Luna begins to feel the walls of separation, begin to once again close in on her, but on this occasion will she be able to beat back the darkness or will she fall prey to the nightmare that is her possessed self.
criticizism is very much welcomed
Literally my first short story ever so please be blunt but not to harsh. .
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I now I did this story really really fast but this is my first story and I was trying to get the first chapter done kinda fast but I will do my best to make future chapters longer
Looking forward to reading more
I liked it, especially since its a Luna fic, i've always liked her but i hope she is okay
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well we will see I haven't really decided. I was more of a "in the moment" type of writing here, but I have an idea where I want it to go
I am, to be 100% honest not sure this story will do well mostly because I am not to good at writing stories or more or less have the imagination to do so, But I still hope for the best
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also on a side note, I will try to get a new chapter out every few days, but no promises.
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Thank you
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Personally I find that is the best way to write. I get inspired and then just write, I don't do much planning. Then it's just a matter of editing it to make sure it flows and there are no spelling/grammar mistakes.
147321 dont make them too long i hate it
when chapters are soo long when u scrool down it skips like 2or3 lines it gets really anoying when the story is getting good and that happens
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Well the only thing was when I said make longer, I didn't mean 500+ words.
More along the line of 200 or less.
next chapters takeing a bit huh
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I really am sorry, I have had a lot of stuff happen that makes me un-able to write. Pretty much I have to take some pain medication and it makes we have a total writer's block, but I really am trying to make another chapter, please don't hate me.
291956 WHOA WHOA WHOA there are other fan ficts on this site calm it down man
nd why would i hate you for haveing writers block
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Ah I just add the "don't hate me part" to add some dramatic effect.
294005 you bastard
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Yup it's true I'm a cheeky sum bitch.
294019 *uses bridish accent* u cheeky bastard
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Yes I rushed the story way to fast and got myself stuck between a rock and a hard place.
And I have been hired at a local store, and haven't had much writing time between it and school. But not despair, I will continue although I have come to the decision of scraping what I have, and rebuilding it.
It will probably span, equal to this point in the story, 3-4 chapters.
holy crap i was juat going trough my favs and saw this i forgot all about this
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I had forgotten I had written it in the first place...
1762959 its been on hiatus for months now
woah! its like i stumbled on a time capsule. people i dont know; and never knew, chatting under the banner of an ancient, two chapter story cleverly marked "on hiatus" to ward off all but the most determined of intruders. i feel like an explorer. hand me my pith hat and pipe.