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  • Saturday
    Comic Review: Issue #24

    Issue 25 and I are having a disagreement, so we're instead going to play catch-up and look at last month's one-shot. Discord is back, and he's taking Fluttershy and the Cutie Mark Crusaders on a trip through time. Maybe they'll finally kill the Daleks. Yep, kill them. For real this time. Totally for real. They're not going to come back next season. Nope. Dead. Deader than a doornail.

    ...I hate Doctor Who.

    The issue begins with Fluttershy and the Cutie Mark Crusaders going off on a trip to observe nature, complete with filly scout sashes and caps. (It seems to remind me of something I should be writing, but I can't quite put my finger on it...) They barely make it out the door before a meteorite crashes into the earth, sizzles a bit for dramatic effect, and pops open to reveal Discord. He was just hanging out in the Horsehead Nebula when he accidentally flew too fast and ended up going back in time a week. (Or in my headcanon, he went off into space to bug Picard, ran into Sisko, and got his ass knocked into last week with one punch.)

    Discord invites himself on the trip, but gets bored with looking at modern birds and alligators, and offers to take the group on a trip through time to see ancient and long-extinct creatures. The CMC are super-excited, but Fluttershy is anxious about leaving anypony in Discord's care...until she hears about the giant butterflies from prehistoric times. Will our heroes survive their trip through the world's future and past?

    You can probably guess my biggest problem with the issue, and it's the first word in the last paragraph. I have made zero effort to hide how much I disliked Discord's redemption, and while “Twilight's Kingdom” did a heck of a better job than “Keep Calm and Flutter On” showing him screw up and actually learn something, it's still not quite enough to make me excited about seeing him again. This issue...well, it wasn't “Three's a Crowd” in terms of annoyance, but it feels very confused about how to handle the character.

    Things start off just fine. While Discord is still not actively plotting their deaths or torment anymore, he's perfectly willing to encourage Scootaloo to poke a sleeping alligator while Sweetie Belle is in its mouth. (Although given how stupid that is to do, I assume he's also into Social Darwinism.) He also helped lead a seemingly heroic rebellion against an Egyptian Empire counterpart, but that was only because said empire was perfectly ordered, and a God of Chaos must have standards. All of these, plus his selfish nature and references to his lingering villainy, are quite fine.

    It's the fact that the issue also contradicts “Keep Calm and Flutter On” that bugs me. Specifically, the episode made a big deal out of Discord never having a friend in his life before Fluttershy. This issue shows that he was in a possibly romantic relationship with the leader of a feline rebellion (who is also apparently a previous incarnation of Twilight Sparkle) and was friend with one of those prehistoric butterflies. It could be argued that he wasn't actually friends with them, but even so, it feels a bit off considering how his becoming good was approached to begin with.

    That said, the rest of the cast is handled well. Fluttershy is a caring and protective guardian for the fillies, and is perfectly willing to chew Discord out when he crosses the line. (Although saying that he shouldn't have friends was pretty cruel.) The CMC are just their excitable little selves, with Sweetie stealing the show with some rare signs of insight and intelligence. The new characters are okay, although it feels like much of the story is setting up things that could be explored in more detail elsewhere, especially since the Ancient Egypt and prehistoric parts of the issue compromise a majority of the content.

    One thing about this issue that I do like is how it further solidifies the notion of a stable time loop, something initially set up back in “It's About Time.” In that episode, Twilight gets a warning from her future self, which causes her to worry herself over nothing, and ends with her going back in time to warn her past self. Here, Discord explains that the past cannot be changed and the present is set in stone, but your future is still being written. In effect, you travel back to something in the past because history dictated that you would travel into the past, but there is no guarantee that you'll return because anything that happens to the present you that is now in the past is technically your future.

    Fairly standard, but it's nice to have some more solid rules.

    The art is quite good, and I do like a lot of the jokes. Naturally, the issue is full of Doctor Who references, such as the time machine (a gigantic square thing that's much smaller on the inside), Discord wearing a fez, a panel with some Cyberponies, and an amusing bit where Discord pulls Dr. Whooves out of his machine and punt him into the horizon. Overall, however, the issue doesn't feel particularly groundbreaking or memorable for me. It might be because I'm not a fan of reformed Discord and don't care that much for Fluttershy, but I don't dislike the latter and I liked the former's appearances in Season Four (“Three's a Crowd” aside) and in Issue #2 of Friends Forever. This is very much a relaxing filler issue, and in that regard, it's fine. It's just not something I'll be going back to time and again.

    Next month is this month, and we've already talked about that. The month after, we have the conclusion to the ponies fighting the bulls. Hopefully it won't be a load of them.

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  • Thursday
    About today's comic

    This issue was well-drawn and had some funny moments. I also hate it completely, and all because of one single plot point:

    Twilight refuses to help.

    To clarify, the Mane 6 are in a town that is being harassed by a gang of bulls. The local law enforcement is a single sheriff that gets knocked out in one punch, and it's the same bulls that Applejack and Rarity were able to fend off back in Friends Forever #8. There isn't a repeat of that fight, but I can understand that; Applejack and Rarity had the advantage of being in a moving stagecoach, which gave them extra protection, and they are now in a strange land fighting the bulls head-on. So Applejack asks Twilight, the princess who can use magic real good, to help drive them off.

