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Bwaak

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  • Ace Combat: Gryphon Wings
    Ten months after the Equestrian war, the Griffin Kingdom is on a road to recovery from the tyrranical rule of Red Cyclone. But an old threat from the past threatens to plunge the whole world into chaos.

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"...I have done many horrible deeds... but perhaps, there still a chance to atone for my mistakes...” ~ Black Star, former Captain of the Griffin Kingdom Air Force.

Decades before the Equestrian War began. The Principality of Belka, a griffon fascist nation located just south of the Griffin Kingdom and east of the Crystal Empire accepted the terms of surrender and merged it's government with the superpower the Griffin Empire to become the latter's industrial state. The Griffin Empire thought that the merging between the two nations will gain some benefit, unaware of the seeds of hatred were already being planted inside the newfound state...

Just 20 years before the Equestrian War, a massive catastrophe engulfed the planet as an asteroid broke up into ten thousand fragments and impacted the planet, causing severe loss of life and structures despite multiple asteroid counter-weapons had already been built. The disaster caused the Griffin Empire to collapse and become the smaller Griffin Kingdom, which it's relation with the neighboring superpower Equestria became more and more strained ever since the disaster.

Now, ten months after the Equestrian War, the griffon Black Star who seeks atonement or his past mistakes find himself caught in the crossfire between the rebellious state of Neue Gryphus and the still recovering Griffin Kingdom. The crossfire quickly escalated into a war and every dark secrets behind the war may plunge the entire Equine world into chaos. What's worse, an old threat from the past may hadn't made it's final move...

Will Black Star find atonement for his mistakes? Or die trying. (MLP: FiM universe merged with Strangereal)


This is a spin off of PolishValsion's Ace Combat: Equestria Chronicles and I already had his approval to write this. Several characters from his fic will appear in the future.

His stories:

Ace Combat: The Equestrian War

Ace Combat: Wings of Unity

The character profiles of this story can be viewed here:

Ace Combat: Gryphon Wings Character Profiles

If you find any grammar or spelling mistakes, I apologize. English is my second language and I'm still not very good at it. (very)

The story takes place before the start of Season 3 of the MLP: FiM and it will focus more on the griffons rather than the ponies. The story takes several elements from Air Combat, Ace Combat 3, 04, Zero, 6, Northern Wings, and Infinity.

Just like PolishValsion's stories, there are music links on the chapters to provide a sense of atmosphere on the story. Just open up a new tab and listen while reading. This is purely optional of course.

First Published
12th Jul 2013
Last Modified
15th Sep 2014

Comments ( 71 )

#1 · Chapter 1 · 63w, 3d ago · · ·

I can safely say I'll be following this story.

#2 · Chapter 1 · 62w, 4d ago · · ·

Oh great, it's finally here. How I come I didn't noticed it...?

A thumb up and a follow-up :D

#3 · Chapter 2 · 61w, 1d ago · · ·

Just to inform you, most of the ponies in this fic are racist towards the griffins since they're not under the princesses' rule.

#4 · Chapter 2 · 59w, 6d ago · 1 · ·

if i see flied in this one as well, i will cry.

#5 · Chapter 2 · 59w, 6d ago · · ·
#6 · Chapter 2 · 59w, 6d ago · 2 · ·

>>3002351

unless i am mistaken the other story this is based off, Polish fell into one of Englishes irregularities and used flied instead of flew for all of the story.

#7 · Chapter 2 · 59w, 6d ago · · ·

>>3003229

Oh, thanks for noticing me.

#8 · Chapter 5 · 39w, 5d ago · 1 · ·

>>3003229

You mean "flied"? That issue has already been solved long ago.

@Bwaak Your story keeps getting better :)

#9 · Chapter 5 · 39w, 3d ago · 1 · ·

Haven't gotten too far in, but it looks like you just might need an editor to comb over these.  For example:

"The figure turned around and gave the filly an ominous glare, causing the filly to froze in horror."

'Froze' should be 'freeze' in this instance.

#10 · Chapter 5 · 39w, 3d ago · · ·

>>3692399

The previous editor already give the Prologue a comb and already pointed out most of the mistakes in it. He didn't bring that issue up.

>>3684413

Thank you.

