Looks like this story is going downhill. Try making another story again, start from another scratch. Make sure your spellings, grammars and punctuation are correct. Try reading stories with high rates, and also find out what is the difference between past and present, singular and plural. My first story went like this, and I have to start from a scratch again. This is only a tip, no need to follow everything in this comment. Have a nice day.
Huh, your grammar is a lot better, but you say "shaft" and "marehood" way too many times. Use words like cock' dick, stallionhood, pussy, cunt, slit, or maybe clit. Just try to be more creative with word.choice. like the fic otherwise
Looks like this story is going downhill. Try making another story again, start from another scratch. Make sure your spellings, grammars and punctuation are correct. Try reading stories with high rates, and also find out what is the difference between past and present, singular and plural. My first story went like this, and I have to start from a scratch again. This is only a tip, no need to follow everything in this comment.
Have a nice day.
Huh, your grammar is a lot better, but you say "shaft" and "marehood" way too many times. Use words like cock' dick, stallionhood, pussy, cunt, slit, or maybe clit. Just try to be more creative with word.choice. like the fic otherwise