    She refuses. Why? Because she doesn't want to use her magic to harm anyone.


    Oh, it's because they're not magical! Yeah, just like those pirates you repeatedly zapped about a dozen issues ago - oh wait, they didn't have magic powers, either! And how about those bats you genetically altered to not like apples? They weren't magic, either, but that didn't stop you!

    Wait, maybe you're trying to be princess-like and attempt diplomacy first. That's fine. Shows some real leadership skills to - wait, you're not doing that, either? Even after they burned down a damn barn?

    ...Okay, comic, show writers, we need a chat. You seem to have this problem with pointing out a problem in your story, and then doing absolutely nothing to rectify it. That isn't how you do things. Pointing out a flaw on your own without actually addressing the flaw makes it many, many times worse. Remember when I blew my top over that mocking last page of the "Reflections" arc, where you laughed at everyone who bought into the promise of alternate universe counterparts besides the Princesses and Sombra playing a role? Same thing, only now it's in the main story.

    I'm not going to review this one. I might talk about it if the next issue is any good, but...I'm sorry, I can't take this crap. Now let's finally watch that trailer for Season 5. Surely it can't be...

    Time to bring out the old standby...

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  • 1w, 2d
    Comic Review: Friends Forever #11 (Rainbow Dash and Spitfire)

    Rainbow Dash is the fastest flier in Equestria. Spitfire is the leader of the Wonderbolts, the most elite pegasi of them all and whose ranks Dash wishes to one day join. The two have worked together numerous times, but today, they shall face their greatest challenge. For they have been called upon to perform one of the most difficult, thankless, and terrifying jobs known to pony kind...

    Teaching foals!

    Our issue opens with Rainbow Dash serving as the temporary mailpony. (No reason is given for her taking the role, so I'll just assume that Derpy's busy fighting a kaiju-sized muffin monster and leave it at that.) After flying through a suburb that looks nothing like Ponyville, she receives a letter from Spitfire requesting her presence and immediately abandons her sacred duty to go join the Captain of the Wonderbolts. Their mission? Serve as guest teachers at a flight camp for very young fillies. Easy enough, right?

    There's only one problem: Spitfire is terrible with kids. Can Rainbow Dash help her idol get over her issues?

    The first thing that stands out in this issue is the art, done by newcomer Jay Fosgitt. It's a decidedly mixed bag. On the one hand, the shape of the ponies feels very Calvin & Hobbes-esque, which is perfect for a story focusing on little foals. It just looks incredibly cute, which makes it even weirder when they keep making faces that wouldn't look out of place in a...less-than-seedy bit of fan art. Where the problems lie is the backgrounds, as nothing looks like it fits the aesthetics of the show. While living conditions have bounced all over the place in Equestria, Ponyville has always been shown to have a lower-tech, more medieval level of architecture, so having the story start in what looks like a modern suburb is really off-putting.

    The highlight of the issue is the interplay between Rainbow Dash, Spitfire, and the foals. Rainbow actually takes to teaching pretty well, although since it's another opportunity to have everypony pay attention to her and say how wonderful she is, that is to be expected. Spitfire's issues with kids, on the other hand, are portrayed in a realistic fashion. She's not some raving child-hater; she'd probably enjoy at least speaking with her class in any other circumstance. Instead, her problem is that she doesn't know how to teach foals, which is something that makes a great deal of sense. As the comic points out, you can't be patronizing or condescending, but you also can't be overly tough on ponies that look to be about preschool age. (One of the best moments in the issue is when Spitfire tries to use her “Wonderbolt Academy” drill instructor voice and behavior; she reduces the entire class to tears in about two minutes.)

    The story is ultimately about Rainbow Dash helping her mentor overcome her flaw, which is sadly something the show has done to death by now, but works much better here because they don't have to turn Spitfire into an oblivious jerk or manipulative sack of crap to pull it off. It's a realistic flaw, and I could tilt my head and see Rainbow Dash being able to help, which is furthered by the issue showing her first attempt at advice leading to the above-mentioned tears of the innocent.

    The foals are mostly nondescript, but are also a lot of fun and feel like actual kids. The first day of class is just them goofing around, including one lying on another foal's head like a hat, several of them doing stretches incorrectly, Peppermint Patty showing up as a pony for some reason, and one of the kids asking Spitfire if she has a special somepony. (Trust me, that's one of the first things any group of kids you are assigned to look after will ever ask you.) The second day, they react exactly how children exposed to a screaming angry pony would: they're terrified and crying for mommy. And all it takes to win their attention back is a display of awesomeness.

    The only foal to get any real attention is Loop de Loop, a shy little filly with a stated talent for flying. She's absolutely adorable.

    Overall, the issue is pretty good. It's a cute little story about how even our heroes can have flaws, and how you shouldn't be afraid to ask for help when you need it. The art is a mixed bag, but otherwise, a fine issue.

    Next time, Applejack must defend her extended family from robbers. And we have a full docket in December:

    * Twilight must save Pinkie Pie from herself

    * Applejack must continue to save the family.

    * And we get a Christmas special...about cyberbullying.

    Oh, and Ted Anderson is still working on the series. If you'll excuse me, I'll be looking through the latest thread comparing him to Hitler.

