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Twilight is really falling apart at the end there. I think she'll end up releasing Discord in the hopes that he'll stop her.
3573402 which he can't.
Okay before I start reading this i have to ask, is this really a comedy? Because that description makes it seem like a straight forward dark-adventure. Not that there's anything wrong with that. I just want to know what kind of mood I should be in when I start reading it.
3573505 It sort of started out as comedy but shifted to a darker tone.
I wonder what Applejack is doing through out all this.
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Alright thanks. Both genres I enjoy. Its definitely going on my read later list.
3574386 SSSSMOKIN!
OH BUT TWILIGHT! THE BESSSST PART HASSSSN'T EVEN BEGUN!
Aw... what did they do, Twilight? What did they do to Spike?
I was starting to lose interest in this story ... Then you posted this chapter.
In my opinion , it's the best chapter even if it isn't the most heavy plot wise.
This. So much this.
The last two paragraph of her entry ... So much feels.
I like her mindset in this entry a lot because she reflect on her own failling and realise that the situation can only end in tragedy....
A tragedy caused by no one but herself.
For the first time in a long time , I saw Twilight and not only the "Necromancer Queen"
She has three armies at her disposal, a fanatical cult, near unlimited power and a wildcard in the form of the most powerful being known to exist, and yet she still finds herself with the strongest weakness of all, self doubt. There was a light, a hope, and most importantly, a chance. She could have stopped herself earlier, but she reached the point of no return long ago, when she saw the light and turned away, shying towards the darkness and leaving her only chance for freedom of a peaceful life behind as it slowly faded behind her as she delved deeper into the darkness. Now that the light in her world has faded completely, she wishes she never had a chance to be left in the dark to begin with. She's alone, she's lost her family, her friends, her life, her home, and her innocence, all for what? All she all she has left is a master plan, capable of destroying not only Equestria, but every nation and empire to exist and become involved over a war she now realizes she never wanted, even though she's worked towards it for years. She's alone, she wants to die, to save the world from the horrors she has created, but she can't do it for herself.
That's what I've analyzed from this chapter.
At this point, Twilight's become beyond saving by conventional means. There's a vague possibility that Luna could still attempt to save her. It would be reasonable that she understood Twilight's point of view, or that more time to think may have triggered a sense of debt, to save Twilight just as Twilight saved her. Regardless, it isn't likely.
Celestia still hasn't made an appearance. If she finds the journal she may gain insight into the cause of her student's downfall, and may attempt to take her request to heart of even still save her from the evil she inadvertently caused.
Discord is the same in description as he would be in Twilight plan; a wildcard. In spite of that fact, I believe that he would at least be partially disgusted by what has transpired during his imprisonment if he isn't already aware. He's to unpredictable, but may help in such a way to stop this nightmare. Keep in mind that he isn't evil, just chaotic to a point where it detriments the world around him.
We've reacted a breaking point, and what happens next can only be war and death, sorrow and pain, or salvation and redemption... or it just gets dragged out so we can include all three
I liked how this started and developed. Now I want to know her master plan and what really happened to Spike. I also want to know what's going through Luna's mind as she's probably the closest to sane anymore in this story. Heh, maybe Discord is the sanest of them all. :)
3573476 or wont. i mean just think of all the beautiful wonderful CHAOS!
3581419 The thing is, in my opinion that necromancy is one of the most powerful yet darkest forms of order attainable. due to it's nature of creating a premanant solution to death, by forcing undeath.
Discord would be heavily against it because he would have no pony or creature to terrify if they were all under Twilights firm hoof. Eventually he would be forced to boredome and have to try and deal with the annoyance himself only to fail spectacularly.
3581433 i was more making a joke but i think that what Twilight is doing is at least a little bit more chaotic compared to Celestia's rule. I also think that twilight would let Discord have at least a little fun if he helped her out.
3584209 meh, tis but an opinion on the subject of necromancy.
There is one small thing, I think it would have been better if you had a better reason for Twilight to become a necromancer. It just seems silly that she started resurrecting bodies because "CELESTIA IS NOT A GOD!". Don't get me wrong I love the idea that Twilight turned evil because she wanted to, and now faces the consequences but... I think that her motivations were a little... doubtful. I can't really feel bad for her (Though I still love this version) because her motivation seems a little... stupid. For me better way to make her evil from her own decision was to just make her a "noble devil" with great lust for power. Making her think "I want to be the ruler, but I will still be a good ruler even if I gain power in evil way." makes a lot more sense for me. Then she could face the consequences of her thinking that way and see that power that she want to gain costs a little too much, but she still keeps going as everyone is against her because of her decision. Still a wonderful story.
I must say that I'm suprised how far you are going with Twilight's development as a character. This is quite something new to me indeed.
(Just to let you know, it's still me. I changed my username from, "Prince of Shipping" to what you see now.)
Trixie finally did the sensible thing and revived Rarity!
I was a little taken aback at Twilight's 'I have nothing left' scene during the dragon ride. "Trixie, and Rainbow Dash are dead" For all intents and purposes, they are very much alive. "Rarity is dead" Something you could easily fix (and Trixie then does). "Fluttershy and Pinkie shadows of their former selves" Well Fluttershy is probably going to be a lot better now that Rarity is back, and Pinkie...well we don't really know what's up with Pinkie, but they're both very much still alive and your friends. Then there's Applejack who you apparently just don't give a crap about. Point being, your friends are still around, they still love you despite you going kinda crazy, sending a dragon to kill a bunch of castle guards, and amassing an army to overthrow Equestria for kinda hazy reasons. Now pull yourself together, take your place as Necromancer Queen of Equestria, and party with your sexy half-undead harem.
Yesh! Rarity is back baby! I love it!
Oh man, I wanna see an evil Spitfire so badly, holy shit its such an awesome image.
Nicely done! Once more!
4484795 Corrupted by darkness. Darkness and evil cause insanity, depression is a form of that. Not every mental condition is permanent.
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