As if there aren't enough. But this is still interesting.

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There is never enough Fallout! Thank you for the interest though. The first five chapters are technically written, they just need to be revised into first person as I was dissatisfied at how they were turning out, but first is much better even though I have little experience at it.

Meh, there will never be enough fallout equestria fics based on the one made by Kkatman. Now I am just waiting for someone to have a side fic based around a intelligent hellhound.

Reading through the story so far, a thought struck me.  Do griffins have teeth?

Anyway good story so far.

I'm really liking the story so far, only a few grammatical errors that I've found (nothing that makes it hard to read).

You said in an earlier comment that the first 5 chapters were written out (but needed work); do you have an ETA on those?

Anyway, looking forward to the rest of Ashes story (definitely tracking).

>>200258200258

Weeeellll.... I'm guessing that some griffins do. It seems like Gilda gives a toothy grin in her episode, and they are half lion so it's possible.

And thank you!

>>200393200393

Curse you english language! And thank you again!

Yes, the first five chapters were originally written in a third person perspective, not finding this to my liking I have since endeavored to rewrite them, fourth should be up in an hour or so.

Well, fuckdamn. Tracked and five-starred.

>>200258200258

Most likely no, but the measure still stands. A phrase can still be used even if one lacks the parts to do it...Seeing as "Gritting my beak" doesn't make much sense now does it?

Ouch. Way to end the story on a cliff hanger but shit...This is not boding well for Ashes...

cool story bro.

This story is so great! 5 stars!

Also, I see Griffins having teeth. A lot of artists do as well. Gilda in her episode debut grinned and had a row of shiny teeth.

So although it might not make sense, it works, just like the FOE world!

I love how creative your footnotes are, and how well they tie into the real meat of the story.

I also like your knowledge of the Fall out Universe, and how your title quotes are always true to your chapter.

You're a very unique writer, readers can sense the care and time you put into your chapters, and we appreciate that!

Awesome!! And I really didn't find any grammatical errors myself, but I wasn't really paying attention to that, I was too involved in the story.

>>221361221361

You ain't seen nothin' yet. *Maniacal cackle*

>>222385222385

Thank you Space Captain!

>>232057232057

Stop inflating my ego, my head will explode.

Wow, great chapter as always.  I didn't notice any mistakes, or the scene was too interesting for me to care (either way a good thing).  I've noticed the chapters seem to be getting longer as time goes on, good job.  

What's this, a griffon cutie mark?  Well considering he already had a brand there I guess it makes sense.

The scene with the alicorn was a little weird though.  Why did the elevator just stop on that floor, then almost immediately Ashes gets mind-raped by the alicorn which he proceeds to mind-rape back (with fire).  Sorry for the rambling run-on sentence, but that whole scene was weird (cool but weird).

Then the perks.  They make sense and I'm looking forward to how these "Fire Spirits" will be used.

Again, great chapter; keep up the good work!

This is a fantastic read thus far, I would tentatively rate it as one of the better written sidestories at the moment. There's a lot I could write about this, but I'll leave that to others. I'm hungry. Eagerly awaiting the next chapter!

>>254506254506

Thank you, thank you! The cutie mark was just a little touch on my part, you'll hear more of his feelings on it later. And with the alicorn, I imagined that she had been posted there by the goddess to watch and stalked him through the facility if you'll recall. (Everything better with fire) And yes, more fire spirit perks will be used.  I really appreciate the feedback though, it contributes to the quality of the work immensely!

>>254896254896

I do my best to ply my humble craft of word and verse. Thank ya kindly!

Really good. Often times when writers start with a payoff like this they don't spend enough time leading up to it. This felt really smooth. Your writing was good and still improving, really worth the read.

Now this I approve of. Keep it up!

Damn it took a while to sort through the chaff that makes up the FOE group post on EQD, but this fic is worth it!

Great work i can remember when you posted this on deviant art Keep up the great work man ^^

You really should put your story in the fallout wikia.

I just found out 56 [my original number] is already listed as used on there. asked for it to be changed to 57 and now out of pure fucking chance, I find you're using 57.

List it on the wikia please, because I know it doesn't make a real difference, but its still something that some people [myself included] care for in a weird, unimportant way.

I'm now upping mine to 58, but please, list your story so this doesn't happen to others.

I did do a quick check on 56 but found nothing on here, but now found something on wikia. then nothing for 57 on the wikia and just used it.

so yeah. not related to your story so much, just a request - I'll even copy the fact you've got 57 onto the wikia for you.

This is one of the best FOE fics I have read. Keep it up!

