Heart Shield has always been different from other ponies, and keeps mostly to himself. When he’s sent to Ponyville, he has to learn to adjust to his new life, and new friends; quickly getting into a routine of helping around the town.
Finding an injured Chrysalis in the Everfree Forest changes his life, and the lives of his friends, in ways he never would have imagined. Despite how the others view her, and despite the past he learns she and his friends share, Heart Shield has seen a different side of her and trusts her completely.
Has the Changeling Queen truly changed, or has she merely used the naïve pegasus while a wave of new, more powerful changelings threaten to destroy everything he and his friends know?
Chapters (16)
Apologies everyone, but Change the Heart will be on hiatus until I can get my computer repaired. I will be working on new chapters in the meantime (and rehashing some later ones that I had already made) and hopefully I'll have at least one new chapter up sometime in January or February.
Any input on how the story looks so far is appreciated, along with any mistakes in spelling, grammer, or just plain unclear sections.
how am i suppose to post my stuff if my editor is indisposed of? and how am i suppose to review your work if your AWOL? oh and congrats on the likes and favorites. from what i have seen of your other sites u are quite hyped about them.
so come on bronies give this guy some likes! i want him to have a heart attack when he logs back on!
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Of course I'm hyped, wouldn't you be?
And I'll still be reviewing your pieces, it'll just take me a little longer to get around to it. Bring me what you have tomorrow or thursday and I'll see what I can do.
I am enjoying the grey morality of this fic. Keep up the good work.
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Ah! Thank you!
When a little girl in a deserted town asks you to play a game in a creepy voice YOU FUCKING RUNNNNNN!!!!!!!
That's all I have to say.
Megatron out
1820772 It is February, get to work please?
3951237 As soon as I get Word back on my comp (explained in the most recent blog post) I will. Unfortunately I can't even access the files I've been working on at the moment, so until I can scrounge up enough money between paying rent and gas (which leaves very little left from my paychecks), I can't even resume the progress on the next chapter. Which frustrates me because that was one of my favorites when I was making the outline
4021934 have you tried google docs or openoffice.org?
both of those are very similar in use to ms word. openoffice can save in doc format, and gdocs can be imported to fimfiction in the chapter editor.
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Work has resumed!
Hopefully I'll be able to finish chapter 12 by the end of May; it's one of the tougher ones for me to writeWell at least it's coming along
Huh, interesting start. Didn't see a single error. The main character seems nice and you write Derpy really well.
Really surprised there aren't more comments on this, the second chapter has all the characters down perfectly and I've spotted no mistakes.
Now just waiting for the best ling to appear.
That was nice.
God damn it, Spike.
Yay changelings!
Best ling appears!
Twilight, you cunt!
I hope Chryssie is alright.
Not cool, Twilight, hiding parts of the truth like that.
Hell hath no fury like a Chryssie scorned.
Huh, a different faction of changelings... Od Maybe the previous one, but changed... I have a feeling Twilight unwittingly sent Chryssie somewhere horrible.
7372174 I've been a little worried about this and the previous chapter in regards to Twilight's presentation. I wanted to show how much Chrysalis had affected her, but I also can't shake the feeling that Twilight's not acting like she normally would, and I've tried hard to make characters be represented as close to how they were in the show (save for Chrysalis).
7372463 All will be revealed in about 2 or 5 chapters (depending on what you consider to be the real revelation), but without spoiling too much I will say you're not too far from the mark.
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Thank you! Derpy is one of the harder ponies for me to write simply because I know there's so much that can go wrong if I mess up her presentation, so it's nice to hear you think that!
7372555 Well, she seems to act mostly as she should. The part where she hid some info shows that she's gotten a bit obsessive about that, that she is 100 percent sure that it was a lie and doesn't want others to hear it since she thinks they might be tricked by it.
7372557 alright, I'll try to keep my patience until then.
7372559 I like how you write her. She's really positive, a bit quirky, but not retarded, which is how some authors write her. This Derpy seems like someone who'd be an awesome friend.
Of course, since her appearances on the show are rather scarce, there's little in terms of Canon, and what is, comes mostly from the 100th episode, which drew tons of inspiration from fanon. This, everyone has their own idea what she should be like.
But for me, this is one of the best versions.
Poor draggies.
i Just hope some of them left before the Attack.
That does not hope well.
Well, that was fun. The next chapter can't come soon enough.
To be we didn't get to hear the story behind the ghosts.
7374154 That's pretty much what had been taking this chapter so long to come out. I'd already decided way back when I first started the story that there'd be the story contest and spent a lot of time researching different horror stories for Clover Patch to do a spin on. When that didn't work so well I tried to get out the story of how all the phantoms came about, which is entirely her fault, but the story always felt flat and not scary and I wanted it to be on par with Heart Shield's story. Eventually, a couple months ago, I decided to forgo all that and just gloss over her story like I did.
My editors liked how this version went, saying that it now leaves it up to the reader's imagination to consider what really happened to the island, and since this was over 2 years overdue, I decided that was good enough to post.
And thank you! I'm working on the new chapter as fast as I can, but I can tell you that there will not be any more for some time. I'm not going to publish another chapter until the full book is finished and I can set a release schedule for them. I'll try to keep people updated, but if you want to make sure you catch the chapters as soon as they come out your best bet is to add this story to your watch so you get notified.
7374010 I felt that this bit would be a good way to fully show off the strength of the new changelings, able to dispatch so many fully-grown dragons with complete ease and speed. I believe that in chapter 14 we learn the fate of the dragons that had left before the attack.
7372835 Yeah, I took some inspiration from the Doctor Whooves and Assistant series on youtube when it came to making her personality. To me, Derpy sees everything in a very simple light and doesn't look at things as closely or with as much bias/scrutiny as everyone else. What you see is what you get in her eyes, so when she befriends Heart Shield, it's because there was a new pegasus to be friends with, which is what she saw rather than the "large-winged freak". I also applied this to how she handles everything. If there's something she knows that helps her feel better, that's going to be her first choice when it comes to others (like when she brings muffins to the grieving Heart Shield and stays with him to listen to his stories of Sugarcube).
Friendly, simple, and certainly far wiser than she otherwise seems because of it.
Yay~ More stories is always good. Especially if they involve my favourite character.
Hah, so that's why all those errors popped out when I was trying to post this a moment ago.
7948469 Yeah, stupid phone.
Don't you worry, you're definitely going to get your Chrysalis fix with what I have planned.
7948580 Awesome.
7948850 Actually, the original was right save for one word - foal refers to young horses of both genders. Replace it with colt and it's correct. Or just use foals.
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7949171 My editor mentioned something like that a while back but we both weren't sure since I think the show referred to those two as foal and filly and we were uncertain if foals was correct.
Thanks for pointing that out, I'll switch it over to foals.
Oooooooh awesome story so far! I hope to read more soon!
7958144 Thank you! I'm glad you like it!
Wonder if this will ever be updated.
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It will, a lack of time from work and just so much life stress has sapped my drive, but I will be updating and finishing this.
Holy carp, it lives!
... And after six years i have almost no memory of what happened earlier, time to reread the previous chapters before reading this one.