A man of dark magic and dreams of domination was flung into an unsupecting world of ponies. Watch as years later this dark lord faces down the greatest challenge he's ever known: parenting.
Blank Slate is the greatest thief of his generation, ready to pull off the heist of a lifetime. But you have to get up pretty early in the morning to get one past the pony who defines when ‘early in the morning’ is…
Equestria’s newest baron has just discovered that his new barony is entirely underwater, his new castle is a broken-down old riverboat, and his new subjects are… seaponies. Welcome to the Barony of Fen.
Unable to have a child of their own, Canterlot socialites Fancy Pants and Fleur give adoption a shot. Enter Chestnut—a filly from beyond Equestria who will quite possibly turn their life upside down.
Hello, I am your friendly neighborhood editor with some edits for you.
It would kill me. It would certainly kill me. That means I need a plan. Then it dawns on me. Going down at this speed might tunnel me into the earth.
I'm thinking you can cut this up into one or two sentences, like such:
It would kill me. It would certainly kill me, so that means I need a plan. Then it dawns on me, going down at this speed might tunnel me into the earth.
I stood in the clearing, everything was beautiful, crying was near my only option. Passing out from exhaustion was the other. I chose the second option and slept.
You need the comma there, or else the sentence doesn't make much sense.
I exited the cave and flew up and alighted on another cloud and willed it to take me home.
Thats a lot of ands.
Crystal Faire
I'm not sure if you meant to spell fair like that, or you did the same typo twice..
But amazing, Frosting! I love what you did with Cloudburst's character! It's sort of like gar beginning, before the other members of the 9. (I will not bother to explain what that means. Frosting understands)
Hello, I am your friendly neighborhood editor with some edits for you.
I'm thinking you can cut this up into one or two sentences, like such:
You need the comma there, or else the sentence doesn't make much sense.
Thats a lot of ands.
I'm not sure if you meant to spell fair like that, or you did the same typo twice..
I think there might be a bit more edits, that I missed. Overall, I liked it. Nice little fic for an OC.
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Have a brilliant day,
~Muffinpatrol
what Muffinpatrol said. Brilliant story btw.
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Alrighty then, the edits are done. Thanks for telling me what to fix, it really helps.
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Thank you, I'm not that good though. But I suppose it is an interesting one-shot.
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No problem, I'm glad I helped.
And feel free to send me a message if you need something edited.
Ahem, I believe that someone needs to give credit where credit is due. Sorry if I'm being pushy. -Bubbles
But amazing, Frosting! I love what you did with Cloudburst's character! It's sort of like gar beginning, before the other members of the 9. (I will not bother to explain what that means. Frosting understands)
Thank you frosting!