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Haunted by memories of her past, The Great and Powerful Trixie returns to the scene of her greatest defeat. Will she find a new path in life, or will the past make that impossible?
A Twilight Sparkle / Trixie story, originally published in April of 2011. It is presented here untouched, without being updated to match canon.
Ohh i remember this story, wow have it been so long sense it where published?
I it feels like i read it just a few days ago but then again its one of the best twixie fics i have read.
Oh yea for the ones who just found this fic there are some side stories of this fic focusing around midnight
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im pretty sure there is a 3rd one as well but i cant remember it for the life of me
Enjoy
There are so many good qualities to this story, as others have already noted. However, the kiss comes out of nowhere. It's not properly built up to and is extremely difficult to buy into as a reader, since it happens the first day that Trixie is back. You need to let them interact for a few days in order for it to make sense. Twilight doesn't give any indication of being into Trixie, or mares at all for that matter, prior to the kiss. It just ends up feeling like the writer pushing them together and saying "Now kiss," than something that blossoms naturally.
You're not wrong with your criticism, as that was a complaint ponies had when I first let the story out, and it's a problem I have with the story now. If I were writing the story now, I would certainly have expanded on things before the kiss. My only defense is that I was a novice writer at the time, and the first part was only ever meant to be the only part, and I wanted it to end on a feel good note.
As it is, chalk it up to 'Sometimes ponies, they do the crazy things'. 
the third is Midnight and Shimmer's Guide to Dating
Ah yes, I remember this story... one of the first Twixie fics I ever read and thoroughly loved. <3 So good to see it finally made it here. :3 This is one of the stories that both really got me into fanfics in general, as well as shipping, and specifically a Twixie fan.
So much good here. Trixie talking in first-person, Trixie not fixated on revenge, Applejack not being a complete flankhole to Trixie... I so wish other Trixie fics could get this.
I agree, too many fics end up either Trixie being a bitch, or becomes someones bitch.
All the characters stay petty, and there's no real depth to them.
This, and the Lunaverse, are a refreshing change.
To people reading this, the author is a liar. He rates it as E with Twilight/Trixie, but it ends in a threesome and adult content. Warning you now before you get disappointed because of this asshole. I'm getting everyone I know to report this and have it removed.
In the time I have spent here in Ponyville, I have learned a great deal about the nature and magic of friendship. Now, by chance, I have learned an important new lesson, one about feelings beyond friendship, the lesson of love. I have fallen for someone, Princess, and I seek your blessing of our relationship. Her name is Trixie, and she has grown very dear to me. Please, when you are not busy, I would invite you to meet with her. I look forwards to your response.
Should it be "I have fallen for somepony, Princess...." or no?
Thank you for alerting me to this! You're absolutely right, it was a mistake on my part due to my unfamiliarity with the system, it does need to be Teen. Which I have just changed the story rating to. I hope that you can find something else to do with your time. Please stand down from high alert.
Have a good day now!
It's very hard to compare different stories, but if I had to rate every single pony fic I've read, Out in the Cold and Midnight series would definitely take a spot in my personal top 3. And Midnight is without a doubt the best OC.
Thank you for publishing this story in a place where I can like and favorite it once again! 
I read this back when it was first posted on EqD. It was one of the first I had ever read, along with Dawn of a New Day. I still only read a few here or there that really catch my eye, but I've always remembered this one. I even printed it out so I could re-read it again when I was away from my computer. I've only just now started writing myself. I doubt it will be anything as legendary as this masterpiece though.
Just finished the first chapter, and all I can say heck yeah. Since we didn't get to see Twilight's thoughts up to the point of the kiss, I'm glad the kiss didn't end up being Twilight's reaction to Trixie kissing her first. Plus the sentence "So Twilight did it instead" was a very pleasant shocker.
And now because of this story, I can never not think of Trixie having that past, nor can I ever not think of Midnight being her mother's name. The back-story just really fits for the character.
I thought Princess Luna's manner of speaking was out of character. Not that one needs her referencing herself as "we", but I just think she would have spoken a little less informally. I do gotta say I love when she's used as a source of advice that ends up solving a problem.
Also, ever since Princess Celestia's objection to the relationship, I've been wondering what makes the Princess think she can do anything about it anyway. Well...until that line about "dungeons" though that could be more over making a story of Celestia's life rather than the relationship with Twilight.
This is a really nice Twixie, I'm really enjoying reading it.
Don't worry too much about that yahoo. He did the same thing to my story, then when I asked for clarification, he ripped on me. I think he's a 4channer looking to stir up trouble, but he's so bad and obvious at it, that he just ends up looking stupid. I just checked his profile, and he hasn't even been back in 14 weeks. Guess he got bored and moved on. 
Anywho, this was a pretty nice story here. Some grammatical mistakes and misused words were sprinkled here and there (especially in the first two chapters), but nothing too egregious. It could benefit from a little more build up to the confession, but as it is, it can stand on its own legs. 
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