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Well it's an interesting idea but you have some words and sentences that ruins the story a little, also you said that it was 21 years since he was born then in the flashback you said that 5 years ago he was 10 see the problem? also after the flashback you repeat a paragraph. all in all you should find someone to edit and proofread you story that may help a lot. Good luck and looking forward to see what happens next.
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I know, I just put it that way to see how everyone look at it and saying what their opinions on it as well. So, when I get the chance I'm going to edit a bit.
Woo New chapter and can't wait for more
this story is boss more plz
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a small repeat in the paragraph after the first flashback
very interesting, will watch from the shadows.
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yes than you get sush a reaction on a story that just stopped writing why
i like it too but i want more chapters plz
Next!
Svtory is great but need more plz
plz make the next chapter i can't wait
More no stoping
It seems that this story will not continue?
its good
... well. I can say I understand now why the downvotes :S
MORE!!!!
the idea is good just need to work on following through with the chapters it seems a bit rushed
When is the next update?
I love the story, I hope you continue
you might need to fix it you have two of the same
Since then his parents kept his secret and they had gotten closer than before. They knew he was going to change the world, but not expecting their own son to be this strong. At the age he is now they believed he was in the same power strength with Princess Celestia or even stronger than her. But wanted to wait and see what’s going to happen. Naruto knew how strong he is since throughout his life training non-stop, and knowing he could be stronger than Celestia herself.
Since then his parents kept his secret and they had gotten closer than before. They knew he was going to change the world, but not expecting their own son to be this strong. At the age he is now they believed he was in the same power strength with Princess Celestia or even stronger than her. But wanted to wait and see what’s going to happen. Naruto knew how strong he is since throughout his life training non-stop, and knowing he could be stronger than Celestia herself.
continue com essa hsitoria por favor ta muito legal mesmo eu amei essa historia por favor
More good