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  • 2w, 4d
    Comic Review: Friends Forever #10 (Fluttershy and Iron Will)

    Another month passes, and another pair of comics have graced out doorstep. I'll be getting to Discord's and Fluttershy's excellent adventure shortly, but for today, we're looking at another companion of Fluttershy's...a certain burly minotaur named Iron Will. Can Fluttershy help the big guy get in touch with his “inner pony?”

    Our issue opens with Ponyville, that wonderful town free of all of reality's vices and bigotry, stampeding away from the bellowing presence of Iron Will, who wants to see Fluttershy. The rest of the Mane 6 stand their ground outside her cottage door, but it turns out to be for nothing when Fluttershy walks out and calmly asks him what's wrong. Turns out Will's wife told him to not come home until he's learned how to be nicer, and he's come to the kindest pony he knows to do just that. Can Fluttershy help tame the savage beast? And why does Iron Will have to do this?

    First issue, and by far the biggest one, out of the way: EVERYPONY BESIDES FLUTTERSHY IS A DICK. The issue opens with the entire town running away from that no-good monster, and the minute Twilight (who has never seen Iron Will before and could have nothing more than second-hand experience with) sees who's coming, she mobilizes her friends to save Fluttershy from that greedy fiend. They never give him a chance to explain himself, nor do they even think Fluttershy (who has handled Discord by this point) is capable of teaching him how to be kind. And at the end, after Iron Will's learned his lesson and is throwing everypony a farewell dinner (a gag early in the story reveals that he's a gourmet cook), they immediately criticize everything he lays out because they're picky and selfish.

    And then there's Rainbow Dash, who is just a complete ass the entire issue. Every scene she's in, she finds a way to make everything worse. I imagine that's why the preview art for the next Friends Forever has her with a big head and tiny neck; Iron Will choked her until she was stuck that way.

    That said, the moments with Fluttershy and Iron Will are well done. The story builds from Iron Will's last scene in “Putting Your Hoof Down;” while he's very aggressive and demanding, he's also honest and has a softer side. He actually seems to enjoy taking care of the animals and the spa trip, until Angel ruins the former and Rainbow Dash the latter. The fact that he has a wife and son also help add more layers than just a big-mouthed salesperson, and the idea that he and his family live in a maze is amusing.

    The basic premise of the issue is that Iron Will's son is taking after his father's worst traits, i.e. talking back to his mother and teacher. And while Iron Will tries to become more understanding through animal caretaking, pastry sales, apple bucking, and finally the spa, he really doesn't see the value in it; his son is just trying to be like his old man. The final lesson has similarities to “Putting Your Hoof Down” in that it doesn't state that being assertive and forceful is bad, but rather that it isn't the end-all, be-all reaction you want to encourage.

    Beyond that, the issue is very simple and straightforward. The two just go to a task, something inevitably sets Iron Will off, and they try something else. There's a brief running gag about Iron Will asking to be paid for the work he's doing (for stuff like running the counter at Sugar Cube Corner, this makes perfect sense), and some of the ways he fails are pretty funny (again, Sugar Cube Corner and his encounter with Pinkie). The art is just generally okay; Garbowska returns with her more simple, but still cute designs, and while some of the poses and expressions are awkward, the overall look works for such a simple story.

    If you're not a big fan of Iron Will or Fluttershy, you could pretty much skip the issue. It's a standard story that features all of the other ponies being colossal flankholes. Still, it's a good story to pick up later at a lower price, or as part of a compilation, and if you're a fan of the two, it's pretty much a must-read.

    Next time, Rainbow Dash is summoned to aid Spitfire fend off the most vile creatures ever to crawl out of the primordial muck...children!

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  • 2w, 4d
    The election results are in...

    And on the plus side, I will have plenty of time to write again once the job that's actually making me happy is eradicated and I'm no longer destroying America.

    In the meantime, I'm still scrapping some story updates together. Hope to have something soon.

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  • ...

Part of RainbowDoubleDash's Lunaverse.

Raindrops has always had a problem with her anger, and despite her strong self-control, she sometimes can't help but lose it. Unfortunately, her latest explosion has not only gotten her suspended from her job, but also ordered to attend anger management. When she finds an alternative procedure, however, she's suddenly all smiles and giggles. Can her friends figure out what's happened and bring her back to normal? And more importantly, will Raindrops even want that to begin with?

First Published
4th Dec 2012
Last Modified
1st Jun 2014

Okay! Reading now. Sorry, I wanted to finish up the chapter of "My Choices" that was up before starting this.

Incidentally, you should read "My Choices" if you're not already doing so.

Let's see...

Soda Jerk

Is a guy who works a soda fountain actually called a jerk? Like, that's the technical term? Huh, didn't know that. The more you know...incidentally this means that I was employed as a professional jerk for about 1 month back in '07. Good times. Until Friendly's fired me rather than pay me more when minimum wage went up. Joke's on them, they're going bankrupt now!

Iron Will's the name, training ponies is my game!

Oh, look, it's Iron Will, and -

- and Iron Will just got upstaged.

Iron Will just got upstaged. Trajectory is now best pony.

After all, if Raindrops was happy, then nothing could possibly be wrong...

