Spike begins to question Twilight's authority over him when he is unsure of how to perceive his relationship with her.
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Exactly a thousand words? Interesting... and the title does remind me of that Fairly Odd Parents episode... Okay. I'll read it. I'll let you know when I finish.
Well, that was incredibly weird.
But I liked it. I thought it was a good laugh.
Finished reading it. It was a bit funny at the end, though I noticed you had a few grammar errors in the story.
"Spike tossed and turned in his little bed. Although he now understood his role in life as a baby dragon growing up as a pony, but another problem whirled around in his mind."
There are two dependent clauses in this, and every sentence must have an independent clause. Remove the "but" or the "although" so that this can be an actual sentence.
"Spike: you have wo moms."
Two, no wo.
In any case, this wasn't the best story, and it was probably made just to be silly like this, but I liked it. It was nice.
Arrrrgh, why's a good plot line have to be snuffed out?
Pleaaase, expand the plot, add more exposition/characterization...
Got so much potential here...
1884120 I have to agree this could if Worked right become a very very good story worth multiple chapters. With the basis of is twilight Spikes mom. I find this one tyo be slighly... ok alot off. Not even really funny.
I dont Twilight is that cranky, and, not much of a plot
1883951 No problem, I fixed the errors, and removed "but" and, humorously, this story is now unlawful in its word count. Also, when I first finished this story, it was like 600-something, so I kept writing and added an epilogue and, coincidentally, it became 1,000 words.
1884120 Allow me to elaborate on the construction of this story: after re-watching "The Cutie Mark Chronicles" one day several months ago, I was like, "You know...Twilight could be Spike's mother, depending on how you look at things." So I decided to write a quick chuckler story about it. The purpose of this story is to essentially broadcast my observation. To be honest, I can't think of much more that could happen plot-wise should I continue the story under the assumption that Twilight is, in fact, Spike's mother.
And, to everyone who WOULD like to see more of this story: give me some time to build the story and, more importantly, finish Leader of the Pack and maybe I'll put this before Sisters of the Hood in my lineup. I'm a writer for the people: if the people want it, they got it. Especially all my friends of the Brony community.
Oh I just love how out of character twilight is
Great read
ending = not really to my satisfaction...but whatever, great story :)
Well...it was a nice try, I guess.
I seriously feel like you trolled the crap out of me.
1995527 I'm no troll. I'm just grayscale.
What just happened... Does this mean Spike has 2 mothers and a father?
2148351 No, just two possible mothers and a dragon father whom we never hear from. It's like the play "Mamma Mia" in which there are three possible fathers for Sophie. Just, in Spike's case, two mothers, and it all depends on your biologic perspective.
W.T.F