Well In my opinion this is shaping up better than the first draft. Keep it up.
Have a Navy Seal of approval.
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2174419 As well as salutes made of awesome
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it's better! and i like it

I miss the first version but this is good too.Could u post the first version again as a different story?

2184135 Sure, But, only after I finish this. I'll have it on my stories list but it will not be published. But, it will be one of three projects I will be working on without anyone to bother me. You have my word.
...I wish there was a winking emoticon.

A small flash of light made it's presence know and Twilight looked over at the walkway. Spike stood there, brushing some ash of his shoulders as he glared at his adopted sister.

Walkway?

"You left me at the castle!" He yelled. "I know you were in a hurry, but you totally forgot about me! I had to ask the princess to send me here like I was some scroll. Do you know what I had to do, just to talk with her? I had to singe a guard and walk in during a meeting."

Her parents don't know why she left. She herself took the train. Yet both Celestia and Spike know where she's going. Elaborate?

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