Liking it.

Well, Derpy's life has become a soap opera, and we're just grinning like idiots along for the ride.

>>17050451705045

And on the next episode of As the Derp Turns....

Once again, you prove yourself to be an amazing author, Shin. Keep it up!

>>17050511705051

"You bitch! You always had it out for my husband, and you've revealed yourself!"

"You can't stop us, Ditzy! We're in love, and no amount of tin or mercenaries will change that."

"I'm sorry Derpy, but we can't be together. You see, I'm actually your long lost brother."

"Brother? But how can that be? The tests just came back, and . . . Cinnamon . . . you're a Cylon."

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>>17052461705246

Wow.  Cinnamon's not even born yet and she's already a Cylon.

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Damn talk about a dilemma.

Of fucking course. Fav'd.

I must say I like where this is going.

Great chapter, and I'm loving it so far! A tale of forbidden romance, you see that alot, really, but never one that actually MEANS something! This, this is perfect... Fav'd liked, and anything else that'll boost this up to the top...

The sad thing about this, is that we already know how this ended.

>>17110471711047

Maybe you do, maybe you don't.  :

So Derpy made an expensive dimension crossing machine so she can watch cable for free? Seems excessive.

>>17579131757913

Well, unfortunately at this time in their history, Netflix is not available in Equestria.

I think I just realized that the last line out of Derpy's machine is from Matt and Anna.

And all this is before the madness that is humanity!?

Derpy sure lead a crazy life, I would want her to have a happy ending, but...

“No, Mama, I’m not putting on weight.  You’re imaging things.”

Is this perhaps supposed to be "imagining things"?

>>18594281859428

This.

Anyway its like what people say: "Its the journey and no the destination that matters most." At the very least her life is quite the adventure from what we already know and what we are currently seeing.

>>18594281859428

But we know by Be Human how this will end: Derpy will die and she and Autumn won't be ever together.

>>18602811860281

Yup  I'll get it fixed.

>>18650161865016

Aw, man, you just spoiled the story for me!

Derpy being awesome. What's not to love.

Ditzy being in regret, and that's very sad.

Well shit that was so awesome!

She's sure to get commendations and she hasn't even reached Apploosa yet!

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On a different note; I want to see the tickled code enacted !

Derpy = Macgyver Hooves!

Ditzy can just

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Until she's ready to accept the Love and Tolerance.

OK first things first, Yay new story section.

Aww, in your universe, Dr. Whooves isn't the Dr. and he doesn't date Derpy.  Sad face is Sad.

“We are soooo doomed,” he moaned.  I love that line.

About Sparkler.  From reading your other stories, I know who she becomes.  However, and I noticed this in the last section, the way she talks about her family and their treatment of her are way to overt.  To me it's not sending red flags, or maybe somethings wrong, their sending get foal protective services here yesterday and get her out now.  That would be fine, if Derpy was going to take her now, but we know she's going to have a baby sister who isn't born yet, so it needs to be way more gradual.  For example, a nightmare here and there.  Very apologetic if she spills something, or needs to clean something.   Continued glances around her to make sure she's not doing anything wrong.  A bit of shaking when she meets new ponies, or in new situations.  Things that would make Derpy pause and wonder but not yet ready to act on.

Also about Appolusa, the timeline really has me confused.  In the series, it was only around for a year when they arrived.  However, you have them at least 3 to 5 years, in my mind, before the series starts having them live there.  Am I missing something?  Or did you change the timeline intentionally.

I'm also confused with a few of the names, like Port Gayoe.  I know the joke is that they are all horse related, but this and one or two others don't sound like that.  Am I missing something, or is it somehow horse related?

Once again great story.

>>19621451962145

Okay, a few things:

- Yup no Doctor.  Sorry.  Then again, you get Derpy as a whole different kind of Doc - Doc Savage type.

- I did it intentionally.  There will be some explanation in the next few chapters.  Derpy is just currently aware Sparkler has a bad home, but nothing that she can do to interceded.  Plus, there's no proof.  Although I'm sure you're already aware of this, the worst is yet to come for her.

- Timeline is about six years before the series.

- Regarding Appaloosa: my pre-readers and I discussed this, and in hindsight they're correct - I should have been a little clearer.  At the moment, Appaloosa - or more properly, Fort Appaloosa, is a frontier military fort that has a small civilian settlement within its borders.  The Appaloosa (the newly settled down) you see in the series is meant to be the settlement after the fort was decommissioned and law enforcement turned over from the Guard to the local sheriff's department.  I'll make that clearer next chapter.

- In the main series, Celestia mentioned that the noble titles are named after regions of Equestria (it was DJ that noted they just happened to match horse breeds).  You're getting to see some of those areas now in play.  Lake Vanner is the basis for the Dukedom of Vanner (and its current titleholder, Pinkie Pie, Duchess Vanner); likewise the Lusitano River is the bassis for the County of Lusitano (and its current titleholder, Elusive, Count Lusitano.)

