Chapter 1
“Fluttershy! It's time to come out of the closet.”
“No,” a soft and meek voice drifted from the firmly shut closet door.
“It's okay to be nervous. But you have to come out.” Twilight trotted back and forth across the bedroom floor, her new dress shifting pleasantly with each bounce.
“No, I don't.”
“Our reservations are in half an hour and it'll take us twenty minutes to get there.” Twilight looked at a golden pocket watch with annoyance. There was a picture of a butter yellow pegasus in the cover.
“I don't like Italian food.”
“I know that. Mareachi isn't an Italian restaurant. They don't even serve spaghetti. That's why I chose it.”
“I don't like whatever it is that they serve.”
“Now you're just being ridiculous.” Twilight's eyebrow twitched in aggravation. “Please, just come out of the closet.”
“I can't.”
Twilight looked around and picked up a squirrel at random from Fluttershy's floor.
“I have a squirrel. It appears to be injured in someway...”
In a blur the door opened, a yellow hoof snatched away the offered squirrel and the door slammed shut once more.
A moment latter the door opened a crack and the squirrel in question made it's escape.
“That squirrel was fine,” said an indignant Fluttershy.
“Please Fluttershy. Come out of the closet.”
“I can't.”
“I got you roses.” Twilight picked up the bouquet of a half dozen roses. She gave it a rustle to make sure that Fluttershy could hear the leaves.
“I know. They smell lovely.”
“They sure do look great.” Twilight trotted back to the bed. “But you wouldn't know. You haven't seen them.”
“Twilight?”
“Nice and fresh. They feel so soft on my nose.”
There was a curiously textured silence.
“Oh, my they are delicious! So soft and smooth. And the flavor, it's just out of this world.”
“They do sound nice.”
“I'm afraid if you don't come out I'll wind up eating all of them.”
“You could save me one...”
“Sorry, can't. Just too delicious.” Twilight commenced munching loudly.
“That's lettuce.”
Twilight returned the leaf to an aggravated looking rabbit. Fluttershy had called her bluff. There really was no way she could eat the roses she had gotten for the pegasus.
“Please Fluttershy. Come out of the closet.”
“Can't we just stay in?”
“We've made reservations. Rarity has made the dresses. We have to go.”
Twilight's expression of frustration shifted into an expression of evil.
“You know something, Fluttershy...”
“Yes?”
“You're really very brave.”
“No, I'm not. Sweet Celestia, I'm not.” Flutters sounded as tired of this as Twilight was.
“But then how can you stand it?”
“Stand what?”
“Being in a tiny little box like that.”
“It's not that small. It's a very nice closet actually.”
“Please, you don't even have enough room to stretch your wings in that little coffin.”
“I'm actually doing pretty okay.”
“There is no sun, no sky and no wind.”
“Doing less okay now.”
“It's time, come on out. Escape the closet, come with me to Mareachi and lets have a nice pleasant candle lit dinner.”
“I can't,” the voice behind the door sobbed.
“Why not?!” Twilight practically screamed.
“They'll all see.”
“What will they see?” Twilight trotted to the closet door. Her anger rising.
“Us.”
“Is that it? You're ashamed? Of me?”
“It's not like that.”
“You said you loved me.”
“I do.”
“No, you don't.”
“But, I do.”
“No, you're ashamed of me and ashamed of yourself for being attracted to somepony like me.”
“No, I'm not,” Flutters practically sobbed.
“Then what?”
“They'll see you! I can't stand the thought of it. They'll all think...”
“That I like mares? I do. I am that way. It is fine. I've made peace with ponies looking at me like that. It's in the tabloids already.”
“Really?”
“I got a front page with that one. 'Celestia's faithful student goes to all filly bar'. It was terrible. That's how my parents found out. They made a big scene about it at Heart's Warming Eve dinner. And Celestia. She just gave a kiss on the head and said she was sorry.”
“About... being in the paper?”
“I think so. I hope so anyway. But she never treated me any different after that. She never even treated me any different after...”
“After what?”
“She said I should date somepony closer to my own age.”
“Oh.”
“And I am. Or I'm trying to. You aren't making this easy you know.”
“I'm sorry.”
“It's a Royal Decree you know.”
“Huh?”
“'Twilight Sparkle, thank you, but I'm afraid that I must insist that you date somepony closer to your own age.' Right there. Royal Decree. The Princess said it. I must do it. It would be treason to refuse. Twilight Sparkle must go on a date with a mare her own age. By her command, I have searched the town of Ponyville for the most suitable mare I could find. I made graphs and charts.”
“Really?”
“Would you like to see my graphs and charts? They're in five different colors.”
“I... I wouldn't mind... but you really think I'm the most suitable? Out of all of Ponyville?”
“I wrote down all the traits Celestia had that I admired. And then I ranked all one hundred and sixty four mares in Ponyville, including all the Bon Bons, and I made a graph! You, Fluttershy, came out on top. By a fairly wide margin, too.”
“You really think I'm special?”
“Yes.”
The closet door creaked open. Fluttershy straightened the new dress that Rarity had made her just for tonight and wiped her red teary eyes on the hem of her old Gala dress.
With a deep breath to rally her courage Fluttershy, finally and at last, stepped out of the closet.
