*Sparknanator will continue this story*
(Rated teen for language)
Hi there, name's NC and I'm a Brony (duh)
Like everyone else, my biggest wish is to be in Equestria, and due to a magical Genie lamp, I'm finally there!
However, it turns out the Genie is the master of trolls as he says I never wished for how I wanted to look like when I arrive there and now I'm a one month old unicorn foal with brown coat, light brown mane and tail, blood red eyes and unable to talk!
My life is over.
(My first story, so please state in the comments when you spot a mistake and I'll fix it ASAP.)
Chapters (1)
I like this concept, please continue....
"That's Mama Rarity to you Twilight!"
Much improved, though you still need at the least a proofreader to catch stuff like this
1631885 Thank you for noticing that error
Well i like it
Welp. He's fucked.
Though technically, doesn't this mean he'll live longer then other people? Y'know, going from 19 back to 1 month with life ahead of ya?
1632284 You'll get the answer to that in later chapters^^
1633467 Dunno, I just got the idea.
He's going to age right? and rarity is going to give him a name because it will be pretty weird if she doesn't say his name once in a while.
1633681 Yes, she will give him a name. And about the aging part: wait for further chapters.
Why do you dislike rarity?
1633832 I never said I dislike her. I like each of the Mane 6, she's just my least favourite one
1631885 No, I like the original better. All that makeup is awful.
very original concept, the idea of one the mane 6 being a mother is pretty used already but even so the story is good.
My only recomendation, well it's more a warning, be careful with the stereotypes, i have already seen many good stories fall apart because of them.
Hmm... Intriguing... Please, go on. This story interests me.
1634142 What stereotypes for example?
1652602
That the character is lonely, someone who doesn't have friends, hated by his/her own parents or family, that a pony(usually a mare) falls in love with him/her at first sight, stuff like that. A lot of HiE fics are the same, the pony and human meet and two or three paragraphs later the are in love, in the next chapter they have sex and they live happily ever after. But considering that your fic doesn't have a romance cattegory i suppose you won't have problems with that, but in case you decide to put romance in the fic be careful with those stereotypes.
This is....interesting, im monitoring to see where it goes.
(Is Rarity truly ur least favorite of the mane 6?)
1658040 Not really, she's my 3rd favourite of the Mane 6^^ She's only the protagonist's least favourite
1653414 Thanks for the info^^ I can assure you, nothing like that will happen in this fic; it's a simple comedic story about a guy who got turned into a foal and tries to get his old form back.
I like this story
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WHY DO HAVE TO MISSPELL?
1694626 Oopsie
Certainly a fun twist on the classic human-in-Equstria story. IMHO going back a few years seems like a fair trade-off, certainly better than what happened to my character.
1633879 On a scale where would you place her with 10 being love and 1 being hate
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1721301 I'd say she's an 8
I want moar of this.
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plz.
1781779 Oh, there will be moar. I even started to write chapter 2 and also got some ideas for chapter 3. But at the momentI'm too lazy to write :P
There's your favorite, now continue please! I must know how it continues
Thank you for the story.
Not a bad start, hope to see what happens next.
awsome
This story sucked
2049980 That's why I stopped writing on it
Update I think it"s alright now. Make part 2!
Where is part 2?
2053164 Sorry, I cancelled it. I'm waiting for someone who wants to continue writing this.
I hope someone will continue this Story. She is Awesome! I Mean... Rarity as Mommy?
you know, its kinda hard for someone to take up the role for writing your story because it's like trying to finish someone else's painting only day can do it, I'm sure some might take up the roll, but if not I urge you to finish the story.
2049980 careful, RARITY IS WATCHING YOU.
is it really that bad? A big reason for being young again is just the very thing you wanted. No more wars, worries, stress, etc. Sounds good to me. lol
Hope somebody continues this.
I love these human turned to foal stories, especially this one, this ones a good one! Why was it cancelled?
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I'll write it for you if you'd like all though I'm an awful my grammer is terrible.
must. be. continued.
Make a God damn second chapter already.
But I guess Americans have more patients than Russians do.
3448410 Yes please continue this story I'm begin you