>>19623761962376

OK, maybe I'm extra sensitive about child abuse.  I'm a teacher in RL and if I heard comments by children like Sparkler, I'd be reporting it.  Like I said before it seems a bit too much too soon.  But I enjoy your stories and hope to read more.

>>19623761962376

For the timeline, is it six years before the television series, or six years before All-American Girl?

If I remember correctly (and I'll go back to check on this in a moment), Shining Armor and Princess Cadence are not married yet?

>>19656261965626

Six years prior to the series.

(I havent read this story yet)

So im guessing Ditzy doo is Derpy's Twin sister?

>>20759492075949

Yes.

This is getting interesting.

Ditzy and commitment are two foreign powers in a constant cold war. Derpy ironically is fighting the same problem, though in a different way.

Can't wait for the next installment!

This story.

So much yes.

I seriously can't believe I only JUST found this.

Keep it going.

Now that's a twist   Nice characterization for poor Tiny -- it's supposed to hurt when one of the white hats die...

I definitely want to see where this one's going.

R.I.P. Tiny

We never got to know you.

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Man that was a emitional read.

I feel sorry for Tiny..

"And how, pray tell, do you know so much about me? Look, cadet, the "secret" is a secret, but in this universe; I got an eyepatch, I killed my crappy sister, Sparkler has been dead for years, and the Solar and Lunar empires are at war. But still, explain how you know that much, soldier!"

>>21111822111182

Cus i been watching you, you just never noticed me, I'm a ninja after all

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Aaaaaaaand... Cliffhanger!

Out of curiousity, what is a gaur? I tried to Google it but I got a city in India, which I don't think is what you were going for.

Obviously it's supposed to be offensive towards the bison though.

>>21117892111789

Gaur, also known as the Indian bison.

Neat twist at the end there.

Poor Tiny.

Love this story! Can't wait till next chapter

>>21347242134724

Thanks!

>>21350942135094

How the next chapter coming along? ^^

>>22893832289383

I'm hoping to have it out as soon as possible.  Got a lot of things being juggled right now, so it's coming along not as fast as I'd hoped.

>>22895322289532

Cool. Take your time

Yay, FINALLY!

JK, it wasn't too bad a wait. But glad that you're back! Needed my All-American fix, and rewatching Die Hard while listening to Courtesy of the Red White & Blue with my pet bald eagle wasn't cutting it anymore.

Very nice story.  I find it funny how you said she is clumsy because of her eye. I am blind in my left eye and it doesn't make me any more clumsier. But anyway, very good fic, I'll look forward to more.

I'm liking this so far, let's hope Ditzy gets her act together.

Glad to see this back.

Feels like Ditzy is constantly falling back to old habits with no growth to her character. At this point I don't think a physical beat down would snap her out of it.

I was just glad it's continuing.  The last chapter had me thinking that was it, that you didn't want spoilers for All-American Girl.

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My reaction to seeing a new chapter:

>>24325232432523 Now that it's Friday, I finally found time to read! Huzzah!

First off,

"...though I’ll be back on my feet in a few weeks.”

Now that that's out of the way, onto the good stuff.

Oh Derpy, you have no idea... I wonder if she'll have sudden clarity at the moment of her death in regards to the prophecy (assuming she'd know what would happen to Sandalwood)? That'd be so profound and emotional, and I'd hate to say that I love the idea because it sounds terrible to wish that deep an emotional and mental questioning on someone, but I'd love the idea, assuming this story goes all the way to her death. Or maybe Cadance will make the connection in the main or a side story? Actually, I can kind of picture it being the epilogue to this story if you don't have all that planned out already. I just love it when characters make deep realizations in hindsight like that.

Oh Ditzy, please please please see the light soon. Well, I know that won't happen for a while yet, but this story is truly tragic in the literal sense of the word. It really breathes life into Derpy and her's story instead of just being a plot device. Shining Armor too, to a smaller extent.

>>24330042433004 What do you mean? That's kind of just how Derpy is characterized all across the fandom. Even canonically.

>>24522642452264

and, of course, her eyes, which causes her to be clumsier in public than she normally is....

>>24526432452643 Well yes, that's the generally accepted idea. If you wanted to get technical, i suppose you could infer that she has Strabismus which hampers depth perception, and by extension could lead to increased clumsiness. To be honest though, I can't think of an instance where you wouldn't find her crossed eyes making her, well, Derpy. That's kind of the entire reason we all love her so much in the first place.

>>24522642452264

Actually, yes, he has feet.  A foot isn't necessarily in a plantigrade shape like we have, but unguligrade as they do still qualify as feet.  The fact that we refer to them as hooves (a metonym for what is actually the makeup of said foot) doesn't stop them from being feet.  

Plus, for the record, I did say that Derpy (or at least in my stories) has strabismus.

>>24530582453058 Thought as much, it's just it's rather uncommonl to hear them referred to as feet in the fandom, biologically correct or otherwise.

I was wondering where I'd pulled strabismus from in the first place. Guess I just forgot it was mentioned in story, though the point still stands. Thanks for the clarification!