Comment posted by Bwaak deleted at 11:15am on the 1st of January, 2014
#12 · Chapter 6 · 37w, 17h ago · · ·

Oohhh... the plot thickens!

I better start updating my story, too. Yours keeps getting better and I keep seeing fewer grammar mistakes.

#13 · Chapter 7 · 33w, 6d ago · 1 · ·

Really? An art block? I think I had one when making my story, I mean two months. You update yours much faster.

Good to see some good deeds out of Blake. And I'm starting to like Kite, too ^ ^

#14 · Chapter 7 · 33w, 6d ago · 1 · ·

I wish you waited for me to edit this before posting it. I haven't been able to take a look at it yet. You should never release a product before it is ready. It's better to wait a couple days for for the grammar to be corrected first.

#15 · Chapter 7 · 33w, 6d ago · · ·

>>3897268

Yeah, I suffered one when I'm writing this. I forced myself to finish this chapter, hence why the quality started to degrade on the last parts. But it's my favorite chapter to write because of the Canyon Flight with Kite and Aggrypa.

Comment posted by Bwaak deleted at 9:39am on the 11th of February, 2014
#17 · Chapter 8 · 27w, 5d ago · 1 · ·

S.A.I.T.N.? I know how that is pronounced... clever.

Nice to see the changelings holding up still.

#18 · Chapter 8 · 27w, 5d ago · · ·

>>4108398

S.A.I.T.N.s acronym will be revealed in the next Chapter. It's due three of four weeks from now at best.

#19 · Chapter 9 · 26w, 2d ago · · ·

Damn, that was instense. And thanks for a small concept toward the Zeal.

Also, yay for a certain pony :)

#20 · Chapter 9 · 26w, 1d ago · · ·

>>4155910

Juggernaut is a small fry, there are two other Z.O.E. drones more powerful than him.

Princess Luna's role in the story will be more than just this, expect her to show up again in the future.

#21 · Chapter 9 · 24w, 9h ago · 2 · ·

That was the best thing ever!:rainbowkiss:

P.S Is Gilda going to show up in the story or no?

#22 · Chapter 9 · 24w, 7h ago · · ·

>>4236601

In the future, around Chapter 14 or 15

#23 · Chapter 10 · 23w, 21h ago · 1 · ·

This's going to be good:rainbowkiss::pinkiehappy:.

#24 · Chapter 10 · 23w, 18h ago · 1 · ·

Noticed at least two new references: Red Moon and Valais Air Base.

This looks good. Not yet edited, it seems, but it looks like your grammar is improving.

Hope you'll like my upcoming chapter, too ^ ^"

#25 · Chapter 10 · 23w, 10h ago · · ·

>>4269077

There are multiple references here beside the Ace Combat ones. Surprise is an example and the dialogue about "..brief taste of coconuts" was from Iron Man 2.

>>4268397

Just wait, the next battle is nothing but pure offensive to retake the city.

#26 · Chapter 10 · 22w, 5d ago · 1 · ·

It's getting very difficult to remember all these characters, since 99% of them are not from the show. I know you've drawn some of them, so it would be a very good idea to make a character sheet with pictures and provide a link to it in the description for quick reference.

#27 · Chapter 10 · 22w, 4d ago · · ·
#28 · Chapter 10 · 21w, 4d ago · · ·

>>4236601

Scratch that previous comment, Gilda's going to appear on Chapter 12. She's a part of a squadron.

#29 · Chapter 11 · 17w, 1d ago · 2 · ·

Nicely done my friend.:pinkiehappy:Ronin seems to be a good character and I love her interactions with some of the enemy soldiers. The links all fit the mood of the sections of the stories they were assign to and I couldn't be happier.:yay:

#30 · Chapter 11 · 17w, 1d ago · · ·

>>4482133

Thanks, I never expected Ronin to be popular though.

#31 · Chapter 11 · 16w, 3d ago · 1 · ·

Yikes, these Belkans are real bastards, aren't they? Great chapter!

(Though to be pedantic: an "Obligaory War Crime Scene", going by the TvTropes definition, is technically when the GOOD GUYS commit a war crime, AFAIK. So if our heroes, for whatever reason, bombed a Changeling Hive that they knew had hatchlings in it without warning, that would fit the strict definition. But that's just me being nitpicking; don't mind. :P)

#32 · Chapter 12 · 16w, 2d ago · · ·

>>4506537 Thanks man, for the comment and for the fave.

