"You either die a hero, or you live long enough to see yourself become the villain."
Betrayed by one of his oldest friends, now Spike seeks vengeance by destroying what she helped build, and liberating the world from the greatest evil it has ever faced. An evil none would have ever expected. An evil he has named, "The Illuminati”, but first he must build an army of his own before he can challenge any member of this evil. Even if it means breaching the borders of life and death itself to do so.
As with my other fic, the rating and tag is not permanent, it may change as the story goes on.
Cover change coming soon, I need to do artwork that matches the story first.
Chapters (7)
You have my attention.
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Glad to know.
Very interesting premise, but you definitely have a long way to go before I proclaim this fic of good quality.
I noted a multitude of mistakes in both spelling and grammar, as well as some places where the dialogue didn't make much sense.
My English teacher used to tell me I was "standing in a gold mine without a pick" whenever I had a good idea but I royally screwed it up in execution. Good luck.
Interesting. The wording of things is a bit rough, but I definitly won't stop me from reading more when you next update this. I am very curious about the changes the world has undergone.
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Hey I'm the king of illiteracy, pleasure to meet you :)
Seriously, I will never view or assume any of my writings to be of good quality. Literature was always my second worse subject with only mathsurpassing it with "omfg what am I even doing here?" So yea, unless someone takes what I write, and rewrite it with literature applied to it....yea....
Awesome and interesting ideas riddled throughout, combined with bad writing. Fuck it, I still like it. I've seen stories that make far less sense than this one. Reminds me of stories I wrote back in school when I was a kid. All sorts of cool conflicts and stuff, but not much flesh around the bones
He's the hero Equestria deserves.......but not what it needs......
Sigue Por Favor. I like this
Okay...You got me interested.
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yay I am doing something right!!!
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So are we going to see any decendents of the other elements in this. I bet Pinkie's great grandchildren is even crazier than her.
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Eventually yea, but not 100% sure where I'm going to put them though But there are more important things in the story im trying to place in my head right now, like where to put which battle.
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If you are looking for someone to bounce off ideas involving fight and such you can look me up. Not only have I seen enough violent stuff to last a life time but I'm also a major Spike fan.
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Ill keep that in mind
Yes Spike, be the ultimate leader
It might just be me... but WTF? the five leaders? seriously? there is just soo much wrong with that whole concept and layout that you presented... I'm ONLY here because Spike is the main character (at least I really f***ing hope he is)
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A great and powerful leader!
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Oh there is? Do go on and tell me whats wrong with the concept, and yes...yes he is.
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now, I can get behind the concept that the equestrian land can be divided by five rulers, and I can see how Celestia, Luna, and Chrysalis can be some of the leaders... and It's just my opinion... but I can't get behind the thought that the five leaders, at least three of them evil, can talk to each other like that... 2nd I personally hate the Celestia-Discord pairing more than anything other pairing (that's not saying much, but still) ... 3rd King Sombra was disbanded and eradicated from his land with the very thing that he could only overpower by being a hidden evil within it... 4th Discord! His whole angle is chaos! he was turned to stone because when he's not, he's constantly trying to turn the entire world upside-down. I can't see him outside of stone and not being a king of chaos, mind-raping everyone that is sane...
at least that's just my opinion, and I can't give you more of a reason because I can't think of more... and for the record, I almost took this off my watch list (I never call it my 'favorites list') because of that... again, I'm reading this because of Spike...
But do what you want, I'm not a majority... and thank you for responding and listening to my rambling...
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Want to know something funny? I pretty much guessed 2/3rds of what you posted before you did. The thing is, alot of the things you just argued can be counter argued like;
"at least three of them evil, can talk to each other like that"
If I'm reading this right, by this logic, the legion of doom could have never existed./there is much more to it, but again that is your opinion and I'll rather respect it then try to convert you to my way of seeing any of this. My only advice is to stop reading it now, because if you dislike these simple concepts , then you are damn sure going to hate future chapters.
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what?