Tempting fate, Snails...

Anyway. As you can probably get from my mostly inane comments above, I don't see any problems with this at all! Although Raindrops' "thing" seems to have happened fast, if it was only one night...

Well, this is it. My first (?) contribution to the Lunaverse. Here's hoping you guys like it enough.


Thanks for giving it a look through.

Well, in about...whenever this story gets approved, we'll see if it can survive the rest of the group beating it to a pulp. :twilightsmile:


Incidentally, you wanted to make this Season 1, right? Any preference as to where to place it in the canon?


The original plan was to make it a Season 2 story, but that was back when it looked like it would be months before I got to it since I was going to start on Parent's Day immediately after BUB concluded. Now that that one's been pushed back until after Season 3 finishes... You can make it a Season 1 episode. Place it in any slot that'll work; I'm not picky. :twilightsmile:

#5 · 102w, 5d ago · · 1 · Boiling Point ·

now i am at a crossroad.... shall i start right now reading lunaverse and get to read awesome IAH work while understanding it, don't give a shit about lunaverse and just read it or delay lunaverse even more together with this?

#6 · 102w, 5d ago · · 1 · Boiling Point ·

I am sorry to say that I will not be reading this. The Lunaverse is... not what I like. I feel that many things were handled poorly, and as such I don't want to get involved in what I feel to be a broken, and fundamentally flawed alt universe.

Not bad. Seems almost like a Pinkie Pie personality transplant, at least at first glance. That's an awful lot of grinning and bouncing.

Hm... I'm not much of a Lunaverse reader... however, I have read this chapter... and ferl so sorry for Raindrops.  I mean, how would anyone react because their lazy BOSS didn't do part of her job?

Wow so the fics finally here, I always had mixed feeling about this fic idea, for various reason, still I think having it be mostly the cloudsdale pony;s fault works quite well, but I think her rage could have had a bit more build up from happy to "attack a pony" Besides that though I really liked the scene Cloud kicker the descriptions of Raindrops, the chizled form stone line really stood out for some reason, I really liked it along with the "stoic" lines :pinkiehappy:

though I do acknowledge it could me hilarious, the idea always left me thinking of Homer Repressing  his rage and a fan video of Shizuo becoming a hippy... only for it to be a lie as he lit Iziaya hair on fire. :pinkiecrazy:

“No....” Raindrops growled. Her teeth were bared like a snarling Timberwolf, ready to rip into the first pony she came across. And unfortunately for her target, she knew exactly where she would be. “No more waiting. No more cooling off. I had to work through the trip to Cayo el Bayo because I her. I got written up for letting a storm through Ponyville because of her.”  

I think you meant becuase "of" her.

Ouch loved the soda line about special serving in regards to Pinkie and CO, feel bad for Trixie, "She's not that unbearable" :pinkiehappy: well usually anyway. I do wonder why she didn't go and work it off first though getting drunk always strike me as something Raindrops avoid... unless she's a happy drunk. :scootangel:

I'm surprised Fluttershy's family connection is know but this does take place late in canon so maybe it's know by this point.

Little surprised to see you using the M!6 to cause the L!cast problems, it's done well though, no one comes across as looking like a jerk or anything unreasonable.

:rainbowlaugh::rainbowlaugh: Trajectory he's crazy but hilarious I love it him being a former Iron will pony is even better I can't stop laughing!

The entire scene was great the safe the Piano all of it.  

Wow super happy Raindrops is creepy as, good writing doing it from Snail perspective, I liked her still happy hoof stomps shaking the room, I look forward to where this new madness takes us :pinkiecrazy:

Overall this was a very enjoyable chapter I imagine Raindrops chose to have either an experimental drug or some sort of spell cast on her to make her perpetually happy, or she ate hearts desire.

Regardless this was a good read overall, prepare to be liked and followed and thanks for posting! I look forward to more :scootangel:.

I like this. I like it alot.

And seriously, Rainbow Dash.....ugh. That's just horrible.

Wow!  This was sort of unexpected.  Didn't think you be getting around to this so soon, but the fact you are finally writing this makes me all kinds of happy.  After all, one of my favorite authors is writing a story about my best L6 pony, so how could I be anything else? :pinkiehappy:

I will say I'm also a bit surprised that you maid this all so blatantly Rainbow Dash's fault.  Doubly so since we know Rainbow herself has no personal qualms against taking unscheduled vacation time.  Personally I'd like to think that Dash was already going to find a way to fix things; she may be an egotistical self-centered jerk (and that's just her nicer M! counterpart :scootangel:), but I've always thought that she really does appreciate Raindrops, and well, not exactly consider her a friend per say, but someone she respects and appreciates having around, even if they do occasionally but heads.

The part with Iron Will caught me a little off guard, not so much that he was hosting the anger management class (I was already expecting that), but rather that it seems to be something of a regular thing at the town hall, whereas I always assumed he was more of the traveling motivational speaker type.  Also surprised me that ALL of the ponies were there by some mandate, I'd have expected that being ordered into anger therapy would be a pretty rare thing in Equestria and that it would more commonly be voluntary self-improvement. (Trajectory, However, all kinds of fun though, and I hope to see more of him, but don't know how much room this fic has for him; maybe he should be the pony you eventually write an Everypony's Day for, or at least a webisode tie-in to this episode).

