Being able to change forms at will just comes naturally for a changling. But when Rogue loses this ability, he is also released from Queen Chrysalis' telepathic Control-Link control over him.
After the Battle of Canterlot is over, and he's the only changling left in all of Canterlot, he sets out to track down the lavender unicorn responsible, to thank her for saving him.
Little does he know that he would have the chance to return the favor very soon.
But how will Twilight and her friends react to this?
What will the Princesses have to say?
How will his former Queen take his rebellion?
Is Rogue really alone in his resistance?
Chapters (5)
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Loved it
Gonna go eat some pie
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thanks
and great idea with the pie. i ate some too
1638530 I loooooooove pie
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pumpkin pie!
1638698 NO!! Apple pie
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of course!
how could i forget!?!
1640304 forget what?
Apple pie is awesome
Pie flavor!
Hey everypony! With this being my first fanfic and all I would really like it if you all would give me some pointers on stuff you notice
I will fix them later, I promise.
And yes, i know i made a lot of grammar errors
By the way, look forward to the forthcoming treck deep into the Changling Wastelands to find out just how different, and similar, the Changlings really are from the ponies, and a bit of their history as well.
And meet Chrysalis' daughter........
Enough spoilers.
Comment please!
want more. great story.
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thanks for the mustace seal of approval
have one for yourself
and more you shall have good sir
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Troll much?
-Shadow F.
1700079 no actually I don't
...Wait-that was it?!
...Okay, go on.
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don't worry, i plan on taking this story pretty far
im not stopping any time soon
The only grammatical mistakes I can recall are all in the comments you have made
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I actually went through and fixed all the ones i found by now
Hey everypony! Who would like some audience participation? I know I would!
I'd like some assistance with a few things.
First of all, does anypony have any ideas for what the changling city could be called?
Secondly, I will be needing as many changling names as I can get my hooves on. So please, any suggestions are helpful and appreciated. (OC's (maybe non-changling or even non-pony) might be accepted, just private message me their specifics)
thank you!
feedback is very much appreciated
This was good, but it was very short. I realize that it's hard to write details when you want to get the story moving, but you should have fleshed out the scenery more, put in more detail about the condition everyone is in, both in the flashback, and walking through the woods, and maybe have twilight interrupt him some, ask some questions.
Obviously this isn't my story, and it is entirely up to you if you want to change anything.
Changling names?
Flix
Flutter
Speck
Mandle
That about all I can think of
Great chapter
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It will be added soon.
I appreciate it a lot!
the shortness, I'm making the chapters short so I can post them sooner, but I do intend on making them longer, and more detailed.
I'll go through and add descriptions of the settings and characters before starting the next chapter so I can have some pratice and not make that mistake in the future.
Twilight was actually supposed to interupt but i got in a hurry and didn't take the time to find the right place.
Thanks so much for the feedback
thanks for reading!
and have a mustace for your feedback while youre at it
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Hey thanks!
names noted
Hmmm, Changeling City....
How about: Metamorphocia or Metamorpholis?
Changeling names: Drom, Darkie, Montouqe, Poison, Wizzle......aaaand that's all I can think of.
I hope you can use them.
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Thanks for the suggests,
i like
Thanks for reading and commenting
Majorly editing chapter 3(all of the fic actually). please bear with me
I will post a comment when im actually finished with each chapter, and then start on next chapter!
I love the story. If I get any ideas I will message
The edits hath been doubled!
Sorry bout this but i left out a few VERY important parts in chapter 3 Free
they are now fixed and present
Now for long process of editing the prologue and other 2 chapters
will say when each edit is complete on chapter title
Onward!
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How about Crunch? Or Shade? *cough cough my story cough cough*
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Subtle
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This is pretty awesome, keep it up!
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Thanks, much appreciated
Just you wait until I get to the main story, or rather, dual stories...
1907212 OOooooo
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Thought that would interest you
And it's not like I slipped in a comment that might tell you who the second protagonist is or anything like that...
From now on I will be posting important stuff pertaining to GR on my profile page.
Or rather Rogue and Melody will be...
Check it out please!
So far, so good!
As far as changeling names go...maybe something along the lines of Shell, Sneer, Exo, or other malicious/insectoid themed names?
Yeah I know, REAL original thought....
Changeling capital-city/"hive": Swarmhaven or just simply The Hive; last one sounds more sinister.
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I need as many as I can get my hooves on!
Thanks for the thoughts, and for the names!
As for the city, Ive already found a name...
But who would ever name it Metamorphica?......
And why?
Hey, everypony!
Are there any editors, prereaders, or fellow writers out there that would be willing to lend a hoof with my stories?
Any help is much wanted and appreciated, thanks.
You got some typos through the existing chapters, but that's about it.
Also, I am LOVING THIS.
Interesting.
Im little off to this story because he will be probably some kind og royalty or whatever, to big similarities to Chrysalis. Anyway gonna follow this story
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Royalty Rogue is not.
And about his uniqueness, wait till you meet the other changlings. They all have unique traits that make them different, not so dissimilar from the ponies.
Good, I like it... But... Fighting and explaining at the same time? Unnatural.
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thanks
The cockatrice was merely an annoyance though and interrupted, not rogue's fault.
It was a very bad start, everyone acted out of character:
1) Celestia is not a princess who would just execute prisoner, she did ot killed Discord after all.
2) Why would Shinning Armor be worried about Twilight safely from 1 lone changeling who was captured by 2 guards, Twilight and her friends fought 100 changelings and defeated them before they were defeated, and no one care when mane 6 went to face Nightmare Moon or Discord.
3) Twilight tried to warn her friend about Cadance but one listened, when she tried to tell every pony Cadance was evil, brother turned his back on her, friends left her and Celestia really believed that her student would mistake head-ache killing spell with brainwashing one, and in the end they were showed in they face that Twilight was right as she rescued real Cadance, so they all should be in huge guild for not believing her, so yea, Celestia saying to Twilight that she was foolish for trusting changeling is the most stupid think she would say, it just show total lack of respect for Twilight and she is acting like she learned nothing from the wedding.
4) Twilight would not want to hit Celestia right away, she would rather teleport herself and changeling away or levitate him one of fire range or just get between him and Celestia.
So yea, I am afraid your story is on poor start.
Story seems fine so far, just prologue was really bad.
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Thank you so much for your critique.
Honestly, I was excited and in a rush to post and didn't go through it that much.
I am definately going to edit and fix some isues before my next chapter.