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Zephyrus Scary


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Pinkamena "Pinkie" Diane Pie is Us. In crazy brilliance, We made Pinkie so strange that We would never be suspected, and it worked until the very end. An end that came about, not because We failed, but because of inescapable circumstance.

Now, We must run.

We do not want to think about what they will do to Us if they catch Us.

Chapters (2)
Comments ( 274 )

I'll state this right here, in case you, dear reader, read a little bit in and decided to race down here to comment:

YES, I PURPOSEFULLY USED A LOWER CASE "i" FOR THE FIRST-PERSON PROTAGONIST.

You might also care to note that I capitalized such words as "We" and "Us" when referring to the Mind that is Pinkie. This was all done on purpose, and if you can't get why, just... leave. Don't even comment, please (unless you're honestly curious instead of just being derisive), because I have a personal code against deleting things.

WITH THAT OUT OF THE WAY

I've seen a lot of "X is a Changeling" fics, but I don't think I've ever heard of a "X is multiple Changelings" fic, so... here's one!

If you've read any of my other stories, you'll notice right away that I use very different Changeling lore from "Love Mine" and "For Mother," and if you haven't read my other stories, but like this, then I'm sure you'll like my other stuff, because in spite of the vast lore difference, all my stories have very similar themes and messages (because I'm an unoriginal hack of a pseudo-writer).

Two likes, one view. I call shenanigans...

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I can only guess that'd be my watchers... I swear it's not me! :fluttercry:
Look, it's three thumbs up to one view, now!

Did you proofread this? There's a lot of missed capitalization. :rainbowhuh:

Man, I wish I had three times as many likes as views on one of my stories...

This story is kind of a mind buck to read but it's totally worth it. :derpyderp1:

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'S'okay. I really did expect someone to skip over/pay no mind to that note, I just didn't expect it to be one of my watchers!

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The fact that I have... almost 41 times as many watchers as you (not bragging! :twilightblush:) probably has something to do with the fact that happened for a little while there...

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Well, I did try to think and write from the perspective of a creature that has has shared its mind and thoughts with others all its life, so... I'm sure that has to do with at least some of that.

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Woah there. I just wasn't sure that people would like things without reading it, no matter the author.

1682593 Well, I'sa new watcher. I never know any better. :rainbowwild:

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Well, watchers... watch because they like an author's style (or something like that), which means they're predisposed to liking that author's stories, and... you know what? dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/emoticons/shrug_Derpy_Hooves.png

1682713 I wish I has watchers... :pinkiesad2:
Someday though! Just need to practice, learn more words, find my style and stop writing total crap!! :pinkiehappy:

Excellent story! :pinkiehappy:
Honestly the only problem I have with it is that you are probably not going to write any more stories that are canon to this and I can think of at least two other story ideas that I would want to read.

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:yay: THANK YOU!
dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/emoticons/misc_TwilightWut.png Oh? And what would those ideas be? Obviously not guaranteeing anything, but it couldn't hurt, hm?

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I get why you want to de-emphasize the "i", but it's still a pain to read.

Wow. This was really good!!! :pinkiecrazy::pinkiegasp::pinkiehappy::pinkiesick::pinkiesmile::pinkiehappy::pinkiecrazy::pinkiesmile:

Of course! Pinkie buys a crazy amount of cider so she can share it with the others.

I don't think you write Celestia as a sociopath or anything, but it's nice to see something from you where she shows remorse. Both sides seemed to be expecting the worst from each other and were proven wrong.

Truly, hugs are the solution to all the world's problems.


Edit: also, the scenes with the manticore got a very strong response from me.

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I knew that it was going to be tough for some to get past the "i" and into the story, and I did it anyway--I wanted it to be jarring, though perhaps a few read-throughs will help?

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:heart: Thanks!

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HA! I wasn't thinking about the cider, but yes! So-ooo many things make sense with this bit of fanon! :rainbowlaugh:

And if you're talking about "Love Mine" there, just be patient...

Yes... the manticore. That was the one scene I really focused on, because as soon as it came to me, I felt like I had to really do my best to portray the idea of "i'm dying in the slowest, most horrible way i can imagine" without any gore. It's rare for me to say this, but, I'm actually proud of it... dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/emoticons/misc_Fluttershy.png

I was at first adverse to the pinkie is multiple changelings but I acctually like how it turned out. :pinkiehappy:

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The first idea is probably a bit too similar to your Love Mine side story. Basically I'm wondering what would happen after the story ends. How Pinkie's friends would deal with her being "gone" and the changlings being around instead. Or would the changlings be asked to keep using the Pinkie Pie identity with chrysalis still on the loose? How would the girls deal with having to lie to everyone in town?
My other idea is basically where did the youngest changling come from? He joined the group months after the Nightmare Moon and apparently not long before discord escaped. It seems like there is a story there.