Anyway, there are a few minor nits I could pick with this fic, but the only one that actually bugs me is this one line from Carrot Top...

Drops, I'm not promising anything, but you have to give it a try.

Maybe it's just my personal thing, but when writing GOtL I used 'Drops' as an annoying nickname that pretty much only Rainbow Dash addresses her by (maybe occasionally Trixie in one of her less considerate moments).  This ties into my head-canon that because of her slow flight speed and poor agility (plus the apparent tendencies of her own M! counterpart), Raindrops was rather mercilessly teased as a child for being clumsy.  Thus for me at least calling her Drops would be the same as addressing Dash as Rainbow Crash.  That said I understand how that can make things a bit restrictive when wanting to shorten her name, though for me at least, I'd rather see the friendly nickname for her as something like Rainy.


I'm surprised Fluttershy's family connection is know but this does take place late in canon so maybe it's know by this point.
I don't think her family connections are all that well know.  The line was "And anypony who knew who Fluttershy was could tell you of her family connection."  It could be spelled out a bit more explicitly, but I think it's supposed to mean, "anypony who knew who Fluttershy Really was," that is who only those who know that she was born Fluttering Poesy of the Poesy family weather moguls.  That would need to be a very large number of Ponies, and even Raindrops herself might only know becase Carrot Top told her.

Other than that while the Raindrops attacking Dash happens with only minimal build, I don't think that's a problem her.  This isn't a story about Raindrops losig her temper (there are other fics for that), rather here it's just the setup for the real story.  So I think it works that it's all dealt with in cold open, allowing us to more quickly jump into the consequences.  Also, all Raindrops did was tackle Dash; I don't think she was planning to give her a beating, just a good scare while she ranted about how irresponsible a boss she is.


ah good point about Fluttershy there, didn't think of that. :twilightblush:

Not sure I agree about the Raindrops vis a visa Dash thing but I don't think it's worth debating here.

Very enjoyable read.  Like the character moments and a bit of the believable nature of the whole thing.  Though one does have to wonder if Raindrops whole status as a bearer of an Element and hero of the whole world wouldn't allow her a tad more leeway and ignoring of her defects...But makes sense that it doesn't I suppose considering what else we've seen the Bearers have to deal with with no fear of angering the heroes that saved the whole world.  The only other minor gripe I have about this story is the bar scene.  It seemed a bit empty.  Would've liked to see a few of the other Elements around.  If it's all over town then they likely all know so all of them trying to cheer her up a little might've been nice.  Hell Trixie going along to the anger management meeting rather then Carrot Top and getting something out of it considering some of her own problems would've been pretty damn funny really.

Another little minor question, though this is regarding the L-verse as a whole rather then just your story, is with Raindrops considering this such a problem and her being rather fearful of what she might do to others why didn't she ask Princess Luna about her problems on the couple of occasions she's met? I mean she's had the opportunity right? Hell even writing to her through Trixie could've been a pretty good little bit.  I don't get why the Elements in the L-verse are so hesitant to write to Luna or at least ask her advice...But again that's not your fault it's a problem I've been having with the L-verse as a whole.  I know Luna as portrayed here wouldn't want to fix their problems as a whole but advice and thus learning seems to be in her character so it confuses me.

Anyway, it's wonderful to see you make a story in this universe.  Yours and RDD's Luna's have always been my favorite Luna's in fic form so it's great to see the two of you kind of come together in one place in a fashion.  Can't wait to see how this develops.  The reactions from the other harmony barriers should be really interesting indeed.  Part of me wishes you had made her a bit more of a Fluttershy then a Pinkie Pie though, but either way it seems like it'll be a fun read.  Perhaps her Element should have a bit of a problem with her changed nature as well? Since she's not really acting like herself through whatever changed her isn't she then being dishonest? Regardless, can't wait to read more thanks very much for sharing!

I've never seen the word "hiney" written down before...

....and I am not a good critical thinker before breakfast.  

I am interested in finding out where this goes though.  You've made her sudden change into HappyDrops quite omnious.

This sudden transformation reminds me of the Transformers episode Grinding Gears, where the perpetual grouch Gears lost a component that turned out to be a literal anger unit, removing all his aggression.

Also, I now have the perfect ending to my story. Thanks Trajectory!


Another little minor question, though this is regarding the L-verse as a whole rather then just your story, is with Raindrops considering this such a problem and her being rather fearful of what she might do to others why didn't she ask Princess Luna about her problems on the couple of occasions she's met?
And what would Raindrops even expect the princess to do about something that no one has ever been able to help her with?  Not sure yet what the details of this special treatment she got are going to be, but I doubt she's ever even conceived of something so radical before now, so it's not like she'd have had reason to ask the princess to do anything of the sort.


I don't mean about a specific treatment but the Princess is over a thousand years old and they know this.  She likely has quite a bit of knowledge.  Raindrops has been lucky enough to be in pretty direct contact with her in quite a few situations, knows her personal student, and has a problem she is embarrassed and frightened about.  She's not going to you know ask the thousand year old she knows her advice? Luna isn't going to offer it to her after hearing likely reports about her Element bearers and their problems? It doesn't make sense to me.

