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The world is now objectively a better place.
Greatest work of literature in the English language?
Maybe.
Maybe.
Relevant to the title:
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If this story were a forced metaphor, it would be a basketball, and you would be Adam Jensen.
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They really should've sent a poet.
Should I fear thee or should I praise thee?.......static.fjcdn.com/pictures/Praise_c8b048_1529357.jpg
wtf did I just read?
This is my favorite part.
Also the other parts.
My life has meaning now.
There are so many things wrong with this.There are so many things right with this.There are so many things wrong with this.
So really, if there's anything to take away from this, it's that a story is not good literature without a dinosaur sex contest.
Well damn, have I ever been barking down the wrong path!
1816050 you really have.
schlecccchhhhhht.....
Just constructive criticism:
Undiplomatic and Story disturbing choice of words here. In literally speaking is, like everypony knows, nearly everything ok, but if you (as the writer) describe something, avoid negative words, unless you really want to cause this bad, negative feelings in your readers. This would make your literally voice 'sound' more pleasant, smooth and make the flow of your stories also smoother.
And if you use such Heavy, negative words, like fat and stinky, try to avoid it to repeat them in short time or better don't use them in the same chapter in the same meaning and or constellation again.
But non than the less(i hope i use this phrase at least correctly) its an interesting Setting you created until now.
but how I am to say this. ^^
1831039 ich verstehe nicht
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I see what you did there
1831039
First, do you release who wrote this story? They are the most infamous troll on fimfiction.
Second, sometimes you to cause, bad, negative feelings in the reader.
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1831815 ach ignorier mich einfach ^^... manchmal bin ich einfach nur verwirrt... XD
wenn du das: schlecccchhhhhht..... meinst... pure Verwirrung XD...
P.S. btw, ich fand die ganze Story recht verwirrend n' Dino in MiP FiM?... einfach so... ich meine Verwirrung ist ne tolle sache, aber wenn der leser noch ne Woche später verwirrt davor sitzt ist entweder was katastrophal schief gelaufen, oder hat episch gut funktioniert... was von beidem war den der Fall???... *Wie n' Kanickel in' Backofen stier*