(Takes place between Seasons 1-2)
Princess Luna has found it difficult to adjust to her environment after the events of the Summer Sun Celebration. It is increasingly apparent that while her subject tolerate her, they are still fearful and cautious of her. While Luna is plagued by social issues a new threat rises in Equestria.
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Aside from a few grammatical errors the story is pretty good, I don't know why this doesn't have more views?
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Why, thank you! And I apologize about my grammar. My english is a bit poor.
Interesting so far. Will watch.
Do you post these every day?
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Yes I do. At least, that is how I plan on posting them.
After reading through chapter 13:
The way you're writing this story is awesome. I think that the characters are well developed and I enjoyed how you portrayed luna as a total badass while adding a caring side as well. There is never really a lull in the awesomeness in this story. Bravo, Well done, Keep up the good work, and I can't wait for the next chapter.
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Wow, thank you. You give this story way too much praise, my friend.
1886018 I meant every word. It is definitely one of the best stories I've read on this site.
and on a completely different note, how do you get the names to appear instead of these numbers?
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If you're clicking the comment reply key it shows up as a set of numbers while creating the reply. Once you actually post the comment it should convert it to something like >>...
And if you're not clicking the comment reply key it's located in the top right corner of each comment. From my perspective each comment you post ends up just fine. Each one so far has had that >>Leviathan.
damn this story makes me sweat
I still don't get it why you have so little viewers but this story is GOOD!!! FANTASTIC EVEN!!!
each chapter you manage to get me into it even more, each chapter you could had easily end it there but you ended up bring more than expected, from conflict to solution to more conflict
I be honest with you and say that I ended up looking forward to my mornings hoping you update since dec
Dangit man, you just had to go and make me angry, didn't you?
i wont say i love it but i will say its better than good
Not feel anything! NOT FEEL ANYTHING ! Her death is the worst part of this whole chapter. I'm done I don't have the words.
rainfall...why must you kill her
its impossible to say not to feel anything cause she is like luna's only friend and company in your story
and she is cute
like i said "conflict and solution than more conflict"
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It was a bit shorter than I have been writing and the character, Paradise, was a bit less interesting than I have tried to make it so far.
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I wasn't pulling a Wheaton or anything. Rainfall's death does have a specific purpose. This purpose will become more apparent in the epilogue.
thank you man for sharing your wonderful story
Still wonder who was the one that wanted to kill Luna though I can understand a bit why that pony done it.
in my view your English is ok
though if you still have doubts than practice some more until you are satisfied since it never hurts to aim for more
read from the beginning till the end so well done and congrazes on finishing such a long and good story
but still don't want Rainfall to die though
once again a job well done
You don’t seem to be using ‘novel’ in the right context: a novel is fiction, in prose. The books Luna and Rainfall were reading were nonfiction.
My should be mine.
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Really? I don't have the best understanding of the language so I really appreciate that. Thank you.
Cool!
Really good...
As for that plot-hole you left in the ending, consider it a way to set up a sequel.
I loved this whole story, it was very well written, plot wise and I highly enjoyed it.
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Thank you, I appreciate the compliment. I'm also slightly impressed you managed to find this story in the sea of Luna-centered fan fiction, considering it's relatively old.
4330051 You're most welcome. I found it by chance in one of the groups, and it seemed to have an interesting enough concept. I did fully enjoy it and I do hope that this is not the only tale you have.
Okay, so, this is the issue.
I understand that both parties are at fault in this regard, where Luna is ignorant and Celestia Oblivious, but LEAVING LUNA- ALONE -WITH HER THOUGHTS?! The fuck is Celestia thinking?!
As the saying goes, the idle mind is the devils playground. That's what happened with Luna in the past.
And I understand that Celestia is busy and needs to play along with the high society ass-hats and run a country, but if I was in Celestia's shoes and I got my sister back, FUCK the country! I'm gonna love my sister and spend almost every waking moment with her, and get our relationship going again on good terms...
And I get Celestia probably doesn't know how to approach it, but at least TRY putting your whole devotion into it!
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I've said my peace. Lol. Love the story, so far. Onward!