The Legion of Doom was created with the purpose of joining the individual forces of evil throughout the world into a single cult to aid in the destruction/evasion of the Justice League who are stopping their acts of crime and world domination...
and it's just this concept... and sure... I wasn't going to turn my up-vote into a down-vote until now... but sure... I will now
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That is pretty much what I did with the Illuminati though; I joined 5 individual evil forces together, only difference was
1. There was non to stop them up until Spike
2. They already dominant rulers separately, but now the secretly rule together.
3. 4. out of five of them are lovers, which really isn't that hard to grasp either sense if you just look at our world of this point.
Anyways, there is little reason to continue this my friend so, more power too you and hope you find more fics you enjoy.
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I understand that this is the cult of the antagonists in this fiction... I understand that the situation is more of your desire for the story, I didn't like it and I gave you my reasons (at least the ones understood to me)
But my problem is what you said here
well I'm sorry if I dislike these "simple concepts" of the main antagonists and rulers of the waring lands having love interests between them, there's no need for you to get so rude about it... I'm still reading it (well, checking if there's an update from time to time) but I delete those scenes because other than the quick message it gets across and establishing a connection between them, I see no point in me reading it
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"well I'm sorry if I dislike these "simple concepts" of the main antagonists and rulers of the waring lands having love interests between them, there's no need for you to get so rude about it..."
OK, First off let me apologize then, because that was not meant to be taken as a insult or meant to be rude.I was simply saying if you didn't like the beginning concepts that this story was built on, then you won't like the further concept I have yet to reveal since they layer on top of what is currently here. I would rather you not waste any precious time following something you don't agree with. If saying this gains me a down vote then so be it; I would rather take the down vote then waste someone else time.
"I'm still reading it (well, checking if there's an update from time to time) but I delete those scenes because other than the quick message it gets across and establishing a connection between them, I see no point in me reading it"
Same as above, and again I asked your reason, you gave it and I'm not saying your opinion/reason is wrong, attacking you, or trying to be rude. I felt it was my duty as the creator to simply in form you that if A....B...and C is the reason why you didn't like it, then your not going to like D, E, F, and G.
Lets see we have the great grandchildren of Pinkie, Twilight , and Rainbow Dash so far. Can't wait to see what became of the others. And looks like Spike became a badass over the years.
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Bet on it, and I pretty much just sacrificed another day of drawing so I've already started on the next chapter of Illuminati. If I work like I did yesterday. It could be up in the next two days.
Bring back the Mane 6 back from the dead!
Like Spike said while they could be a big help this entire thing could extremely backfire in their faces if even one of them decides to join Celestia.
If I have to make a guess I would say that Rainbow Dash and Twilight are the most likely to join her.
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Who know, maybe they all will join her or maybe they all will choose to go out into the world and live their lives again
I actually still feel it may be too early to bring them back.. when I write and draw... things don't always come out the way I plan them too XD
That is true about most things in life and when it does happen the best thing you can do is improvise.
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What do you mean by ' then getting the Crystal Empire away from King Sombre’s hooves once more.'
Does he returns in this fic ?
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o.O he's already back all 5 members of the Illuminati was revealed in chapter 2. He is also the ruler of the crystal empire again in this fic.
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MORE!!!! *impersonates the guy from Oliver in the soup kitchen*
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RIP to Tupac!
2275854 R.I.P to the king...
How can they call themselves the Illuminati when they don't have Kanye West in their group? It goes against protocol to not have a gayfish sending out subliminal messages by rapping about Jesus Brodyquesting and interrupting female country stars' VMA awards acceptance speeches for their new world order.
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Truly sir? Kanye west is not allowed in my illuminate...lilwayne maybe, jay z definitely, but not kanye!
Update?
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I haven't been on this site in a long time, I've pretty much stopped dealing with these fics.
5003318 oh, ok
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Yep, these stories and this site is pretty much dead to me; sorry for wasting your time.
5007204 eh no need to worry
you need an editor. badly. PM me if you feel it is necessary.