As for the WW trait, You should see one when you do Barton Thorns unmarked quest, and Old World blues is full of them. Keep in mind that they aren't exactly paranormal, usually old movie references that you might not get.
I got the special editions that have DLCs included. Trust me though, they are totally worth it... Except Honest Hearts, which is only worth it for Joshua Graham, the perks, raised level cap, and Joshua Graham.
This chapter feels like it should've been called "below her garden" (though in a way, that IS 'beyond', I guess) (on a related note, I love that song, and thank you for linking to the original, and not to any of the remixes!)
On to the story! I had a blast with this
"Yes! Finally, someone else who understands as well as Chess does!"
Hah. Impervious to sarcasm.
Heh. Dem Three Old Ladies
"Every source I'd heard of believed that, while powerful, Discord was just a historical figure, no different than countless similar threats to Equestria that had popped up over the years."
Poor lad. You have no idea!
“Well, he’s dead,” Chess said, shrugging.
haha. Wow. There's really no one who likes that guy, is there?
'I was sent as an ambassador from the utopia of the Surface World. Bow before my glory!'
That can't end well
Oh gods. Mole ponies. Brilliant!
And it keeps us safe from all the horrors above Assuming there are any horrors above
Hah, lol
"but now that I know it's safe, I gotta see some of it when I get the chance!"
Umm... I think this guy needs a little more warning about the surface. Lack of radiation is hardly the same as "safe"
“As you wish, Your Surfaceness”
These guys are hilarious
"His cutie mark appeared to be nothing more than a pile of junk, which seemed odd, considering his role."
I get the feeling that simply not having anything mushroom, insect or digging related already makes him special
King Soilsifter, huh? Welp. That's a pretty regal sounding name for a mole pony, I guess
"Most of the cast is simply due to the fact that Mountainhill is a notorious alarmist."
Hah!
...cold water? wat?
"I used to explore the Abandoned Caverns all the time back when they were still just the Seldom Used Caverns."
Hah. I love the way these guys name things
"Super Hard Ant Reaver Thing"
Yup. Still loving it
"However, only the abdomen on the left produced the Fiery Ant Reaver Things we were familiar with, the other instead produced ants with two abdomens and no heads"
This had me laughing so much harder than it should have
"I reshaped the plate into a thin bar and shoved it under the ants’ chins, then lifted it up with all the force I could bring forth, flipping them onto their backs."
force field based melee weapons? Epic
"a gecko destroying a small city of dollhouses"
GO GO GODZILLA! xD
Corrections: -There's a load of places where the transitions from quotes to narration are missing their separating spaces. I think it's a Google Docs import issue. -You also got a load of mismatched quotation marks... some are fancy curly “” ones, others are normal "" ones. This is usually caused by writing in Word (which replaces the quotes by the fancy ones) and using fimfic to edit later. I'd say, either replace them all with straight ones, or go through them and copy the correct curly ones to all places that need em.
> and amole pony mare "and [a mole] pony mare" > I gotta pay ‘me back fer what they did to mah wing. "pay [‘em] back" > than it’d be selfish not to "then"? Or is this his accent or something? > our adventure in Stable97 Needs a space between "Stable" and "97". > Shovel stomped a hoof, imbedding it into the dirt. embedding > There was no joy in the laughter. It was the laugh of someone who had just realized that life was a joke and loss was the punch line. This part needs to be un-italicized > every bit of garbage he’d picked up on the way here , and Knight dropped a few land mines Remove the space before that comma > Or some reason, the ant was going down a different tunnel! [For] some reason > "I have so much to learn about you unicorns! and your magic once we're done with this adventure!" That exclamation mark in the middle, after "unicorns", seems like it shouldn't be there. > the other one imbedding itself in her neck Again, embedding :p > “Carrot.”Easy. Another missing space after the quote, there.
I play World of Tanks with the pony mod. This song gets picked in battle all the time (and usually it's the stupid version with the rap). I thought I'd finally gotten it out of my head.
Thoughts I had while reading Chapter 2 but before I read chapter 3 (which I have read as of writing): I like to imagine that everything Tricky is claiming to have done is actually true, and he's just having a bad time due to a series of circumstances in the now. Or maybe it's a Haruhi type thing where he keeps speaking things into existence without realizing he has that kind of power or something.
While it'll suck to see her go, I bet Stella's gonna die first in Click's place. Her paralleling Click so much will probably serve to jolt him and give a better idea of what to watch out for. Or something.