They might not be very good ideas. I'm not very good at writing.:twilightsheepish:

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Hm...
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HMM...
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That first idea... there may be the hint of... something coming to me, but... not enough just yet...
The latter idea, not so much. I feel like it would be too similar to an upcoming "Love Mine" POV side story, that it just wouldn't be worth it...

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Well, I'm happy you not only gave it a chance, but I'm even more happy you found out you liked it! :pinkiehappy:

Eeyuep, I can't wait for love mine updates either! :twilightsmile:

I really like this. This being my first comment, I gotta make a good first impression...It was good!
No moron, that's not how you leave a good comment. :facehoof:
Anyway, it says "incomplete." Does that mean this will have a second chapter?

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Huh? are you sure about that? It says "Complete" to me, and it's set to "Complete" in the settings (I just checked)...

Oh, sorry. I must've looked at it wrong.
Anyway, great story! :pinkiehappy:
I guess I'll check out your other stories later.

meh

leroy jenkins

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You're all set, he must have not refreshed the page or something.

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Oh, hah! It happens!
Thanks! :twilightsmile: and I hope you like my other stuff, too!

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Uh... eh... what?dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/emoticons/misc_Twilight_pea.png

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Hmm, I don't think so, since I had it on "Complete" before I even submitted it.

I think meh was referencing leroy jenkins, originating from the world of warcraft video here:

Doesn't make any sense, though.

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I figured that, but... like you said, no sense is made...

*sniff* The Pinkies need a hug.

Okay, usually stories that are really long are "turn-offs" for me, but this one was actually good. I thought the scene with the manticore was pretty good when trying to do it the way the author was trying to do it. I don't really know what to say other than I liked the story, I like the thoughts that tied the story to show, and I like how well executed the story is. Usually, characters are depicted out of character, or something is off.In this story, only Celestia is out of character, and just barely.

I liked it, it was a story well written.:yay:

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Likes are displayed instantly. Views are updated every ten minutes.

Writer is willing to break one of the most pervasive and obvious rules of grammar to jar the reader and convey something about the character? Intriguing. Will read.

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Dear Princess Celestia
Today I learned I can sometime be a prick. Also views don't update instantly.
Your Faithful Student
sarasangel

it was like this:

:rainbowlaugh::pinkiehappy:
:twilightsmile::pinkiehappy:
:ajsmug::pinkiehappy:
:raritywink::pinkiehappy:
:fluttershysad::pinkiehappy:

:trollestia::pinkiesad2:

:pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy:

and in that order

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Straddling the line between artistic and stupid since... sometime after I started writing stories dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/emoticons/misc_Lyra_dealwithit.png

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Hugging Changelings: does it take balls or not?

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A wish I had a wordy and lovely response to equal your wordy and lovely praise. Oh well; take a heart! :heart:

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Ha! In a way, yeah, given for Celestia We only have :trollestia: and dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/emoticons/lolface_Celestia.png ... dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/emoticons/sillyfilly_Twilight_Sparkle.png

So what happened in episode 3 of season 3, wouldn't every copy of pinkie mean eight other copies?

That was a clever idea and explains many things and I love it - but not as much I love the fic staying in changeling-POV the whole time and never letting up, and keeping the pronouns and way of speaking correct had to be a pain in bum!

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Actually, it would mean that the episode wouldn't happen, as there are more Pinkies than friends to go around.

Though I can see them giving up part of the charade and admitting that there is a Pinkie army running around town.

yeah.... and i only know how to use the chart of emotes on the right...
shrugs

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well thank you *heart accepted*
:pinkiehappy:

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FIRE THE HEADCANON!
Not necessarily, since only one Changeling--as Pinkie--went to the Pool; your situation would have only happened if all eight went. Also, the "clone" were so single-minded because 1) the magic of the Pool forced their mind to be so set on whatever they were created for and 2) they were without a Mind, which... well, you know what that means.
Also, the reason the Pool was used in the first place is because they knew that the spell Twilight used existed, and she might find it, since even Pinkie physics couldn't explain more than one Pinkie existing at the same time. Failsafe, you know--don't want the others to get sent into the Pool!

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I wouldn't have come up with this idea if not for a random thought from one of my other fics, which it sounds like you might like.
Also, Word's search function was a BIG help in that regard.

Wonderful. I was expecting some play on the Too Many Pinkie Pies episode before I read your author note. Very well done! Manticore scene was a bit graphic though. But hey, that just means you're good at what you're doing to make me actually cringe and feel queasy!

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"Wonderful"? "Very well done"? "make [you] cringe a feel queasy"?
:pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy:

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No really, mad props to you. Manticore scene was exactly what I wasn't expecting.

I didn't notice how focused I was on the story until my coworker asked me if I was going to go get lunch or not!

Very well done. This was certainly food for thought.

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I hope you managed to eat before you had to get back to work!

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Ah, I prefer to think of all art as thought-food, just some is... rotten, and others are junk food.
Oh, and thanks! :twilightsmile:

Did Pinkie Number Eight die? :pinkiesad2: Maybe Celestia healed her? (or, if genderless, xir)

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