um i do not know what to make of this story. i have a love hate relationship with cupcakes since it makes my favorite character pinkie a murderer. sure i made bad things happen to her in my story too but not like this. either way i like human!ponies and the human version of their world.
1945865 Yeah, I was going to have a forward saying how Cupcakes was both the best and worst thing to happen to MLP fanfiction (best for being easily recognized outside the fandom, worst for how dark and disturbing it can be for a first time reader).
As for what happens to her in this story... Well, I'm not entirely sure what to say on that front. You'll see Pinkie (or Pinkamena rather) at her best soon, so far you've only seen her at her worst. And thank you, I was trying to keep it close to the cannon of FiM... But that's hard to do with humans.
1946016 It sure takes alot of work and the whole pinkamena and pinkie thing i always have to remind myself they are two different ponies. I swear i get the two mixed up since to me they are the same pony because its her full name but in this fandom is her evil alter ego. like i told someone before on their story i will try to separate the two personalities seeing as its my favorite character its hard i shouldn't let my pinkie fanboyism blind me. so you're welcome i hope to see more from this humanverse.
1946046 Yeah, the pinkie/pinkamena thing is a bit annoying when you're dealing with both personalities. You wont be seeing the happy Pinkie personality much more in this story, but I might write a sequel if I get ok reception with this one.
So you might see more of the humanverse with the sequels too. I wana keep this one mostly in Ponyville... mostly.
1946542 I feel the same way about Scootaloo since i tend to gear more towards earth ponies since i think they are the most interesting out of the three pony races. I don't believe in a worst pony i think every pony is best in their own right.
Well, I finally had the time to read this story and boy...is it good! For something that's a take on Cupcakes, you had made things with a near noir atmosphere and to top it off, seemed to do well with having the characters as humans (not an easy feat). Funny how the first few chapters consist of the introduction as Colt deals with the event of Cupcakes, and how it carries on forward after it, like the possibility that Colt may had feelings for Pinkie at one time (to which no doubt Pinkie do something about it in the later story).
Surprised as how the unicorns in this story is called Scholars and seems to fit in well for the humanized world of Equestria, especially as how the villains of this universe are scholars and as well as criminally insane. The background information that you have on the story is very intriguing such as how you had Colt explain to Pinkie about such things on the train. And the choice of character is nice as how it isn't consist of mostly females and one guy, it's nice to 'even it out' with adding male characters from the show and would go as far as to introduce other Male OCs (like Colt's partner).
Now at present times, Colt tries to move away from Ponyville to start a new life and as possibly have a love interest, like Twilight 'warming' up to Colt (to which I imagine would infuriate Pinkamena as she most likely to believe that only SHE can have him...in a twisted way of course). It is sad that he has to deal Cupcakes once again with a potential wannabee, as he still believes that Pinkie is still in a asylum. It'll be interesting to see how is that Pinkie Escaped and as well as, apparently, the well being of Rainbow Dash to which I have my doubts that she's actually alive. Then again with magic being involved (for the most cases anyways).
It shall be Interesting to see how you get Pinkamena to be at her "fullest potential" in the later chapters to which I will await early for it to come it. As it is had to find a story that involves horror with a bit of detective work on the side. Don't worry about the likes/dislikes my man, people would shrug off with a wonderful complicated story that you have displayed so far and would hope that you continue to see this through as a good writing exercise. Hell I would! Anyhow hope things turns out well to you liking and wish you the best of luck! Keep up the good work man.
1962478 Wow, that is a very long and detailed comment that I have to say, I enjoyed reading a lot. First off, thank you for giving the time to read my story, I really appreciate you guys (this includes all the people who read my stuff).
There is one thing I do have to clear up though, Pinkie Pie hasn't escaped yet. The person who killed Silver Spoon, let's say is a bit on the schizophrenic side and is seeing hallucinations of Pinkamena and Rainbow Dash. But don't worry, we'll be seeing Pinkie very soon . I actually didn't think about RD coming back to life (which would've been an amazing plot point now that you mentioned it), because most of Equestria would consider it evil magic, so only the villains like Discord (he'd do it for the lulz) or Sombra (not sure why he'd do it, but it would probably have to do with crystals! lol) would venture that far.
So, thank you again for that very detailed comment, and expect the next chapter within the next couple of weeks.
1962796 What can I say, I like making long comments. It doesn't take much for everyone to do a simple comment, but I like to take it a step further with my thoughts and speculations, it gives me a good challenge anyways.
Hmm, from what it sounds like, it sounded like the killer and Pinkamena was in the same scene and her imagining Rainbow Dash, but hey that works too! As for Sombra, he could be addict to the magical substances of Crystals like a drug that made him insane, you know like that other Crystal drug *hint hint* (besides he sputters only crystals and gibberish stuff anyways).
Aww, you tease me with such work and the next chapter won't come out for the next couple of weeks? This is the. worst. possible. thing :acts dramatic and summons a couch to lay on:
But very well, I shall be waiting begrudgingly patiently.
um i do not know what to make of this story. i have a love hate relationship with cupcakes since it makes my favorite character pinkie a murderer. sure i made bad things happen to her in my story too but not like this. either way i like human!ponies and the human version of their world.
1945865
Yeah, I was going to have a forward saying how Cupcakes was both the best and worst thing to happen to MLP fanfiction (best for being easily recognized outside the fandom, worst for how dark and disturbing it can be for a first time reader).
