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A Creative Spark

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One Marnin Kinnet, a brony animator makes a world shattering discovery about reality, creativity, and what it really means to be human.

A/N: Be warned all ye who wander yond this point this is the first work of fanfiction I have written. So don’t hold back on your opinions on how this story could be improved, or what you thought. I do ask however that you present them constructively.

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WiseFireCracker

WiseFireCracker #1 · Feb 19th, 2013 · 1 · · Chapter 1: A World Found ·

Hum... hard to judge right now. The thing is, you did make an effort to have things intriguing by the end, which is a plus, and I liked it. However, I suggest you revise your chapter a bit more, or work with a proofreader, because some sentences are awkwardly phrased and I could detect a few typos.

For example: "He drew the conclusion that they were now speaking to one another, and by conclusion meaning he couldn’t make out what they were saying their voices simply melding together. "

I have trouble finding the meaning of that sentence. Too many ideas crammed into it.

WerewolfNate