Diaries of a Canterlot Librarian

by Cloud Shaker

Whatever happened to Dusty Scroll?

Dusty caught up to Rarity as she was about to board her platform. "Rarity, I love you! Please forgive me for m-"
He never even saw the slap coming, and quickly fell unconscious against the train platform.

"What an uncouth stallion you are! I can't believe I had even agreed to lunch with you!" With a huff, Rarity boarded the train back home for Ponyville, leaving Dusty's prone form on that wooden platform while never looking back.

A word from the Author:

I'm sorry if this pisses you off, but as I said earlier I'm not very good at writing. The story felt like it was taking forever to develop at times, and then I felt that my characters were acting OOC at other times. I finally got fed up with the lack of cohesiveness and just decided to end it before it got worse.

Over all, this was a good experience for me writing, but it's not the quality of work I wanted to create.

Oh well, I guess I'll have to work on it.

Regards, Cloud Shaker

Comments

[DerpieDoo]

Not a bad wee tale If you don't have one yet I do recommend you look into getting a pre-reader to flush out the odd spelling mistake here and there, and also just to tidy up some past tense/present tense mismatches. The narrative is generally good but there are the odd jumps in perspective that can catch the reader out on occasion.

All in all a good effort that probably deserves a bit more recognition

Keep up the good work!

[Cloud Shaker]

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I thank you for the kind words, sir or madam. Truth be told, I felt l was going nowhere with this story. Guess Slice of Life isn't really my forte, although I did enjoy the fact that I didn't need an extensive plot to cover the storyline.

[Sirflysalot]

... Meh ill thumbs it up
Good plot
exacution coulda been better but thats what practise is for