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I've never been prouder of my little filly. Today, Twilight's becoming a princess. A princess! Ever since she was born, she's accomplished feat after feat, just like her brother. Through the years, I've watched her grow into the mare she is today. I never thought this day would come so soon. I didn't think I'd have to let go of my little Sparkle...
My name is Night Light, and this is my story.
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Wow,i feel sorry for Night Light, Twilight really should have at least written some letters to her father while she was in Ponyville but at the same time he should have informed her of his heart condition, now Twilight will be sad because her father died at the day of her coronation and because he never told her anything, because i know it hurts when a family member dies of a disease they knew they had but some family members didnt know about, no really, Twilight will be hurt for not having been informed about his heart condition.
, keep up the good work.
P.S:...I just noticed that i have favorited all of your stories
Wow, I saw this added and thought it would be an interesting read. I was absolutely right. Absolutely well written and very thought out! I figured I should let you know what I think~
This review is brought to you on behalf of the group: Authors Helping Authors
Name of Story: I'll Be Your Night Light
Grammar: 9.5/10
Everything flowed very well and had a nice, personal feel to it. Only issue I spotted was "The day he got his cutie mark we knew he would eventually, but we didn't think it'd happen so soon.", right at the start of Twilight at 7 years. I think you just missed a word, figured I'd point it out~
Pros
Flows extremely well.
Great insight into characters.
A good mix of the ups and downs of Twilight's life and how her parents dealt with them.
Cons
Wait, I have to find three cons? Jeez, that'll be like playing Where's Waldo with a blindfold on.
If I had to say something, I would say that maybe something could have been done to characterize his wife some, but honestly, that might make it run on a little bit.
Okay seriously, I can't think of anything.
Notes Section
Overall, this is a very personal and intimate little fic. Everything from beginning to end went very well, you didn't get bogged down in details (which can be a problem for time-lapse fics like this), and you focused on what was important. Extremely well done!
Since that was an authors helping authors review, I could ask you to review one of mine, but I won't make it an obligation, considering 6K words ≠ 30K words. I wouldn't say no if you felt like giving Everdale a read, but don't feel an obligation. Trust me, it wasn't an obligation to read this!
And as a closing note, excellent job
. Now to go write a research paper and try not to cry 
Oh my... that was AMAZING. I generally don't read non-shipfics, but this almost made me tear up. What a sweet story... I really liked the final sentences of each year. For example...
You sure have my (up) vote!
A very sweet and touching story. I thought the whole heart condition angle was laying it on a bit thick (it's not that I can't picture it happening, I just didn't feel it was really all that necessary), but otherwise it was a beautiful insight into the mind of Twilight's father as he watches his daughter grow up. Nicely done.
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(PS, is that story have mystery? Sounds fun. Can't wait to get into it later! 
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I noticed that as well, and am glad you enjoy my writing!
I agree. In the show, (though I don't blame it), she didn't ever even speak with her parents, much less send any letters. For a pony learning about friendship, family isn't a far off shot from that. From all the family-related episodes between the Apples, it'd be nice to get some screen time for Night Light and Velvet, though I'm not counting on it. I have had a similar situation happen to me too, which is where the plot came from.
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Thanks for the in-depth review, and I'll gladly return one for your story. (Because it's quite a bit longer, it will take me more time.) I'm glad you think it came out well; this is my first "time-lapse" sort of story, and was a bit of a gamble. I do like how it came out as well. Oh, and thanks for the grammar error.
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Thank you! I have to concur with you there; I generally just read/write shipping too, though I'm trying to widen my horizons a little bit, maybe experiment with the other genres. I'm glad you liked this, and I did try to end each year/segment with a powerful statement. Thanks for pointing that out!
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I understand what you're saying, and I'm glad you liked it. As for the "unnecessary adding of the heart condition," I'd initially planned it that way right from the get-go of the story's writing. You see, I'm a sucker for sad stories, and I've had an experience similar to the plot of this story. (Where I'm in Twilight's shoes.) Because the show revolves around Twilight and her friends, and we only see Night Light twice, it seems to me that Twilight had gotten so wrapped up in her new life that she'd forgotten her parents, taking them for granted. Heck, she didn't even visit them in Canterlot in the Royal Wedding two-parter! Which is part of the inspiration for this story. They didn't say anything in her coronation, either. These are just my thoughts, though. I do appreciate your input, and am glad that you (somewhat) enjoyed the story!
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Oh, thanks! Take your time~
And by the way, your risk really did pay off well. You keep the structure consistent with the effect you're going for, making a concise, yet telling tale that never feels slow. Keep it up!
That was sad and well written. Added to Twilight's Library.
Telling the story of Twilight's ascension through the eyes of her father puts a rather unique spin to the whole event. It's sad, and rather heartwarming, and I really like the whole perspective this piece provides.
WHY MUST U PUNCH MY FEELS!!????
Great story but i'm confused. Did he die in the end, go into a coma, just fall asleep or what? Besides that everything is great
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I'm glad you enjoyed the story!
In response to your question, the ending is yours to interpret. I wrote it that way on purpose, so the reader could decide how they wanted it to end.
Thanks for commenting!
Hit me right in the feels at the end there, you sly fox. This story is very true to the series though; Twilight doesn't even mention her parents, so they're probably feeling pretty neglected.
Or felt neglected, in the case of this story...
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Thanks! When I wrote this (almost seven months ago... Wow
) I hadn't seen any stories that really had to do with Twilight's parents, and after the introduction of Shining Armor in the series it got me thinking. Though, my writing's gotten better since this was done, and I think I may edit this story to reflect that. You're too nice. I'm going to have to go through your stories, too. (Captain Falcon? That sounds awesome! 
)
And, might you mean dragon?
gah! my damn feels! it hurts! hnnnggg!