• Published 13th Jan 2013
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Maybe and after... - Fat1thatyoulove



Part 11 to the Maybe series. Follow the main character thought his newest magical mishap. (You're welcome to start at any part but if you want a better understanding of the overall plot start at the beginning.)

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Chapter 5

Chapter 5 (What went wrong?)

As you feel yourself being pulled into the ground you close your eyes. And silently make a deal with yourself, If I go to a world full of talking dolphins...i’m drowning myself.

“It worked!”

You open your eyes at the voice, “Spike?”

Turn to face Spike sitting at the table with the book open and a quill in one hand.

Spike jumps off the chair and runs over to you both “I came down stairs and saw you guys teleport, only that didn’t look like a normal teleport spell. So I looked at the book and sure enough.” Spike hold the book up to you “It’s a cursed book, see?” Spike points to orange markings on the book “All curses leave some kind of trace.”

Rainbow is still holding onto you as she talks “Cursed? How did you un-curse use?” Rainbow realizes she is still holding on to you and pushes you off of her as she flies up off the ground.

Spike holds his head up high “Easy I re-wrote the book.”

You hover the book to you and notice inked out words and writing on the sides of the pages, “You wrote everything?”

Spike rubs his head, “Well ya.”

You flip to the last page and look over the words, sure enough you see the line about you kissing Rainbow.

Rainbow dash snacthes the book from you grasp “Let me see that.” She looks over the text and then
looks at you “Well I guess I can’t pummel you now.”

You smile and blush a little at her comment, You may be a pony but you still think you can take her…but just to be on the safe side until you learn how to fight like a pony you will let her off with a warning. “OK.”

Rainbow turns her gaze to Spike “But as for you.”

Spike backs up slowly “Oh come on I saved your guy's life, doesn’t that count?”

Rainbow looks back to you “You want to help me with this?”

You shake your head.

Rainbow grabs for Spike but Spike runs away towards the stairs “I’m sorry I’m sorry.”

Rainbow chases after him “Spike all I’m going to do is dye you pink again, now come here!”

You hear Spike scream out “NO, I just got my scales purple again. Come on Rainbow!”

You sit back down on the ground and relax a bit. You float the book back up to you and you read over what you just did. It dawns on you, why didn’t Spike just bring us home at the first house? You stare at the page for a moment. “Hey Rainbow hold Spike down.”

As you start to walk up the stairs you hear the door open behind you. You turn around and watch as Twilight pulls her bag off of herself and places it back in it’s spot. She looks up the stairs towards the sound of Spike screaming and Rainbow laughing. “Did I miss anything?”

You smile as stares at you for an answer. The new feel of happiness you've got from seeing her face takes over your previous plan of action as you get off the stairs and walk towards her. “Just the normal.”

End of chapter 5

Maybe and after all

Comments ( 15 )

*gets mad at fate*... its 02:00 am here... (GMT+1)... time to "hit the hay"...

*reserves this comment for tomorrow* god... i know i will be unable to sleep well,... with the knowledge there is a new "Maybe,,," Story... :fluttercry:

P.S. unread: thump up + fave and Fat1thatyoulove know why ^^

<Next Day>
PRICELESS!!! Thats to rich!!! I freaking LOVE it!

But to be honest; this Story would be called a stopgap, if this would be a TV-Show ;p even if it have Main-Story developing elements.
"The prime main character is separated from the secondary main character, with have to do something of its own, with no prior hint that it will be happen in next the episode and the beginning situation of the episode is nearly identical to the ending situation, AND no focusing on the secondary main Character and what he or she have done the entire time."

Maybe a little review what Twilight have done would be good, to throw the "Ow nothing have happened... expect for a medium apocalypse" joke near the end is very good, but to let a Story or Chapter end this way is a, sorry to say that, lame habit ^^""".
no offense ^^"""

Well thats all i have found ^^ but all in all (i hope this is actually a phrase in English ;p) its again a great work. ^^

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Thanks for the feedback. And yes this part was more of a stand alone story just for the main character, I just wanted to try something a bit different.

1953046 always happy to help ^^

and yes, this 'trying a new thing' i have realized ^^ (beside out of the introduction of the story)

(NORMAL NON AJ VOICE)
this has been one of three of the best chapters in the hole story, great.

1973499

LOL thanks, I am trying to turn the main character into more of a hero. That was the change I was trying with this part. :twilightsmile:

Tyler lern hwo to muke gud storiees. I cuntz mukesz butter storiee witouth luking..

2092822

Actully is Futty, :pinkiecrazy:

Now I haz 2 geo m3k moar soriez

2092833
Yeah, maybe you should lERN HWO TWO FUICKING SPELE111

2092838

:duck: Maybe I should...

new story idea thanks Paul . :pinkiehappy:

2133564

LAMO! that was good, I applaud you for bringing that up.

3195187

I thought you already read all these? And also DX is were it WAS at not the Rock :raritywink:

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