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Never thought I'd catch a strong whiff of...we don't have spoilers, dammit. Suffice it to say that one of the ships mentioned is one I hate.
Made me lol, I though it was going the way of that South Park episode but it didn't. I still like it.
Well crafted and paced. Far too short. Very amusing. TwiShy is always cute. And makes for exceptional humor. The fic that is my 2nd fave comedy fic and 2nd fave shipfic are the same fic, and TwiShy.
there should be a comma after floor.
I made a d'aww noise.
lawl
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Thanks for catching that. And for the complements.
Pretty sure that's supposed to be "Hearth's Warming." Otherwise, yeah, nice little punny slice. Could have been a little longer and have done without the Celestia bit. I know there's a level of snark involved, but it can make Twilight appear disingenuous if read the wrong way.
Well done.
That was so cute!
F it...I dunno how to do Video Comments (tried to use the R Kelly closet Scene from South Park but A) I am technically retarded and B) the guy recorded the scene on a potato)
But I'm pretty sure it's relavant to the situation, dood.
Buhahaha. This is funny. ^_^ And cute.
Write on!
1792682 Well I was just standin' here, Fluttershy locked herself in the closet...
1792594 Honestly, though, you made me laugh. So thanks.
1793106 Why did I read that in R Kelly's voice, dood?
1793116 Because I have mind control powers.
Dawwwww. Twi shy ftw.
This was silly and adorable.
Thank you for taking random ideas we talk about and making them fantastic.
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Reminded me of the scientology SouthPark episode. :P
Have a Pinkie.
BAHAHAHA. This had tons of things I like. And Twishy is my favorite shipping too.
But best of all was the line "all the Bonbons"
All the Bon Bons, but not all the Pinkies?
Adorable little story, equal parts funny, romantic, and sad. Not sure I'd like being Twilight telling me I was her second choice if I were Fluttershy. Still, charts and graphs is definitely something Twi would do when looking for a date.
"All the Bon Bons", eh? Slice of Life!
Delightfully heartwarming and silly.
1797931 I don't know, I think I'd be pretty flattered if I were someone's second choice after a goddess.
Only you Twilight, only you.
Nice little bit of fluff. I give a claw up.
Very nice, the Celestia apologizing gave me a real giggle
Aww... This was adorable, and funny too. Twishy is always good.
All of my lawls for the evening go to you. Plus, twas terribly cute ^3^
Kudos for writing a TwiShy. We need more and it's always awesome to see someone contribute :3
Aww, what a nice story!
That was pretty cute.
I loved the interaction between the characters; it was pulled off very well. But my favorite part was the mention of several Bon Bons.
Good job! I don't remember any mistakes, either.
All of my chapters are about 1000 words each, and this is still the best 1000 words I've read lately. Nicely done!
Nitpicks:
It appears to be injured in someway = some way
the squirrel in question made it's escape = its
Not sure what I think of the 'second choice' bit, but I rather liked the story overall, and 'all the Bon-Bons' was bloody hilarious.
Plus, it's nice to see A: More Twishy, and B: More good Twishy.
It;s short and it's sweet, but it's a bit disconcerting for the purpose of the story when Twilight tells Fluttershy that she's essentially the rebound mare after getting rejected by Celestia. Not very romantic, that notion.
Still, not bad. And it reminded me of this little comedic gem.
- Christian 'No Longer in the Barn' Harisay
Some writers, myself included, could learn a lot from this fic. When dialogue is as strong as this it doesn't need lots of extra description. Fantastic story.
including all the Bon Bons
Also, one of these days you must write a Twilestia that is not unrequited. You're making me cross. *sulks*
This made me feel nice. So even though it's short, I love it. Faved, and have as many whatevers you prefer. Can't give more than a thumb though.
You know... Luna is technically closer to Twilight's own age.
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So in-character it hurts, isn't it?
I love how you portrayed the characters. And I thought Twilight getting Fluttershy roses was really sweet!
I also liked the way the Twilestia nod was handled. I honestly don't like Celestia/Twilight pairings...nothing against those who do like it, but personally it's a RELIEF that Celestia would order Twilight to find somepony else (though, since Celestia is older then EVERYONE, my beef with Twilestia is more in the fact that they are student and teacher, darn near daughter and mother. Ew.)
I loved this story. I can point out no negative points. Except that it was short, but it gets the job done and I'm at least tempted to go check out your other stuff now.
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At first i thought that this was a good fic, but when Twilight said that she was doing it by royal decree and she made charts, it felt like it was forced. This ruined it for me. Twilightshy is my favourite ship.
This is a very nicely written fanfic, good job!
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That was a joke. She doesn't HAVE to date Fluttershy. She wants to.
And it was a hilarious joke. Five different colors indeed.
I enjoyed this story greatly.
The charts may be in five different colors, but I could only find a green thumb. I guess you can have it. Here.
I want more...
and I shall have more or I shall summon My brony army!!! 
I didn't catch it the first time but twilight wanted snookie from princess celestria didn't she!
Cute, quick, and funny. And I saw no mistakes ether.
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Very good character interaction to so ye I enjoyed it and I give it a 9/10 (not that it means mush