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this is for all the beards!!!

i plan to do several installments over the course of the story: so please check up every now and again for updates, .

It has become a funny sort of tradition among the males of equestria to not trim their facial hair during the month of November. Most of the mares just roll their eyes at the idea. But what happens when the flim flam brothers flood equesria with their newest flim flam facial follicle facilitating foam?

Malarkey ensues...

The mane six, and all the females of equestria take radical action... Except for Luna?!

Chapters (6)
Comments ( 110 )

happy November! show your spirit with mustaches!
:moustache::moustache::moustache::moustache::moustache:
yup
:eeyup:
god damn it
:facehoof:

Oh, what the hell have I stumbled across...

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Hay, I remember you!:rainbowderp:
You had that super sad pinky story! :pinkiegasp:
I liked that one :yay:
Keep doing those! I came dangeously close to tears on that and i need some kind of resolution!

Hope you liked the story :twilightsmile:

1548824 I certainly did, and I most certainly will! :twilightsmile: Glad for the recognition!

Ok.... I'm curious... I'm gonna probably regret this but.... Fave and Tracked....
~Skeeter TL

I feel your pain Big Mac.

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Oh... Didnt consider the creepy factor...
:twilightblush:
Sorry...
I just remembered the story and the avatar was memorable for some reason or anouther...
(sigh)
Im bored...
:ajbemused:
Gunna go read somemore now... Have a good one

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Hey now... I didn't mean it like that. This is gonna be an awkward kinda awesome.

I'm actually looking forward to the insanity.

~Skeeter (Participating in No Shave) T L.

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Oh:rainbowderp:
Oh:facehoof:
Buck sorry i thought it was a comment on the one comment i left with the other author... Sorry im a bit of a moron:twilightblush:
i rarely get positive feedback, so i guess i just assumed the worst... Sorry...:ajbemused:

...

Thanks i hope it lives up to expectations :pinkiesmile:

This is awesome. I love your writing style, but maybe get a pre-reader or editor? Just a few grammar mistakes that kinda took me outta the moment :ajsmug:

Hooray for No Shave November!

...

Even if, as a proud beard owner, for me is always a no shave day! :moustache:

:pinkiegasp:

Holy Bucking Celestias Shiney Flank Hole Rutting BATMAN!

:rainbowderp:

:twilightblush:

Im in the side thing! The side thing where they put the stories that people like!

(from lack of any other way to express the joy i feel i shout like a lunatic:flutterrage:, scaring the shit out of my roommate and his cat)

Veiws aside this makes this my best story ever! Buck sleep, writing more now!

:yay:
Thank you everyone!

"I thought of this story after cutting myself really, really badly--" :pinkiegasp::rainbowhuh::fluttershyouch: "--While shaving last night." :twilightsheepish::pinkiesmile:

gotta learn to read sentences more carefully.

Some nitpicks to grouse over a bit: "were" not "where" for past tense of "was", lavender is not a proper noun and should not be all caps, regardless of whether Twi's awesomness is deserving of putting her adjectives in all caps. Names however are proper nouns and as such Spike and Twilight should always be capitalized.

Like the idea however, have some Movember Mustaches :moustache::moustache::moustache::moustache::moustache:

That description. It actually hurt my eyes.

Hooray for John Travolta-resembling Spike!

hmm, I feel as though this will get really entertaining.

I have no facial hair for I have no face :trollestia:

But I shall commit to this, so have a few :moustache: :moustache: :moustache: :moustache: :moustache: :moustache:
FOR NOVEMBER!!!!:flutterrage:

I shall read this later.
I am currently in Health Class. :rainbowlaugh:

Hm. It looks like you have an interesting concept, but this needs work.

"But Twilight was not in the main room…where she had been only seconds before… no… wait… spike looked up to the ceiling and saw his Lavender legal guardian hanging from the ceiling by her horn, her eyes open wide in shock, her body curled in a little ball, shaking like Fluttershy.
The loud bang of the dragon’s entrance had startled Twilight so much that she had jumped right to the ceiling and imbedded her horn into it. "

The second part of that quote is completely unneeded. You basically told me that Spike had scared Twi and she launched herself horn-first into the ceiling twice. It slows down the story and takes the reader out of the otherwise pretty funny scene. There's a lot of excess wording as well, extra fat as it were, and in 1750 words, not a whole lot actually happens. Filling your paragraph with ellipses (...) isn't ideal, and you've got quite a few mechanical errors as well, but I'm not going to hold those too much against you.

