I gotta say, this is the creepiest fic I've ever read (apart from the apparent inspiration for this, Cupcakes). That said, I like the way it's written, surprisingly. I don't read humanized fics often, but I have to admit that this one is, at the very least, tolerable. Can't seem to wrap my head around the story, though. Some parts seem a little out of place for me, and only after re-reading it do I actually start to make sense of the order. Still, though, it makes for a really good murder story. I can imagine Ms. Pinkamena with her pupils contracted to pin-prick sized dots on her face and a blood-soaked grin plastered across her crazed, twitching features, knife in hand, slowly walking toward her next victim, slowly singing a deranged version of "Smile, Smile, Smile". Creepy as hell, but makes for a good read, ironically.
1999041 I don't, either, but I thought I might mention it, if only to see if you could come up wit anything of use (should the whim tickle your fancy). Basically, it's a rubbery idea that I decided to bounce off of your frontal lobe. Sorry if I left a mark.
I am actually starting to see now that pinkamena and pinkie are two different ponies entirely i read enough tumblr blogs now to get it pinkamena is pinkie's evil half ok now thats just creepy i woudlnt want an evil half
I gotta say, this is the creepiest fic I've ever read (apart from the apparent inspiration for this, Cupcakes). That said, I like the way it's written, surprisingly. I don't read humanized fics often, but I have to admit that this one is, at the very least, tolerable. Can't seem to wrap my head around the story, though. Some parts seem a little out of place for me, and only after re-reading it do I actually start to make sense of the order. Still, though, it makes for a really good murder story. I can imagine Ms. Pinkamena with her pupils contracted to pin-prick sized dots on her face and a blood-soaked grin plastered across her crazed, twitching features, knife in hand, slowly walking toward her next victim, slowly singing a deranged version of "Smile, Smile, Smile". Creepy as hell, but makes for a good read, ironically.
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So, I'm not the one who sees the demonic 'Smile,Smile, Smile' in their head during those parts, good to know.
But yeah, thanks for the comment. It's always good to hear criticism on my fics, especially experiments like this one.
1999041
I don't, either, but I thought I might mention it, if only to see if you could come up wit anything of use (should the whim tickle your fancy). Basically, it's a rubbery idea that I decided to bounce off of your frontal lobe. Sorry if I left a mark.
I am actually starting to see now that pinkamena and pinkie are two different ponies entirely i read enough tumblr blogs now to get it pinkamena is pinkie's evil half ok now thats just creepy i woudlnt want an evil half
2019719 We all have a dark side my friend, especially if you're a pink pony that can defy physics.