Sorry for the lack of image this time; I kinda wanted to get the chapter out =p. If I make one i'll update the story with it. Otherwise i'll hopefully continually post on ponypee.tumblr.com

I'm planning another memory after this chapter, look for it in the near future. As you can probably guess, it will be about the time when Twilight grew herself a penis. I'm not sure if i'll post it as soon as I'm done or if I'll wait until i'm halfway done with chapter 6 and post it to hold you over.

As always, don't forget to leave a comment

Cool chapter.

Very good chapter! Now all I want to see is Celestia in this then my life would be complete. I'm going to pony hell.....

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Haha she'll probably turn up sometime.

I hate to admit it....

but this is REALLY pretty good!

I like the ending.

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This is not gonna end well
But I'm liking where this story is going maybe
Something bad will happen between AJ and Dash I can tell.

(I'm using Red for speaking the truth and Blue for theories BTW)

...

I like where this is headed.

*Whistle.*

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Wikipedia link doesn't explain why the author thinks it's so fascinating to have fecal matter poured on you.

Piss contains compounds undesirable to the body and even is irritating to eyes and skin.

It's bodily waste, a byproduct of the body. WHy would you want to dissrespect someone by literally pissing on them?

Sometimes I wonder if authors of great clopfics would be great at sex...
I'm curious now... *shot*

Anywho, you totally should do a dream mini-chapter! Wonder who would do the dreaming... I await the next chapter!

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Think of it as an extension of vaginal lubrication/squirting and semen. It probably isn't that rare to want to cum all over your partner, urinating on your partner would simply be a foreplay version of that; when used in that context, urine is a sexual liquid. This goes for female squirting as well. As for skin irritation, that only occurs if urine is in contact with the skin for an extended amount of time. Urine is a sterile waste product which is in most cases (except for urinary tract infections) safe to drink.

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This, as disgusting as it sounds, satisfies my morbid curiosity. Thank you for taking the time to explain your view on it.

Evil is awesome for Good is dumb.
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Keep up the epic work my good sir. I <3 this one.

"She noticed that the naughty pony grinding against her;" -
"I can ride her for a good 3 hours before she is sore." - I think this would sound better if you used gets
"Better tasting than most of the stallions she’s tasted." - The tense bothers me - she'd or she had
"The gooey semen travelled downward, splashing across a mint-green pony’s back." - I LOL'D

240794 Thanks, fixed.
(also done the memory chapter ones as well).

BEST CLOPFIC EVER!!!!!!!! I love your work so much, for the love of Celestia DON'T STOP!!!

I apologize for being a hater, but this is absolutely terrible. I honestly tried to read it and got as far as 3/4 of the way through chapter 2. I was going to quit 1/4 of the way through, but I skimmed down and noticed a picture and curiosity helped me push myself to continue just to see what this could possibly mean

Maybe pee fetishes make no sense or something? (Fetishes don't always make sense, right? Well, at least pee fetishes make even less sense than any other possible other fetish at least)

Anyways, this is gross more than hot, by a lot. What this really lacked was any kind of emotion. Can someone really get stimulated through text? Because I had a hard time feeling anything

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No need to apologize, thanks for the feedback. "What this really lacked was any kind of emotion." Yeah I've been trying to improve this in the later chapters. As for the grossness, it is pretty subjective; for people who don't have urine fetishes I try to balance it out with humor and allow the disgusting nature of it to be an interesting hook. I have no clue how that actually worked out. This is more of a test for myself that is simply meant to reach a small audience and as a practice for myself to prove that I can write. After I finish this i'll be moving onto more vanilla clop and even non clop.

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Haha thanks, i'm intrigued that someone who doesn't like urine is reading this. I've gotten a few people passing over it for a quick laugh, no one has read two chapters really.

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Yeah, pretty terribly photoshopped vector back then; I actually just got a drawing tablet; we'll see how that goes.

I am in request for Rainbow Dash peeing on Twilight with her futanaric penis while Twilight is laying on her bedside.
Following /b/'s motto: "Pics or it didn't happen"

I wanted to see what would happen if rainbow's balls were infused with spicy rainbows D:

While I am not really a big piss fetish person, nor did I like looking at the pics, I really enjoyed the fic. I think its one of the most tasteful clopfics out there: not too mushy, not too sexytime, right in the middle with the right amount of chacacter development and the right amount of sex.

I can't wait to see what other kinky spells Twilight has or will research to get her and her friends off >:D

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At the risk of sounding like a perv ;-),
When will this glorious tale continue?

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I have the events of chapter 6 planned out; the structure is down. I've been so sidetracked I really need to get back into it xD.

Hm... I find myself wanting to read the story... But I don't know - I read the comments first, and saw mentioning of a nightmare. That alone is kind of putting me off, since usually nightmares are horrid. And I've seen enough 'grimdark' pony stuff, as some of the bronies I hang out with tend to call it... It's not bloody or gory or anything, is it? All I want to know.

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Nope, just a pony falling in darkness.

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Ohh, phew. Then it's safe for me to read!

...I'll have to read it when I'm not sleepy. But I'm sure it'll be good.~

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This needs more.

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Me too!

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I agree.

This story,

You've made at least hundreds of people fap furiously.
Good on you, keep on hoofin'

...........
Im not big on clopfics so forgive me when i say
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Well that was an interesting read.

HighLevelTeen.
I did say that I would read this when it was completed, and when I had time.
I completed F.F.L.R.F. about three months ago, I have time.
But you never seem to complete anything; so i guess I'll never read this...
(oh yeah and btw I was never here!)

I came buckets. Legit.

poor lyra

Anone who likes watersports gains my respect, and you ciratainly have, especailly with how well this story is written.

Fucking amazing story :)

Re-finding this story has inspired me to crank out a TwiMac one shot watersports. I'll post it in the morning.

I love the chapter

Well that's it my 46th read through I really need your help I've read every watersports fic on this site and I NEED MOAR
Do you know any good ones

2706894 Since you've read every one on fimfiction (I've also read most all of them), write your own. You still get satisfaction out of it (at least for me).

Poor Lyra, she didn't deserve that...

It's been a while since you posted a chapter, (roughly 77weeks) and I was wondering if you will ever be posting more chapters. I really like this story, and I how it will continue.

Sooo...dead story?

Good story ya got here.

well. im now impatent for this to continue.