Willow and Shield led a rather normal life, nothing out of the ordinary. Until one night, strange sounds wake them out of their slumber. What are they to do with the young foal they have found?
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Please forgive my inconsistency with the childrens vernacular. I feed on feedback so please leave comments, good or bad.
Violence and death tags are there to warn but violence does not play a major role in story nor do they have anything to do with one another.
I'll be keeping my eye on this
Pet the adorable little love bug. Pet it, hug it....
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Let him, hug him, love him... How do we fed... Oh yea love him!
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Oh don't worry I've got a few chapters stocked up that are going through editing and finalization.
U know a story good is here when u want more
This reminds me of Napa on the Bug Planet for some reason.
I look forward to reading more of this! Please continue...
So cute.......
I once had a random stray kitten show up on my doorstep but I had no idea how to deal with cats. I gave it a plate of (cow) milk but it ignored the milk and kept meowing at me. A couple minutes later it walked off and I never saw it again.
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Well that was not something I wanted to start my morning with.
Adorable cuteness might be the natural defense weapon of young changelings.
Because ponies can never hurt something as cute as this, can they?
Yeah, probably.
Good prologue!
I enjoyed reading it and look forwards to see where it goes.
But it needs more cute bug noises.
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Humm wonder if Chitter after spending enough time with Willow and Shield will become a "reformed" changeling? If he does he better hope he becomes the type with "chest jewels" so his diamond implant will blend into his default form.
*reads AN and shrugs* Fine by me.
I'm willing to bet that the next chapter is when the adoption is official.
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You have all asked so I have complied!
Well THIS was a hectic chapter.
For shame, Sun Butt! You should know by now that Trollestia must always be on a leash when on walkies!
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In a good way... or does... does it need to be fixed?!
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What was going on was what caused it to be hectic.
Dude, for a first story this is surprisingly thought out. Great work!
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Here's the thing... my first story here bombed! I took it down because it didnt do so well and I had no direction.
This is my second story.
Awww so cute.
Question-What time in the series does this story take place?
Like relative to the show. Is it after the Canterlot invasion, , but before the changelings reformed?
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... *shrugs*
I'd have to say after reform. That's all I can say.
Great Idea! That's an analogy I should remember.
Imagine what would happen if Discord would replace the water of the mirror pool with coffee...
On second thought, better not.
I kinda aggree with Willow. Celestia makes very harsch conditions on an young, helpless colt.
Once Chitter grows old enough to understand everything he might get angry about that.
Those gems could probably solve the feeding problems for all changelings, if implemented correctly.
Babbling nonsense is the most reliable way to imitate stallions. An important lesson for every changeling.
Someone who wants to adopt an child who is able to walk on the ceiling? Like a changeling?
Wouldn't she have to pay them anyway since she is the one who requestet the implants in the first place?
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Well, this one is certainly good!
I enjoyed reading it so far and look forwards for the next part.
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I looked at it like adoption, in regards to you have to take care of medical.
I also never thought of that tbh...
I don't think you went too far I also don't think this warrants a raised rating, though I DO want a rather SEVERE punishment for the perpetrators.
Kidnapped, blinded with a indent in his face and a burn down home. Yes very much too far dude very much to fucking far
This is still within the T-rating. Now, if the violence was more detailed, then that would fall under Gore. Still want punishment for the sick bastard who would hit a hatchling.
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The story is E rated
9755490 Oh. In that case, bump it up to a T with a Violence tag.
Where is Thorax during all this? As king he should be helping the little guy.
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Gonna be honest... I dont really have a place to put him with what I constructed. I didn't really think of him (not sure why) while writing this.
I'm sorry everyone!
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No indent, just cracked chitin/carapace.
I think the current rating is okay.
Maybe consider making a note that "Death" is no integral part of the story. Otherways some readers my be scared away.
The same can be done with "Violence". At least for now, since don't know what might happen in the future.
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Don't think too much about this.
No one can possibly consider all things in an universe as big as MLP.
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I cant explain why it's there. I can but cant...
There better?
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Better. This prevent others to assume the tags may apply for the whole story.
Suggestion for an improvement:
Violence and death tags are set to warn for a few minor scenes, but don't apply to most of the story.
for a first story i am vary surprised and pleased, this is a vary good story.
i see no need to change your ratings.
For some reason I'm suddenly reminded of all the EP stories when I think of that vendor who the guard would probably arrest anyways.
a good chapter and i see a set up for a good story ark at some point.
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I got the other half of ch going thru edit
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Moar.
moar?
Is that an hammer? Or what is that "tool"?
Good chapter!
I enjoyed reading it.
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One of these
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Better?
Cuteness: minimal
Excitement: nonexistent
Amusement: nonexistent
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Not every single chapter can be a rip roaring good time. It's a slice of life not action. But I will consider it in future chapters.
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I know I just felt like doing that, up to you not me.