You and Rarity are foalhood friends after growing up in the same town. You and her both have become close and tell each other everything. You leave for Canterlot later on and make a living there. Now, you are fully grown and received an urgent message from Rarity, telling you to come over her house as soon as you can. Will you be prepared to hear what she has to tell you about a terrible event that has happen to her?
Read the story before rating it and do not give it a dislike when you have never read the story.]
Third story in the Inspired by Music series. It is inspired by Lady Gaga's hit song Bad romance as well as the cover version done by the bad 30 seconds to Mars. WARNING: Mild adult content.
30 Seconds to mars version: Bad Romance
Lady Gaga's music video. Bad Romance music video
Not bad the Idea is solid but your grammar needs work (so does mine to be frank) but If you want I can look it over and try to fix some of the errors.
1753419 alright you can try. Thanks
When someone is thinking smething, it is generally italicized, and I saw a few grammatical errors, but other than that, it was well written. It is going into my fav list.
1761472 well...I didn't add the italics for a reason...I was tired and need to enter them manually
1761480 lol, thats ok, cause that can always be edited.
Also, I am trying to figure out why the crossover tag?
1761489 Inspired by music...it is a crossover with the song...so I think the song has to make it a crossover tag
1761505 Ask a Mod about that. He/she might say otherwise
1761548 well it wouldn't affect the story much, it is just a caution.
I'd post the corresponding song, but fuck it.
Looks promising....looking forward to more
1770215 well it depends on the amount of favs and views...if it doesn't do well than I will end it.I have other stories I wanna put out
Hmm, not bad, quite the different story then I had thought since I imagined things to be turned out differently. Nice that you use a unrecognized background pony such as Carmel since the Fandom would have different use for him and how dark and depressing to have Rarity retold the events in the story.
Just some formatting errors ,overall, nice work,.