#33 · Chapter 12 · 16w, 2d ago · · ·

Going to overwatch, standing by

#34 · Chapter 12 · 16w, 1d ago · 1 · ·

Looks like things are getting serious now! Esser is going to be beyond evil and hard to take down as well.:twilightoops:

And I feel sorry for Kriegstreiber because the way he died was just:pinkiesick:,

#35 · Chapter 12 · 16w, 1d ago · · ·

>>4518213

"Learn to accept it kid, this is war." - Larry "Pixy" Foulke

Also, Esser's not evil. He just views the world differently from the heroes, also, he's a little bit nuts.

#36 · Chapter 12 · 16w, 1d ago · 1 · ·

>>4519621

Anyone that enjoys ripping someones head off is evil no matter who you look at it.:fluttercry:

#37 · Chapter 12 · 16w, 22h ago · 1 · ·

>>4513918 Welcome! I really like what you did here; you mirrored Polish's style nicely, but put your own twists on it. I especially like how the griffons are just a touch more brutal and aggressive in battle than the ponies, being carnivores/predators and armed with those sharp talons. :raritystarry:

And again, sorry for being pedantic earlier. I just saw the trope name, complete with capital letters, and my inner nitpicker came out. :pinkiesick:

(And anyway, I can't see anything like what I mentioned happening in this fic, even if it is somewhat darker than the original story. After what happened with Firefly's parents, and now Belkan atrocities in Pisa, I don't think Blake/Black Star would tolerate his squadron doing ANYTHING like that. He'd probably be the first to go in slashing if it did.)

#38 · Chapter 12 · 16w, 2h ago · · ·

>>4521027

Yeah, one problem with that. Black Star is only second-in-command in this story. The leader of the main squad is a Belkan named Riddle; he's a renowned scientist and weapons developer (like Tony Stark), a little bit of a troll, a veteran of the Belkan war and an honorable knight of the round table. Well, used to be.

#39 · Chapter 13 · 12w, 6d ago · 2 · ·

Did not think that Rad was a pawn in the last war...what a twist!:pinkiegasp:

#41 · Chapter 11 · 12w, 6d ago · 1 · ·

That's an intense battle out there. I like it! :D

#42 · Chapter 12 · 12w, 6d ago · 1 · ·

That ending... Fatality.

#43 · Chapter 13 · 12w, 6d ago · 1 · ·

Damn man, that's one twist I did NOT see coming. :pinkiegasp:

Still, I think you should check the text once more, there are some minor issues with commas or graamtical errors. Nothing too severe, though.

Keep up the good work :)

#44 · Chapter 13 · 12w, 6d ago · · ·

>>4630532

Heh, I'm glad that you guys were caught off guard by it. Blake's brain needed some time off after that reveal, in other words: he will enter a Horizon of Despair mode like Rainbow Dash.

Which text?

#45 · Chapter 13 · 12w, 6d ago · · ·
#46 · Chapter 14 · 10w, 4d ago · 1 · ·

Wow, that was touching. And nice of you to fully wrap up Blake's story. The writing's not so bad, but I just Wonder about what Ronin said in Japanese...

#47 · Chapter 14 · 10w, 3d ago · · ·

>>4713523 Ronin's basically saying "Damn... " in amazement.

#48 · Chapter 14 · 9w, 6d ago · 1 · ·

I kinda hope that Blake doesn't wind up making a Heroic Sacrifice at the end of all this, because it would be rather cool to see Aquila squadron flying alongside Mirage squadron.

#49 · Chapter 14 · 9w, 6d ago · · ·

>>4739559 You just have to wait and see. ^_^

#50 · Chapter 15 · 8w, 4d ago · 1 · ·

Beautiful, man! Loved Ronin's "Cruel Mercy" moment with Blue, great way to get rid of him.

And loving the reveal that we have a false Queen leading the 'lings under Esser's orders, not an alliance. I have a suspicsion she'll be involved in his inevitable demise somehow...hoist by his own petard, if you will.

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