339688 Regardless of content it's bad form to delete comments. It gives the appearance that you're ignoring criticism and immature, even if you're not.

[ChocoLatte]

>Looks through my Google Drive
>Finds FtP proofreading doc
"I totally recognize that fic! I wonder what became of it..."
>Massive comment deletion +Two new chapters
"Hey, I'm mentioned in the Ch.2 A/N!"

and to that special guy who decided to redo the story and change some of the words around. I thank you for the courtesy but I'm afraid that some of the changes you made are not how I speak or Flaris speaks and some changes change the flow of the story. So I'm just going to say don't do that as people may take it the wrong way and see it as your trying to change the way their OC's think and speak.

"What? Are you not familiar with the concept of editing...?
"I can assure you that I never changed the characterization or the flow of the story (per se)!"

~ChocoLatte
PS. There's still (lots of) room for improvements on your grammar...