Solitary confinement. An extreme measure used to control and tame the most violent of prisoners. Long term confinement is know to cause server psychological effects. So after a thousand years is it any surprise the prisoner isn't exactly... norm
I liked this a lot. I feel like the long length was worth it. I knew something was up with Prince (un)Noble. There were some typos like forgetting quotation marks when breaking up quotes with action ( ex., "she yawned, this was") and its/it's confusion but it was still legible.
The Noble part much remind me Fight Club Atlast i dont understand what Noble want - if this not coup, so what it? A power ? Interesting... And i happy that Luna do so much progress, and learn how keep her anger and desire under control. I wait next chapter,hope this can be soon
3869776 Thx very much I was worried about trying my hand at making some intrigue and side plots in the story, especially with OC characters but I'm glad you've liked it. Have lots of plans for noble. Hopefully his machinations will be interesting to read
3868929 I couldn't help the comparison to fight club i was thinking, uh oh its kinda fight clubby, but then remembered how awesome that movie was and thought 'yeah people will forgive that' but anyway for Noble its more about money and control with his little club. As for Luna I'm trying to make her have a realistic(ish) growth and becoming stronger and dealing with her problems. Would be boring if she was a wreck forever but I'm liking writing about her struggle to get better. even if she still sees things she at least knows they aren't real even if she can't give them up
3866559 apologies about the grammer, kinda get carried away and forget to double check my work. and even then still not sure what have the stuff im writing is working. never had a formal literature education as such. But anyway thanks for the comment and I'm glad you like Noble i tried to make him an interesting villain cause they're much better then simple bad guys
3870131 Ill just say that Desire may say she represents what Lunas heart wants. But in truth we keep many of our desires buried for a reason. Some thoughts and ideas are supposed to be suppressed because of what they might lead you to do.
3870662 sorry to be all mysterious but I can neither confirm or deny. actually honestly still working it out. have some ideas about how that will pan out but have to see how it writes im afraid
Well, finally got around to reading this chapter after wondering if this had any news on being updated. Turns out it was not showing on top of my favorites even though it had an undread chapter for a looong time, hate that bug. Long chapter, read it in pieces but I thought it was good. Probably could have split it in two chapters (Arena Arc/Speech Arc) but if one likes to do everything in one go that is what one does. :) Also, huge improvements when going forward in chapters in presentation and general feel. Although still missing alot of "speech" quatation marks. Not that I mind since outside of huge grammar mistakes nothing technical really jars me from enjoying a good story.
Since I haven't commented before I must admit I've waited for a good story about lost her mind on moon Luna since forever and don't know of any nice ones outside of this and Lunacy. So huge bonus points for hitting one of my pet story premises that I would like to see more of. Also if it is as it seems you're heading that way I'll also admit to also liking Celestia&Luna ship if done seriously. The bow to me and balcony scene after where Luna sort of claims Celestia as hers woving that nothing will be allowed between that gives me the chills. It promises me the premise of a very unhealthy start for possible relationship with posessiveness and mayby the other not being able to deny anything to the other because of feelings of guilt held. Then some catalyst that actually turns the ship in to a healthy one in future, mayby. Another pet story premise that bounces in my brain but unfortunately nobody has written to my knowledge. But thats stupid speculation and I'm told writers hate that.
So, I hope everything works out at your work and you find time to continue this. Because to me it's a very rare gem. Also to hope my favorites actually show when this updates next time... :)
I liked this a lot. I feel like the long length was worth it. I knew something was up with Prince (un)Noble. There were some typos like forgetting quotation marks when breaking up quotes with action ( ex., "she yawned, this was") and its/it's confusion but it was still legible.
The Noble part much remind me Fight Club Atlast i dont understand what Noble want - if this not coup, so what it? A power ? Interesting... And i happy that Luna do so much progress, and learn how keep her anger and desire under control. I wait next chapter,hope this can be soon
3869776
Thx very much
I was worried about trying my hand at making some intrigue and side plots in the story, especially with OC characters but I'm glad you've liked it.
Have lots of plans for noble. Hopefully his machinations will be interesting to read
3868929
I couldn't help the comparison to fight club i was thinking, uh oh its kinda fight clubby, but then remembered how awesome that movie was and thought 'yeah people will forgive that' but anyway for Noble its more about money and control with his little club.
As for Luna I'm trying to make her have a realistic(ish) growth and becoming stronger and dealing with her problems. Would be boring if she was a wreck forever but I'm liking writing about her struggle to get better. even if she still sees things she at least knows they aren't real even if she can't give them up
3866559
apologies about the grammer, kinda get carried away and forget to double check my work. and even then still not sure what have the stuff im writing is working. never had a formal literature education as such.
But anyway thanks for the comment and I'm glad you like Noble i tried to make him an interesting villain cause they're much better then simple bad guys
3870131
Ill just say that Desire may say she represents what Lunas heart wants. But in truth we keep many of our desires buried for a reason. Some thoughts and ideas are supposed to be suppressed because of what they might lead you to do.
3870662
sorry to be all mysterious but I can neither confirm or deny.
actually honestly still working it out. have some ideas about how that will pan out but have to see how it writes im afraid
Update plz?
Well, finally got around to reading this chapter after wondering if this had any news on being updated. Turns out it was not showing on top of my favorites even though it had an undread chapter for a looong time, hate that bug. Long chapter, read it in pieces but I thought it was good. Probably could have split it in two chapters (Arena Arc/Speech Arc) but if one likes to do everything in one go that is what one does. :) Also, huge improvements when going forward in chapters in presentation and general feel. Although still missing alot of "speech" quatation marks. Not that I mind since outside of huge grammar mistakes nothing technical really jars me from enjoying a good story.
Since I haven't commented before I must admit I've waited for a good story about lost her mind on moon Luna since forever and don't know of any nice ones outside of this and Lunacy. So huge bonus points for hitting one of my pet story premises that I would like to see more of. Also if it is as it seems you're heading that way I'll also admit to also liking Celestia&Luna ship if done seriously. The bow to me and balcony scene after where Luna sort of claims Celestia as hers woving that nothing will be allowed between that gives me the chills. It promises me the premise of a very unhealthy start for possible relationship with posessiveness and mayby the other not being able to deny anything to the other because of feelings of guilt held. Then some catalyst that actually turns the ship in to a healthy one in future, mayby. Another pet story premise that bounces in my brain but unfortunately nobody has written to my knowledge. But thats stupid speculation and I'm told writers hate that.
So, I hope everything works out at your work and you find time to continue this. Because to me it's a very rare gem. Also to hope my favorites actually show when this updates next time... :)