Trajectery is awesome!:rainbowlaugh:

Otherwise, a very promising set up.

:rainbowderp: Welp, this can only end well for everyone... right? Right?

I liked the start of this story. I found Raindrops' boiling point to be pretty believable. It wasn't just bad that she didn't get the vacation time, it was compounded by the fact that she did everything she had to do to get it, and lost it because Rainbow Dash let it slip her mind. Bad timing that the supervisors were there, otherwise Rainbow might've just let things slide, or even been able to work something out with Raindrops once she calmed down.

The scenes with Iron Will were amusing and I think you got a winning gad pony with Trajectory.

Now we have a very happy bouncy Raindrops and I'm looking forward to finding out just what caused the sudden change. Write on. :twilightsmile:


It seems to me that a clever pony like Trajectory would make a bit of name for himself in the Celestiaverse as well. He could, for instance, be why a moving crew dropped things while a lavender unicorn was stalking the wild water witch.......

There's only one explanation for Raindrops's sudden attitude change.....

She got laid last night :rainbowwild:

Iron Will, you stud you  :rainbowlaugh:

Or is there a more chemical explanation? :rainbowderp:


Well to start with even when you're on speaking terms with you're immortal god queen and meet her in person sometimes asking her how to deal with your anger-management problems isn't likely going to be at the top of you're list of things you're likely to think of saying, and second even though Luna is over a thousand years old she isn't likely to be an expert on everything (especially when it doesn't pertain to something very important to her), for all we know she may not have any better advice the you're average Jo when it comes to anger-management issues.

In regards to the story: A strong start; I like it. Raindrops stories are becoming quite popular in the L-verse it seem (I'm not complaining though :twilightsmile:). In addition: inexplicably ecstatic Raindrops with no clear reason to be uncharacteristically joyful? WHAT HAS SCIENCE DONE!?!?!?

I'm enjoying this. The set up is good, Raindrops was really well written and it was a good exploration of how her anger was actually affecting her life.

Tragectory, simply put, was awesome. :pinkiehappy:

I just really hope that Rainbow dash gets called up on her behaviour because frankly, so far she has managed to get a free pass on a lot of things. Honestly, I know Raindrops loves being a weather pony but I'm not suprised she hadn't exploded sooner.

And the scene with happy Raindrops managed to make me feel the right amount of dread about what was going to happen.

All in all, a great start.

Out of curiosity, is there a reason the District supervisors visited, or is it just a strict business meeting to discuss what ever it is District Supervisors discuss with Weather Captains? Such as a fascinating discussion of the weather?

Otherwise a good start. Especially loved the description of (properly) happy Raindrops.


Laid!Raindrops would not be quite so ...creepy.  She might be constantly hovering though and...



What makes you say that the Lunaverse is fundamentaly flawed?

Raindrops smiling?  Quick, build a bunker!

Yay, new Raindrops story :yay:

...:pinkiegasp: Trajectory is new best pony. I like the way his brain works, and how his gib is cut :pinkiehappy:

#30 · 102w, 5d ago · · 2 · Boiling Point ·


I just don't like it. It's what happens when you have multiple people writing the same universe. It's the same thing with MLP proper. I refer you to Over a Barrel, and The Mare Do Well.


I just feel that certain main aspects, such as Celestia, were not handled well at all, which others have stated before.


I suppose maybe Dash could use a bit of a comeuppance at some point, but as this story points out, she's got sufficient connections and competence to be largely untouchable, so any such would likely only ever be at the personal level.  I also don't find it all that surprising that Raindrops generally puts up with it all; I'd wager a fair number of us have had to put up with equally bad or worse bosses at some point or another. (not me though :ajsmug:, but my long time best friend locally has more than made up for my own good fortune; having an employment track that reads as a near continuous stream of such).

It's not fair, but when your employment options are limited that's just the way thing are sometimes.  More importantly though, Raindrops genuinely loves her job, and Dash isn't a totally irresponsible flake all the time.  This story, is just capturing an example of a bad day because those tend to be far more interesting due to the adversely conflict it creates between the pair.


Getting called up on your behaviour and getting your co-uppance are two completely different. things. Trixie got called up for her behaviour in both Longest Night and in Boast Busted, Octavia was called up in Muscians and Dreamers but Lyra still tried to save her career, Applejack recieved buckets and buckets worth off ponies calling her up on her behaviour, even Pinkie Pie was called up by Trixie for not really listening to other ponies. I know from a career stand point she is untouchable but I don't want anything bad to happen to her career or her personally, I just want someone to walk up to her and say "Rainbow Dash, you are being an ASS!!"


I know bosses can be like that. I've had a boss like that and, unlike many people, I was fortunate enough to be in a position where I could resign with my dignity and job oppertunities still intact. It wasn't a fun move  and frankly until him, I never thought I would get to the point where I would rather face unemployment in a recession hit economy than have to deal with my current workplace.

Others don't have that option and I sympathise.

Sorry if it seems like I'm harping on Rainbow Dash. I know Raindrops loves her job and I know Rainbow Dash isn't always this bad. I guess it's just sometimes really hard for me to find her likable (both in the lunaverse and in canon), but that's my problem and for the most part I try to leave my personal opinions about characters at the door and focus on how they are presented in the story infront of me.


