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Feel like finding a more fun way to soak up in the sun other than going to your nearest lake or swimming hole? Well then, look no further than The Pond! That’s right! The Pond! Equestria’s newest, funnest, and wettest waterpark, ever!

Catch some surf in the first ever mare-made wave machine. Take in the beautiful scenery as you float down our peaceful lazy river. Then you can slide down the scariest, most intense, most awesome water slides you have ever been on!

So what are you waiting for? Come on down to The Pond, where everypony can take a dip!
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Short description of story: A sunny day out at Equestria's first water park!
Characters Involved: Pinkie Pie, Rainbow Dash, Applejack, Fluttershy, Lyra, Vinyl Scratch (DJ PON-3).
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Longest story I've ever written. I know for a fact there are some errors hidden in there, so I'm looking for any pre-readers to help spot and fix them. Ways to make the story flow better (or to make Pinkie even more silly) would be greatly appreciated. I'll message the Google Docs link to any who volunteer.

Thanks a bunch, and enjoy!

Chapters (7)
Comments ( 10 )

Pinkie always saves the day.

Since I'm the only one to have commented on this particular chapter, let me say that you're doing a tremendous job. It's fun, a simple story, no big moments (and that's good because this particular fic doesn't need big moments), but still detailed and really well-crafted.

I'm gonna put this on watchlist.

408703 Thank you very much! :pinkiehappy: It's probably my best work so far!

Great fic, exactly what I wanted. Something happy and as someone said above doesn't have too many big things happen. However the ending seems a little sudden... not gonna spoil anything.

450472 I appreciate the comment, and thanks for telling me your thoughts on the ending.

Great story so far, but one little comment. The story needs a proofread desperately. It keeps changing tense from past tense to present tense and then back again. And there are a couple of sentences that are run-ons and or change tense back and forth within them.
Other than that, I'm enjoying this story a lot !

nice .. didnt expect Fluttershy would play the Filly Flashed and so awesome that i feel like i should really want to join and play it .. never play a giant slide before..

570830 Thanks! I'm looking into having someone help me revise the story, or for me to revise it myself.

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Also, there are some scale issues. A miles-long line is absurd, and if it required hours for everyone to get through the line and into the park...well, it's not really worth getting in at 7 pm if the park closes at 8, is it?

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