A small challenge turns into a full blown competition in Ponyville, and Rainbow Dash enters in hopes of proving she can take on any challenge given to her. The challenge: Who can down the most pancakes in one sitting! Can she wolf enough flapjacks to prove she's still the toughest pony in all of Equestria? Bring some extra napkins and find out!
Note: List of characters may be altered as the story goes on, but the category and content rating shall stay the same. Critiques and/or comments are encouraged. Please say something if you can!
Tags: Food, Breakfast, Meal, Pancakes, Apples
Chapters (3)
plenty funny, there are a few mistakes in the text, though overal: well done story keep it up
finally another story that's a good read without having to threaten with the end of the world, great job
121112 I agree! Lots of sad or dark fictions recently. I appreciate the comments!
This is a really cute and funny story, and I especially liked the part where Dashie eats the waffles. Don't be discouraged if this story doesn't get a lot of views, it's probably because it has an OC pony as the perspective character. That's a hard sell no matter who you are. Take this to heart: I've seen a lot of writers over the years and I can tell that you have talent. Keep developing that talent and it will always be a source of pleasure.
152844 Thank you very much! I appreciate that!
This has promise...please by all means continue.
Looks like a nice chapter, you have a lot of problems with tense switching though.
319347 Nevermind what I said before! I thought you meant how I was switching between two different things going on at the same time, not when things were described happening!
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hehe, next time I'll try to point out what I mean.
"You can't eat all those pancakes."
"Forget you I can't eat all these pancakes."
I'm curious to read more of this.
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Thanks, I'll be sure to have a new chapter out soon.