Once upon a time, in the magical land of Equestria, there lived a young dragon named Spike. This small Drake was alone, both when surrounded by the ponies that raised him, and the when among his draconic kin. He gave up on learning his history from other dragons, and settled for life with the ponies he loved.
Once upon a time, there was also a pegasus filly named Scootaloo, desperate to prove her worth to the world and, more importantly, to herself. she became a member of Equestria's first, and most destructive, Cutie Mark Crusader organization. She settled on a path of earning her mark to prove herself.
when these two young beings work together, they can accomplish the impossible, and when they fall, how deep will the landing jar them.
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You do kinda need a prereader. Most of them are slightly smarter than spellcheck. If you're using or can upload to GDocs/Drive/whatever they call it these days then I'd be more than happy to help. I'm also willing to work on a cover image, though if you can find something better than a pencil sketch (what I can do) by all means, use it instead.
As for the story, aside from a few spelling and grammar errors I'm quite impressed. I like the premise, I like the setting (Winter Wrap Up is one of my most and least favoritest episodes because it has winter, but they're getting rid of it) and your writing has good flow and humor.
It's a fun read and shows a lot of promise, but be wary of making your main and/or favorite characters too smart. Scootaloo suddenly becoming a devious mastermind and out thinking Twilight doesn't seem in character, but lying through her teeth or using the puppy dog eyes may get results. Some authors have a habit of favoring a few characters and it shows in sometimes odd ways. Most often by having them suddenly become remarkably perceptive in a situation that doesn't warrant it. The CMC are still kids after all and while Spike is often the voice of reason compared to Twilight, he's also childish in his own right (though some of that can be attributed to comedy writing over character consistency).
Basically I'm saying be careful of turning them into Mary sues. And no, I'm not trying to be condescending. Some of the best stories I've read here were about the limitations and failings of an individual and how they manage to rise above, or in some cases sneak around the problem and succeed. Kids may not outsmart adults very often but if you can come up with a truly plausible reason for it, or a way for them to sidestep the issue while still achieving their goals, the story becomes all the more rewarding. Yes Twilight can basically out magic most unicorns, but is that fun?
That's just a bit of general advice I wish every author would take. I really like the idea of Spike sifting through the collective knowledge of ponies in regards to his own kind and finding little more than superstition and conjecture. Dragons in that universe have already proven themselves pretty hard to deal with (unless, once again, for comedy reasons). Little bits of world building like explaining how Spike doesn't like the cold yet isn't in any real danger from it are welcome too, especially if that becomes a plot point further down the line. And the bit about child grade caltrops actually made me laugh out loud, pretty rare for a fic.
‘Maybe a mug of hot coco with quarts will make this less… annoying.' Is a good example of what thefirewarde is talking about. I'm sure "quartz" is what you were going for, which is where a proof reader can help your fic shine.
And I'm glad you aren't go with little orphan Scootaloo. I'm not sure how this one got started but it totally clashes with the show's style, unless the writer is using a grittier, more "realistic" version of Equestria.
I look forward to more of this in the future.
Twas quite the enjoyable read. I like the excerpts from the books but do try to be wary as they're supposedly rare. It looks to be a long ride, but an interesting one.
Wear should be where. Wear refers to clothes. You wear a hat, for instance.
Aside from that, it does look interesting.