After Rainbow Dash has an especially vivid dream about the mare she loves, Twilight, she decides to finally confess her feelings to her, for better or for worse. Meanwhile, members of the Sombranian cult plot to revive their fallen master, King Sombra, but they are short one very important thing… a baby dragon.
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stare at the abyss... the abyss stares back.
DESTROY THEM WITH LAZERS!
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Lol, that's the plan! XP
1896545 WOOHOO! AND WHEN THAT HAPPENS YOU NEED TO PLAY THE KNIFE PARTY SONG.
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Lol, which one?
I wouldnt say twilights mind is fragile and saying that would turn alot of readers away
The ony place i see this hinted at in the show is lesson zero and she learns her lesson in that (what doesnt kill you makes you stronger i think theres a couple million songs about that)
and in lesson zero she snapped due to academic reasons while when the hydra or cerbrus threatend them she kept a cool head so ya shes not alaround fragile minded
anyways still sounds like a good story besides that tidbit so im off to read it
That cover art... so damn cute! Now, I'm going to read this and give you a proper review! Maybe we can discuss some of the finer points of the story.
Not bad. You might want to consider varying your descriptions a bit more; most notably you called Rover a "mangy mutt" and "mutt" several times successively, but on several other occasions as well you used the same terms for characters repeatedly. Not necessarily bad, but it's better to mix it up a bit.
1896571 Destroy them with lasers of course
You can't blame the cult for being stupid....Just look at their recruitment posters.
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This looks good. I will join you in your anticipation for the twidashy goodness. I don't normally like shipping all that much, but twidash has always been a special exception for me. The two are just too cute together
Have a thumbs up and fave my good writer.
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Thanks man!
hmmm very good young grasshopper.
you have learned the way of the pen well.
Now snatch this muffin from my grasp and your training shall be com-
Damn it Derpy...
Ah, glad to see an update here my friend.
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Likewise. I apologize for taking so long to update, but now that I'm back in the swing of things with college, I should be able to write much more often now!
Just another day in Ponyville! So far I'm enjoying this, and I'm happy to see that it updated
Ugh crap university...which reminds me I should probably start writing that assignment up...
I'LL BE BACK!
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Let me know what you think when you read it, I have a feeling you are gonna like it!
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Okay fuck the assignment (it's worth 5%, not a big deal) time to read this.
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Alright yes I greatly enjoyed this and am liking where this is going. Now Rainbow just has to confess her feelings to Twilight and both have to deal with a crazed King Sombra cult. Considering it's Sombra's cult we're talking about here (even with the Diamond Dogs, but considering it's the diamond dogs...) I think they'll make it out okay.
Oh and this:
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Glad to hear you liked it! I already have chapter 2's outline typed up, and all I have to do is flesh it out, and then hopefully have it uploaded within a week. (Don't worry, you won't have to wait another month XP)
good. good. you'lll update more often/quicker... right?
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Of course! I wouldn't make ya'll wait another whole month! Im hoping to have the next chapter uploaded by next weekend, and it's gonna be a doozy!
2102810 soooooo... Twilight is gonna burst into flames again?
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Lol, possibly...
And chapter 2's outline is complete! It will definitely be up within a week.
Indeed. I like this. I will be keeping an eye out on this one. You may just get stuck up on my page as an all time favorite the same as The Spell to Happiness which is sittin' pretty in one of those spots.
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I'm really glad you liked it! And btw, I just added your two stories to my read later list; they look pretty interesting! I'll give them a read when I take a break from writing this next chapter.
2109115 Sounds great.
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Ah, don't worry about it.
Hey everypony, Chapter 2 is done and it will be up soon! (I need to send it off to my editor still, but he gets things done quickly)
And chapter 2 is up! Enjoy!
Wow! Nice story ya got here! ya got a Fav n' Like!
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Thanks!
fuck that mordronous dude! he SO needs to die!
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Oh, trust me; I have something special in mind for him...
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you can't hear it, but i'm laughing manically enough to be getting worried looks from my boss.
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Hahaha, nice!
I can see Twi burning up those guys with no effort!
Great Chapter. Here, 5 of 5 Spikes
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Thanks!
Wooo update! Man, things are picking up quickly here. Who knew the Sombronian Cult would actually be more intimidating than Sombra himself? Mord looks more threatening and powerful than Sombra did
Also this (in case I haven't posted it on this story before):
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Lol you did. That's an awesome pic by the way; my friends and I all got a good laugh from it.
Haha nice chapter glad this is still going
2145312no no no... he needs to slowly be dipped JUST close enough to the lava so his skin melts off, and he will feel all of his organs schlop out.
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Hmmm...not a bad idea! I might just do something along the lines of that in the future.