This isn't the worst I've ever read, and you managed to keep me engaged through the errors until the end, so that's good, but you need to tighten things up a bit.

This ... this is awesome!
Can't wait for more.

I don't....what in the....oh for the love of....oh forget it

*walks out*

"Oh look at what we've got here brother of mine, it's the same in every town.
Ponies with bare chins and not a lock of facial around.
Maybe they don't know that there's really no need for this weary despair."
"That the key they need to solve this failed follicle fad you and I will share.":pinkiecrazy:

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:pinkiegasp:
I tried to get that to fit for like an hour!
:ajbemused:
Good one...

Anyways i know this one is kind of poor, but there is alot of nessisary set up for the next lot here so please please please just stick with it, it gets better! :fluttercry:

1551609 I'm not criticizing you, I love this so far, I just thought it was funny.:twilightblush:

So, why doesn't twilight sell magic created beards and mustaches? I mean, she could definitely get ALLOT of money it seams.

YOU CAN'T JUST STOP THERE!

I'm intrigued, I shall see where this goes; :applejackunsure:
Ciao :raritywink:

"Lunas presents had that" presents should be presence. The chapter was good though, I feel like those with vivid imaginations will have fun with this one.
Please continue darling :raritywink:

1551437 Did you... Did you make a custom meme just for this???

1552417 Nope. I found it on the webs as usual. Apparently, someone else did. :pinkiecrazy:

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Its only suggestive if you know what its suggesting:rainbowwild:, besides its funny:trollestia:...people like that :twilightblush:


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Im not stopping, i'll update very soon, im in editing for 3 now (yes i do proofread this stuff, i just suck at it:rainbowkiss:)

Hope you all enjoyed, updates coming... :moustache:

I smell beards coming up...

Besides, DAT COVER IMAGE!

No matter how the story goes... It would be.... Amusing to end it on November 30. And end it epically.

A few grammar problems, but otherwise I'm liking it. A lot.

~Skeeter T L

I only looked because of the cover image, and I'm very happy I did.

can't wait for more!

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To be honest im not sure... I know for fact that the story will end with november, but 3 is taking longer than expected (patching afew plot holes). But yes, this story will end with this mounth... I guess the epicness really depends on how much build up i can do, which should be a fair bit as there are a lot of things happening all at once.

Thanks for reading, more to come :twilightsmile:

Also, with the new season starting up agian in like what? A week? We may find some more epicness!

Dat cover image indeed.

Nice to know Celestia liked hookers in the past, makes her seem a little more normal.

Luna has a thing for beards huh?

Who wants to bet that she goes on a rampage through ponyville after every stallion gets epic facial hair?

Oh come ON! No song?

Sing! Sing! Sing!

Entertaining, but there are some grammatical problems that get rather jarring. I would pay close attention to capitalization if I were you, and there are several places where you confused some homophones (for instance, waist/waste and where/were). Those are usually missed by the spellcheck, so they need to be watched for particularly carefully. ...Now that my bout of grammar nazism is over, my compliments to you for a truly entertaining premise that looks to have excellent further potential. I eagerly await the next chapter!

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Sorry about that, i actually did most of this chapter and the next on a word processor without any correction stuff to catch that... And dislexics are jews to grammer nazis, but im here to get better, and have been, really.

Thanks for the cc, it helps keep me motivated

Hope you like the next chapter:twilightsmile:

Funny stuff.

Although the lack of capitalization throughout the chapter was pretty annoying.

"kneaded more doe" Dough is what you're looking for, there were a few others. A good pre-reader would be able to catch a lot of these for you. Also a name like Twilight should always be capitalized.
Ignoring these little grammar snafus, you've got an interesting little premise here; can't wait to see where it goes.
Ciao darling :raritywink:

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I just now got one, and i will ad that to my list...:rainbowderp:
Thanks:twilightsmile:
More coming soon:rainbowdetermined2:

i think i got everything... editing wise, sorry

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