Overall a fairly good and respectable attitude to have on all matters (both in regards to real life endeavors and addressing the function of fictional characters; if more folks had that kind attitude, there would probably be less flame wars and such).  As for Rainbow Dash specificaly...

I just want someone to walk up to her and say "Rainbow Dash, you are being an ASS!!"
That was kind of exactly what Raindrops was doing, if in a bit of an overly physical manner.  Just too bad for her the higher ups were there to see it.

Overall, I liked it. I'm really interested to see where you go for this. My favorite bit was probably the part with Snails, I think you really nailed his personality in an awesome way.

Wasn't a big fan of Dash screwing up in such a jerkish manner. Being too lazy to submit an employee's vacation forms is pushing it even for her. I think I'd rather it be something like Dash's previous behavior putting the Ponyville team under scrutiny -- say, Dash was caught taking unauthorized vacation days, so now all vacations have to be audited and Raindrops' wasn't in time for the extra time that an audit takes, or something. I think that works better.

The bit with Carrot Top worked nicely. I like how Berry's now seems to be the place for the L6 to go when they're upset; Carrot Top did it herself in Carrot Top Season (getting soused with Trixie to boot), and now Dropsie as well.

Iron Will worked very well. Trajectory was meh for me, but I'll reserve judgement for now.

And crazy creepy smily Raindrops is truly an awesome sight to behold.

Pretty good, although the destruction of Trixie's window is getting way overused. Also, Raindrops better get her vacation and Dash a major chewing out. At least raindrops getting the vacation. To deny her that overall would be cruel, unnecessary and just plain mean. In a bad way, I might clarify.

#36 · 102w, 4d ago · 1 · · Boiling Point ·


I just feel that certain main aspects, such as Celestia, were not handled well at all, which others have stated before.

Even though I'm writing this story, I agree with you for the most part. Celestia was not well-handled at all, and every attempt to rectify that just makes things worse. Much of the early Lunaverse ran on Ron the Death Eater, making the M6 and Celestia look as awful as possible so the L6 and Luna could instantly stand out. At the very least, though, the group's trying to move away from that as a whole, but I'm not sure if they ever can get past what went down in LNLD and BB. Those are the stories people are most often introduced to the Lunaverse through, and when the first thing they see is their favorite characters becoming flankholes for the sake of that overrated stage magician and her padre of background and secondary characters...

Yes, I actually have run into people who've used the Lunaverse to advance the idea that the Mane 6 are a bunch of thugs who had it in for poor, defenseless Trixie from the start. Someone much smarter was handling that conversation, but it was a...troubling sight and confirmed some of my worst fears of the Lunaverse as a whole.


My favorite bit was probably the part with Snails, I think you really nailed his personality in an awesome way.

Thanks. :twilightsmile: Honestly, I was really worried about that part going in. I've never really been a fan of Snails in either continuity, but he's just too important to this setup to not use. I just hope I can keep it up, especially considering how you're all going to hate me in one or two chapters...

Wasn't a big fan of Dash screwing up in such a jerkish manner.

I'd respond to this, but that would be giving away something later on. The next chapter will detail her motivations a bit more.


That was kind of exactly what Raindrops was doing, if in a bit of an overly physical manner.  Just too bad for her the higher ups were there to see it.

Pretty much this. The start of the story is just a classic exercise in horrendous timing. And Dash will get what's coming to her next chapter, in the most terrifying way possible... :pinkiecrazy:


...Now I wish that was the answer. Certainly would be a lot funnier than the actual cause. :fluttershysad:


I can certainly see some of the cast jump to the same conclusion as me, Cheerilee particularly

Yes, I actually have run into people who've used the Lunaverse to advance the idea that the Mane 6 are a bunch of thugs who had it in for poor, defenseless Trixie from the start. Someone much smarter was handling that conversation, but it was a...troubling sight and confirmed some of my worst fears of the Lunaverse as a whole.

I've seen these kinds of people too, but so far as I'm concerned they are the kind of people who would have hated on the M6 and Celestia anyway even if there never was a Lunaverse.  We at the Lunaverse can't and shouldn't be held accountable for the existence of such fanatics, and while there might be some superficial similarities, we generally aren't those kinds of people.

Most of us actually writing for the Lunaverse love everything about the show including its original cast, and that's the reason we've at times over used the L!M6, not because we hate them, but because we want to explore something simultaneously familiar and alien.  Sure Celestia and Twilight seem to get it extra bad, but a lot of that is sort of wish fulfilment that Nightmare Moon and Trixie had gotten more screentime on the actual show.


It's just the nature of the beast at times. You've created an AU that perfectly conforms to preset biases, and people will come rushing to it for support when the show doesn't back up their arguments. I never said the Lunaverse should be held accountable for such thoughts (especially since that includes me, too), but it is still troubling to see the universe promoted in such a way. It's also why if I recommend it to anyone, I do not send them to read LNLD or BB first. It's always "Family Matters" or "Musicians and Dreamers" for me, since those are both fairly gentle introductions without any of the possibly offending elements of the previous two.

While the Lunaverse has grown beyond where it used to be, I would have to remind you that a whole thread about how to use the Mane 6 was necessary to keep things from getting worse. At the very least, we're not turning Apple Bloom into Diamond Tiara anytime soon.