Woo! New chapter! Pretty good one, too. A nice side-adventure before we get into a serious chapter, as foreshadowed by your comments... Can't wait!
You managed to type a "Scooby-doo doors" gag... That's it, where do I sing-up to be a pre-reader.
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You got skype? Look me up, I'm called Clickclackthebrony there too.
I've got wild wasteland on all of my Fallout saves, and I haven't even experienced one paranormal thing yet!
Anyway, I was scrolling through the EqD sidestories post, and this one stood out to me, probably due to my lack of luck with the Wild Wasteland perk.
Anyway, I can't wait to read this, so I'll report back when I have!
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Thank you for trying it :3
As for the WW trait, You should see one when you do Barton Thorns unmarked quest, and Old World blues is full of them. Keep in mind that they aren't exactly paranormal, usually old movie references that you might not get.
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I'm too tight to buy DLC's.
Whelp, I'm here, so I'll get started and feed back when I'm done!
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I got the special editions that have DLCs included. Trust me though, they are totally worth it... Except Honest Hearts, which is only worth it for Joshua Graham, the perks, raised level cap, and Joshua Graham.
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Chapter 3 is going through some heavy editing, and a prereader broke his computer, but it should be out soon enough.
This chapter feels like it should've been called "below her garden" (though in a way, that IS 'beyond', I guess)
(on a related note, I love that song, and thank you for linking to the original, and not to any of the remixes!)
On to the story! I had a blast with this
Hah. Impervious to sarcasm.
Heh. Dem Three Old Ladies
Poor lad. You have no idea!
haha. Wow. There's really no one who likes that guy, is there?
That can't end well
Oh gods. Mole ponies. Brilliant!
Hah, lol
Umm... I think this guy needs a little more warning about the surface. Lack of radiation is hardly the same as "safe"
These guys are hilarious
I get the feeling that simply not having anything mushroom, insect or digging related already makes him special
King Soilsifter, huh? Welp. That's a pretty regal sounding name for a mole pony, I guess
Hah!
...cold water? wat?
Hah. I love the way these guys name things
Yup. Still loving it
This had me laughing so much harder than it should have
force field based melee weapons? Epic
GO GO GODZILLA! xD
Corrections:
-There's a load of places where the transitions from quotes to narration are missing their separating spaces. I think it's a Google Docs import issue.
-You also got a load of mismatched quotation marks... some are fancy curly “” ones, others are normal "" ones. This is usually caused by writing in Word (which replaces the quotes by the fancy ones) and using fimfic to edit later. I'd say, either replace them all with straight ones, or go through them and copy the correct curly ones to all places that need em.
> and amole pony mare
"and [a mole] pony mare"
> I gotta pay ‘me back fer what they did to mah wing.
"pay [‘em] back"
> than it’d be selfish not to
"then"? Or is this his accent or something?
> our adventure in Stable97
Needs a space between "Stable" and "97".
> Shovel stomped a hoof, imbedding it into the dirt.
embedding
> There was no joy in the laughter. It was the laugh of someone who had just realized that life was a joke and loss was the punch line.
This part needs to be un-italicized
> every bit of garbage he’d picked up on the way here , and Knight dropped a few land mines
Remove the space before that comma
> Or some reason, the ant was going down a different tunnel!
[For] some reason
> "I have so much to learn about you unicorns! and your magic once we're done with this adventure!"
That exclamation mark in the middle, after "unicorns", seems like it shouldn't be there.
> the other one imbedding itself in her neck
Again, embedding :p
> “Carrot.”Easy.
Another missing space after the quote, there.
I play World of Tanks with the pony mod.
This song gets picked in battle all the time (and usually it's the stupid version with the rap).
I thought I'd finally gotten it out of my head.
Thank you so much.
Thoughts I had while reading Chapter 2 but before I read chapter 3 (which I have read as of writing):
I like to imagine that everything Tricky is claiming to have done is actually true, and he's just having a bad time due to a series of circumstances in the now. Or maybe it's a Haruhi type thing where he keeps speaking things into existence without realizing he has that kind of power or something.
While it'll suck to see her go, I bet Stella's gonna die first in Click's place. Her paralleling Click so much will probably serve to jolt him and give a better idea of what to watch out for. Or something.
Moleponies are neat.
This story is getting more interesting. What next, a run-in with the Doctor?
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