Smolder's time at the School of Friendship, and her recent friendship with Spike, gives Twilight a chance to finally get some answers about dragons. Some answers are better received than others.
Apple is a funny word, one that Winona doesn't quite understand. Her family uses it to refer to food, trees, themselves and to each other. It's very silly. But either way, she'll always be there for the pony she knows as Little Apple.
On this cold winter's morning, three fillies stand alone on a snow covered hill. Not to pursue a cutie mark, or go on a daring quest. But to simply enjoy the snowy wonders of a classic wooden toy.
It's a cute story for sure. The CMC are great in it. Also, your choice of music is exceptional and I feel it really added to the emotion of their thrilling ride. It was fun, easy to read, and well written. I'm amazed at the difference in your level of writing from your first chapter in your initial story. Keep up the good work, sir.
Pretty good story, but I would say that real time dialogue would have helped me get into the feeling of the scenes more than the physical descriptions alone. Of course the trouble with that, is dialogue interrupts the flow of prose sometimes. It can be quite tough to slot it in. Still, good job.
It's a cute story for sure. The CMC are great in it. Also, your choice of music is exceptional and I feel it really added to the emotion of their thrilling ride. It was fun, easy to read, and well written. I'm amazed at the difference in your level of writing from your first chapter in your initial story. Keep up the good work, sir.
Pretty good story, but I would say that real time dialogue would have helped me get into the feeling of the scenes more than the physical descriptions alone. Of course the trouble with that, is dialogue interrupts the flow of prose sometimes. It can be quite tough to slot it in. Still, good job.