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So many awesome comments that are made of awesome! Thank you everyone for your kind words.

>>267131267131

I appreciate the spot on the Stable list and for bringing this to my attention. I'm sorry if my choice inconvenienced you, I assure you it was a purely random choice. Like I've said before, the number of growing authors means it's more likely for us to sometimes step into each others works. It's important we communicate and work out any issues. It's a glorious community full of creative people (and ponies) and together we can figure out any possible canon (fanon?) conflict.

I'll have to step on over and check out your story!

oh god... poor cinder

>>269662269662

Just like in the PM I sent - sorry for being a douche. I feel bad about it now, I was just tired and frustrated and arrgh.

Like I say; your story is now listed on the Stables list, so 57 is officially yours. if I get time and find that no more info has been put on the wikia; I'll be sure to give it a link to your story and such, as part of my apology.

Hope everything is going well for you. sorry for all that >.<

Man, yoya story is fuckin awesome \0/.

Cant wait to read more of this mate im looking more to reading the next chapter than i was reading the last chapter of ph...No disrespect to somber i worship the guy, but if ya..you ever need any help with ANYTHING!!! Just send me a pm im really enjoying your work keep it up and take all the time you need to write more gold

>>280747280747

Whee! More ego fuel!

>>301129301129

Wow... damn that's quite the compliment. I hope the next chapter lives up!

>>313415313415 Eh every word in there is true mate you have a lot of potential with Ghost i cant really wait to see the next chapter keep up the wonderful work ^^

Im not really even sure i can keep up my story im glad we have story's like yours around

Yep so easy to start story and so hard to keep it up. And ofcourse absolutely imposible to finish it

Wow great chapter two of my favorite side ficts updated today yours and Fallout Equestria: Gathering Darknes My day has been made and it can only get better.

Unusual, can't wait to see what happens with the new abilities he's been granted.

Huzzah update!

This fic is doing great... Please keep up this storyline. It's definitely one of the more interesting ones.

Some missing words up in there, but really poetic this time. I especially liked the preacher's religious talk.

Weren't Ghost's feathers burnt last time? Maybe I'll have to read the end of that chapter again!

another awesome chapter

Upon second read, I think you adressed something important here, namely the relationship between the Griffons and the Enclave.

In the original, the Talons were largely indifferent to them, but that seems odd for pretty much any culture given the (Implied) genocidal war to take the Gryphonian skies.

Maybe the Enclave pulled the dishonour-the-leader trick to make discussing it a faux-par?

>>349001349001

Thank you for noticing this! Yes I did find the apathy as a good opportunity to insert a little something. As to the annexation itself I'm still deliberating. If memory serves Kkat mentioned a griffin council which made me think that the traditional griffin kingdom was organized sort of into independent city-states that all send leaders and whatnot.

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Comments like this are very much appreciated, they help me keep soldiering on.

>>346494346494

Much is planned good sir, I just hope that I haven't overstepped my bounds with the fire spirit thingy.

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Hm, must get over and read that one!

>>370927370927 Haha i know yull enjoy it also im almost positive that a griffin council was mentioned it may have been on the last chapter, also the fire powers i feel really helps ghost stand out not enough to be judged but enough to *Breaks perfectionism* BE AWESOME!! *Ahem* i meant it makes him more of a round character in the way he thinks /)

>>370927370927

Gawdnya mentioned something about democracy being a Gryphonian concept, so maybe analogous to modern day england or something. (ie respected but largely powerless nobles and bickering irritating policicians)

>>370957370957

More fire! Everything is better on fire! Even fire is better on fire! But yes, I'm trying to make Ghost different, a little dash of pyro, but not predictable pyro.

>>371298371298

WHO LEAKED MY PLANS!

Ahem.

Yes, I will be exploring the reasons there was no 'major' griffin involvement in the war. Ineffectual government anyone?

>>399301399301 *Sits and waites for the next chapter*  You had me at Griffin and pyro

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Applejack what does the scouter say about pinkys excitement level?

  IT"S OVER 9000!!!

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Im ah Firein Ma LAZOR BLAHHHHHHH

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how will she smash the scouter without fingers?

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Awesome chapta mah Zinny and Hammer is fun and cute, what else need for good background?   And ending just

TY... TY... TY.... for such a great chapter.

Comedy, philosophy, tragedy. This chapter has it all.

Are you referrencing Russian things?

But in all seriousness, very nice!

Wow i have to say that was a heart jerker   Im excited for the next chapter though i wonder what the reaction is going to be for when they roll up on the town in a functional car with the loss of the mayors sister