Over a thousand years after the human race nearly killed itself and was saved by Princess Celestia, it runs a risk of doing so again. Not from any war, no nothing that simple, but from a problem so... well problematic... that even the Princesses have nothing they can do to help.
The human race has no friends.
It is now in the hands of the rulers grandson to be an ambassador of sorts to the only country that will not have him burned at the stake. Equestria.
The problem? He isn't a social sort. At all.
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I like it. More please...
Nice! You could probably work on the names a bit though, I don’t think we would settle for such sloppy names (try more awesome
, Greek and Latin do that well) and you might want to elaborate on the human’s magic a bit more.
Oh, and if they have the technology to make jury rigged teleporters I’m pretty sure a reliable portable power source like solar panels or even hydrogen fuel cells that top up on water are going to be a piece of cake. As for no internet wouldn’t they have a few satellites? The thought of twilight getting hold of a computer and all its facilities is just too good an opportunity to pass up!
Can’t wait to see how they react to a Changeling showing up. Good place to build tension.
Best of luck with it!
2047764 Thanks!
As far as the names go, I don't know if I would like to change them. I understand that Dax is a little unoriginal but I didn't want an overly complex name for him, and Pestilentia has a lot of thought in my mind. I will consider re-looking at them, however. I apologize for some of my sloppy work, but I was eager to get this up. Revision will be in progress, thanks for your help!
2047989 Oh, I'm sorry but I was referring to location names. "Humania" reminded me a little too much of Nineteen Eighty Four.
Though the name Pestilentia did strike me as odd, even for a Changeling character. It’s not all that flattering; it can’t be nice to be named a ‘pest’ formally.
Ah! My cat is attacking me!
2047764 Sorry
i thought you meant characters. Humania has a good chance to change.
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No, the fault is mine, I insist. I should have been clearer. I shall now hide my face in shame!
Wait...
Can't really do that on the internet...
Wonderful! Glad you used some of my ideas and I'm proud to be an active aid in the ideas of this! It looks very good so far and I can't wait for the future chapters!
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2054294...
Okay, I’m spooked now.
And confused.
2054294 What.
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That may have been a bit exterme, but yes: what would be a good name?
This aughta be... Interesting.
"New Eurasia"? "New-America" maybe? How about Sapia? like sapiens? But that doesn't sound right... OH! How about "The Republic of Sapiens"?
2077306 I like all those options
What do you think of something like “Pangea Ultima”?
2077306 (Twilight Sparkle speech mode activate) also I'm pretty sure its a Democracy but not a Republic. Your vote equals you and only you. Not a group or faction. There are simply not enough humans alive at that time. I think that's what it means.
Surprise! I don't have anything creepy to post about this chapter
. But, I loved the cultural references.
I lied. Thought of this when I heard racist force-field.
I had actually thought of pangea in some sense, but that implies it to be the only continent on Equis, which was broken earlier, by "over the ocean between..." If Pest lives there, perhaps it withheld changelings before humans. Consider their incorporation.
2087635 I WOULD spoil Pests backstory but... I don't think he'd want me to! Supposed to keep quiet about that kind of stuff,
Likin' the fic so far! Very different from the usual HiEs we get so that's always a plus. I also like the way humanity is being portrayed as well. Keep it up!
New name for human nation lets see.. united human home front. Kingdom of mankind.our republic of mankind. Let me no if you like any of em.
2186052 Good ideas, but too literal for my story, sorry. Thanks for caring, though
2186119 i have one so awesome your die from it.here it is...candyland.. i know the name is so powerful that you cry at the mention of it.
Hmmm...Imperium of Man?
Eurasia?
Liking the mischievous Pest theme near the end of the chapter. I am half-expecting her to say "GIT THE HELL OFF'A MAH LAWN!!!"I still hope that Dax is nice to ponies.
Why is the story picture the technomancer digital hoodie from thinkgeek?
well thats gona be awkward tomorrow.
2288466 I was like “what the hell, why not?" I needed a picture and it caught my eye after a few “technology” themed google searches.
Loving it! Keep up the good work.
FUCK
I thought we wouldn't have humans referring to her as a god or figure we call out to at times
I mean seriously, she may move the sun but other ponies did too. She isn't omnipotent or omniscient. She was fooled by a changeling and defeated by the same one in a battle of raw power. FUCKING (Insert your god that is not Celestia here) HUMANS, YOU WERE THE CHOSEN ONES (LITERALLY)
Then again, the Canterlot wedding events did not occur yet so I will (reluctantly) not pimp slap every human (yet)
Hmm
I wonder what would happen if Dax got into a fight.
Not a random fight of course, more like a fight caused someone hurt Pest.
Fuck, I pity the fool who invokes the wrath of a human. They probably have their own iron man suit in their closets for such occasions.
In other news, Luna needs a good rant from Dax on how no one is perfect, and how she should stop being an ass about things they could not change because it is in their nature.