As for what happens to her in this story... Well, I'm not entirely sure what to say on that front. You'll see Pinkie (or Pinkamena rather) at her best soon, so far you've only seen her at her worst. And thank you, I was trying to keep it close to the cannon of FiM... But that's hard to do with humans.
1946016
It sure takes alot of work and the whole pinkamena and pinkie thing i always have to remind myself they are two different ponies. I swear i get the two mixed up since to me they are the same pony because its her full name but in this fandom is her evil alter ego. like i told someone before on their story i will try to separate the two personalities seeing as its my favorite character its hard i shouldn't let my pinkie fanboyism blind me. so you're welcome i hope to see more from this humanverse.
1946046
Yeah, the pinkie/pinkamena thing is a bit annoying when you're dealing with both personalities. You wont be seeing the happy Pinkie personality much more in this story, but I might write a sequel if I get ok reception with this one.
So you might see more of the humanverse with the sequels too. I wana keep this one mostly in Ponyville... mostly.
1946271
Oh cool can't wait so anyways who is your favorite pony? mine is Applejack and Pinkie.
1946479
Mines a cross up between Fluttershy and Luna. But, I have a growing appreciation for Apple Bloom.
1946542
I feel the same way about Scootaloo since i tend to gear more towards earth ponies since i think they are the most interesting out of the three pony races. I don't believe in a worst pony i think every pony is best in their own right.
1946652
I feel the same way... Except I have a bit of a bad relationship with Braeburn, I don't know why but he just seems like a jerk to me.
1949022
I know what you mean Braeburn just rubs me the wrong way.
Well, I finally had the time to read this story and boy...is it good! For something that's a take on Cupcakes, you had made things with a near noir atmosphere and to top it off, seemed to do well with having the characters as humans (not an easy feat). Funny how the first few chapters consist of the introduction as Colt deals with the event of Cupcakes, and how it carries on forward after it, like the possibility that Colt may had feelings for Pinkie at one time (to which no doubt Pinkie do something about it in the later story).
Surprised as how the unicorns in this story is called Scholars and seems to fit in well for the humanized world of Equestria, especially as how the villains of this universe are scholars and as well as criminally insane. The background information that you have on the story is very intriguing such as how you had Colt explain to Pinkie about such things on the train. And the choice of character is nice as how it isn't consist of mostly females and one guy, it's nice to 'even it out' with adding male characters from the show and would go as far as to introduce other Male OCs (like Colt's partner).
Now at present times, Colt tries to move away from Ponyville to start a new life and as possibly have a love interest, like Twilight 'warming' up to Colt (to which I imagine would infuriate Pinkamena as she most likely to believe that only SHE can have him...in a twisted way of course). It is sad that he has to deal Cupcakes once again with a potential wannabee, as he still believes that Pinkie is still in a asylum. It'll be interesting to see how is that Pinkie Escaped and as well as, apparently, the well being of Rainbow Dash to which I have my doubts that she's actually alive. Then again with magic being involved (for the most cases anyways).
It shall be Interesting to see how you get Pinkamena to be at her "fullest potential" in the later chapters to which I will await early for it to come it. As it is had to find a story that involves horror with a bit of detective work on the side. Don't worry about the likes/dislikes my man, people would shrug off with a wonderful complicated story that you have displayed so far and would hope that you continue to see this through as a good writing exercise. Hell I would! Anyhow hope things turns out well to you liking and wish you the best of luck! Keep up the good work man.
~Best Regards
1962478
Wow, that is a very long and detailed comment that I have to say, I enjoyed reading a lot. First off, thank you for giving the time to read my story, I really appreciate you guys (this includes all the people who read my stuff).
There is one thing I do have to clear up though, Pinkie Pie hasn't escaped yet. The person who killed Silver Spoon, let's say is a bit on the schizophrenic side and is seeing hallucinations of Pinkamena and Rainbow Dash. But don't worry, we'll be seeing Pinkie very soon . I actually didn't think about RD coming back to life (which would've been an amazing plot point now that you mentioned it), because most of Equestria would consider it evil magic, so only the villains like Discord (he'd do it for the lulz) or Sombra (not sure why he'd do it, but it would probably have to do with crystals! lol) would venture that far.
So, thank you again for that very detailed comment, and expect the next chapter within the next couple of weeks.
-Muleicous
1962796
What can I say, I like making long comments. It doesn't take much for everyone to do a simple comment, but I like to take it a step further with my thoughts and speculations, it gives me a good challenge anyways.
Hmm, from what it sounds like, it sounded like the killer and Pinkamena was in the same scene and her imagining Rainbow Dash, but hey that works too! As for Sombra, he could be addict to the magical substances of Crystals like a drug that made him insane, you know like that other Crystal drug *hint hint* (besides he sputters only crystals and gibberish stuff anyways).
Aww, you tease me with such work and the next chapter won't come out for the next couple of weeks? This is the. worst. possible. thing
:acts dramatic and summons a couch to lay on:
But very well, I shall be waiting
begrudginglypatiently.1962881
Now I never said it would take a couple of weeks to get done, did I?
It'll probably be done some time this week actually.
1962911
Pfft, I see that you enjoy pulling my leg then.
Either way, can't wait for your next chapter.
Pinkie!!!