(By the way, I took your advice and read LNED. I was...less than impressed, unfortunately. :fluttercry:)


While the Lunaverse has grown beyond where it used to be, I would have to remind you that a whole thread about how to use the Mane 6 was necessary to keep things from getting worse. At the very least, we're not turning Apple Bloom into Diamond Tiara anytime soon.
No need to remind me; I'm the one who started that thread.  So yes, I'm very aware of how badly things could have gone, but well, they didn't (and it makes me proud as a contributor to remember that I might be largely responsible for that).

...except kind of AJ, who I now consider worse off than either Twilight or Celestia.  Which probably bugs me extra more, not because she is or ever has been in anyway my favorite character in either verse, but because she's probably the character I personally put the most effort in to explaining why she was never so bad off to begin with, and instead of any of that being taken into consideration when trying to show her as a potentially sympathetic character we got... well, you and I both know what we got instead an that's probably not a discussion worth going into here.

(By the way, I took your advice and read LNED. I was...less than impressed, unfortunately.)
Sorry to hear that, at least depending on in what way you were unimpressed.  In and of themselves the stories aren't really meant to be all that individually impressive; just vignettes really.  Short stories that explore little sidetracks of what else was going on during much larger event, and in that respect I think they are generally quite successful.  If this is just more not caring for the whole Corona history stuff though, well I can't really do any more to help you with that.  So if that's the case, I'm sorry to have caused you more trouble and pain by way of the recommendation. :unsuresweetie:

#41 · 102w, 4d ago · 2 · · Boiling Point ·


Personally, I'd prefer the idea of Celestia becoming paranoid. Think about it, what kind of world is Equestria? Dragons, the everfree, a mad god improsioned on the front lawn, monsters and villans and so on and so forth. Celestia starts taking up more and more responsibilities, starts eating at work, and doesn't sleep as much, and no matter how hard she tries to protect her subjects, she becomes more and more frightened that something terrible will happen if she doesn't protect them. She enacts curfews and draconian regulations and laws to protect her subjects.

Celestia sees her sister getting more and more distant as Celestia becomes more and more terrified of threats to her subjects, real or imagined, and eventually thinks that Luna will turn and become a tyrant. Overcome by fear and paranoia, Celestia does a pre-emptive stike, utterly convinced that what she does is aboslutely nessecary for the continued safety of her Little Ponies. At this point, she's become the overbearing mother who wraps her children in bubble wrap and almost never leaves them unsupervised.

When Celestia returns from her "banishment" she's so overcome with fear and paranoia that she assumes that, since it is night, that Luna has become a monster, and will not set the moon nor raise the sun. She kidnaps most of the town, and takes them to a safe place, providing for them, fussing over them, and making sure that they are perfectly safe. Little does she realize that she's become the biggest threat to Equestria in the manner of a crazed mother creating proxy children.

When the L6 arrive to "save the day" Celestia is convinced that they are agents of her "corrupted sister" and does everything in her power to protect her captives from an imagined threat. They blast her wht the Elements, but Celestia is still terrified of monsters, until in comes Luna to soothe her big sisters fears, raising the sun to chase away Celestia's tears.

Celestia is now the equivalent of early S1 Fluttershy. Timid, easily frightened, and hides a lot, but still means well and has much of her good nature in play.

Oh my gosh...Raindrops is on drugs.

Also, the Lunaverse? It's amazing. So far, i think it could possibly, just maybe, equal (if not exceed) the show in terms of Fantasticness. Please keep up the amazing work.

Seems like this is going to be relevant later. That, or we have some extract of Raindrops running around somewhere.

They certainly needed the bits; she loved Lyra's music, but the fact was that it wasn't really bringing in the dough.

Hah! Looks like Trixie is right after all about Lyra being a broke musician!

Almonds, so, cyanide? As in Dash is now panicking about Raindrops poisoning her? :twilightoops:

...happy Raindrops scares me now....

and either Rainbow Dash is allergic to almonds, or she suspects cyanide.

This chapter is one word longer than the previous one which is pretty awesome. Also finally a raindrops tag.

This is a great deal of fun! Thanks so much for sharing it. Love what you're doing with the characters. Only negative was that you got a little flowery and overly stylistic literary at times but overall loving this story. Thanks very much for sharing!

Yeup, this was exactly what the doctor ordered and I'm already feeling much better than I was before I started reading the chapter... not as happy as Raindrops obviously, but that's rather obviously for the best.

I was caught a little off guard and unsettled in a not very pleasant way by Carrot Top apparently getting injured by the bear hug, though I'm guessing it can't be all that serious if a couple pain killers is sufficient.

It's either changelings or Mongolians at this point.


Other than that, things seem excellent so far.

and all of them known treats Raindrops was known to enjoy.

Should probably excise the first instance of known here.

“Oh, nothing.” Lyra rolled her eyes and smiled. “I was just wondering how many bad habits you kicked just before you came to Ponyville.” Fortunately, she had the good sense to flee before Trixie could lob anything heavy.

And thus the chase was ahoof...

Which chase? Chasing down the problem with Rainy or chasing Lyra? [img]//[/img]

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